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Rainbow Dash keeps putting herself in danger and you can't help but be broken up by the idea of losing her. When she risks herself again, during a dangerous game of Freefall Chicken, you decide to tell her how much she means to you.
Excellent Story- 5 stars easily and seal of Approval for this story to be read by the everyone that ever lived.
I simply used the Insert Image function. The original plans for this fic was to use each chapter as one big picture each and send them around imageboards (like FimChan, Ponibooru and, if missing leaving out the Mature sub-chapter, Ponychan). I compromised, and now it's here in both image AND writing style. I found the vectors by searching for MLP Vectorclub on DeviantArt, where they have a great collection of vectors free to use.
Thanks, I respect your distaste for the ordinary "set-scene-and-f'ck" clopfics, which is why I made the sex scene totally skippable and non-vital to the story for those who don't wish to read it. The fact that somepony dislikes clopfics, yet likes the story as a whole, as it was meant to be told, means I'm doing something right, so thank you very much for your thoughts and support pal, you've made my day! 
I try to make them as neutral as I can while still making the character interesting. For example, it's gonna be hard to know what decision each reader would take in this situation, so I kinda have to give "you" a personality that may or may not fit the reader. Sometimes an assigned gender is required too.
As such, in the upcoming fics I make, I've given a different "you" to a different pony each time. For example, Rookie here was a pegasus who loves Rainbow, the next one might be a humble earth pony meeting Fluttershy for the first time or a caring unicorn who stands up for Derpy when she's bullied (totally not future fic spoilers, hint hint), as they're never the same "you". Sometimes it's gender-neutral, sometimes it isn't. Honestly, gender shouldn't matter, so long as the story itself is engaging and fun to read, that's what I believe. Cheers for reading!
Indeed. What your doing here actually takes a lot of talent (I'm told) and you pull it off perfectly. A completely open character that evades bland and is capable of keeping interest is rather difficult. The fic I mentioned was a Mass Effect one, involving a BJ, with Shepard being gender-neutral, but that is the closest I've seen to something like this, and isn't nearly as engaging. 10/5
No. Read the monologue from RD to the... protagonist (I couldn't think of a better word):
"Of course, I wasn’t there to see it myself, but the look on little Scoot’s face when she was telling me all about it? Never saw her so terrified and excited all at once, I wish I could‘ve taken a picture!”
I'm pretty sure it's an unidentified OC. That, or just make your self-insert pony (c'mon, we all have one) a Pegasus, and there you have it.
Concluding comments:
Brief, but definitely well written. You're a great author, if a pervert. (Hell, I'm one, too. I just read 3.5 and liked it.)
You already rated the story as mature, so having an extra warning might have been superfluous, but I can imagine a few people will respect you for it.
Have you heard of the Sensual Fiction General? They specialize in second-person shipping. They're real pros, and some really great people, too. I'm not sure how much they are into clop in general, but they dig the shipping.
Thanks for reading. Yes, sometimes I need to put a bunch of warnings before it, even if it already has some. I remember putting three or four warnings behind this fic elsewhere once and still getting grief from people who were "shocked and appalled" by it. I mean, geez! So I couldn't be too careful, you see. That's why it's a skippable half-chapter so I can also use the excuse "well, you didn't HAVE to read it!" :P
Anyway, I'm much more familiar with the SFG than you think, since I'm in several of their collections and friends with most of the group! Cheers for spreading the word about us anyway!
I hung out on their IRC channel for quite a while until I had some... issues with a senior member. It's in the past. I participated in a couple flashfic sessions but I never contributed anything to any of their collections, and I never really saw anything of their collections.
As for the neigh-sayers, well, sometimes you have to tell them to F off. It's rated mature, and that should be enough. At that point, they're just looking for something to be offended by, and there's a special circle in hell for this type of person.
> "If you haven’t got a Rainbow Dash fetish by now, then I am very disappointed in you."
> MFW the author isn't gonna be disappointed
Daaaarrrrnnnnn youuuuuuuuuuuu!! 
Oh well, guess it can't be helped.
Now Excuse me, I must be off to a new wonderful place called SFG. 
Hell, if RD would do that to me.. this is how I would look like:
HELP!
Only thing I can think of now:
I see you have an adamant hate for straight sex?
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the first-person character is scootaloo right? you read this from the point of view of scootaloo? maybe when she's around age 15?
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