interesting keep it UP :)

>>12125791212579

Thanks! I'm getting into the groove of college, but I wrote a few chapters over the summer, so I'll keep working ahead and try to get a semi-regular schedule going for this.

I fell a shit storm  coming

definitively because of oblivious Twilight   

>>12126741212674 That's good to know , just take your time, what you do in college?!

Tagged and watched.

Enjoyin' it so far!

>>12127111212711

I'm studying political science, and I've got a heck of a lot of extracurriculars lined up. I'm blocking off at least a few hours every week for this, though, so hopefully I can crank out chapters at a decent rate.

Could use a bit of paragraph spacing(indents or newlines) to be easier on the eyes, but great!

"“Howdy, Twilight. How’s it goin’?” she asked genially, shaking her friend’s hand and leading her into the restaurant."

Shouldn't that say 'hoof'? Only mistake I found, the rest of it was a good read. Oblivious Twi is best Twi!

>>12133911213391

Thanks for pointing that out! It looked different in the story editor, so I didn't notice until you said something. I'll fix that right away.

>>12135381213538

Fixed.

Looks like its gunna be a good one nothing better than a love triangle to catch the eyes

Most intriguing. I support Twi/Jack as well as Twi/Shy, so this should be a very interesting tale.

This looks very promising. I like!

Haven't seen a story with this kind of triangle

Liked and Fav'd for upcoming ship-nanigans

(secretly hoping for TwiJack+TwiShy ending to triple the fun)

I like where this is going and I can't wait to see more of it.  Here's hoping that you have extra chapters already written and you're just spacing them out to torment us.

Minor correction:  "The sun was continuing on its log descent", I'm assuming that was supposed to be "long descent".

>>12182341218234

Fixed! And I do have some chapters written, plus I intend to set aside at least a few hours a week for writing. At the very least, I'd like to do a chapter a week, hopefully more.

Thanks for the positive feedback, everybody. Hopefully this story stays high-quality throughout. Even I don't know where it'll end up at this point, so it should be fun to see who ends up with who.

Interesting triangle, looking forward to reading more.

So, this chapter doesn't really have a ton of happy to balance the awkwardness and unpleasantness, but don't worry, next chapter will be more upbeat. Feedback, as always, is appreciated, and if anyone is interested in being a prereader for me, PM me and we can work something. I could use someone to help with quality control.

>>12480981248098

And evidently that chapter didn't properly post, and I just realized that.

Well, I meant to publish this last weekend, but I guess late is better than never. I should published (and I mean actually publish) another chapter this weekend, too.

Damn it Twi, get back in there! And Flutters, grow a pair, didn't Iron Will teach you anything?!

I fear Fluttershy might get hurt in this fic! IF such a thing happens, I shall come for your virtual head!

>>12703671270367

She said no?

I heard go!

Aww, poor Fluttershy.

Looking forward to more!

Darn, poor Flutters just couldn't pluck up the courage to tell her....

Damn . . . shot through the heart. And Twilight's to blame. She gives love a bad name.

Youch, this was brutal. Can't wait for the weekend update!

Ouch........my heart......she be broken in sympathy for Fluttershy.

sad crying Fluttershy.... so many feels...

Twilight, that was a dick move.

You should know better than to mess with Fluttershy. You don't want to see her when she's sad, do you?

That was surprisingly crafty and manipulative of you, Twilight. Nice avoidance techniques. I wonder if Rainbow Dash will get in on the loop and how much chaos and misunderstanding she would throw into the mix.

Twilight, didn't we learn something about clever, roundabout plans?

Eagerly awaiting further developments!

Two corrections:

"I can't imagine she cares must for propriety and the like."  - should be "much"

"One of the bunnies. He has me a little concern; that's all." - should be "concerned"

>>12882641288264

You, sir, are a gentleman and a scholar. Thanks!

Why do I get the feeling there's going to be some massive misinterpretations down the line?

Poor Flutters.

Ow. This hurts me... but I must read on!

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

Dagnabit Fluttershy! You've got to talk to somepony about these things! Argalurgalurr! (I can't growl)

Very interesting. Definitely keeping an eye on this!

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

Late night posts are magic, apparently. If I'm really feeling productive this weekend, y'all might get a second chapter on Sunday, but no promises. As always, feedback is appreciated, and I hope you guys enjoy it.

interesting i will fav to see where this goes

Well honestly it's anyone's game here. Both Fluttershy and Applejack are vying for the prize that is Twilight's flanks.

'Jackie' is likely a nickname that either AJ's parents or RD used for her at some stage.... Based on it being grief rather than emotional trauma, I'd have to go with the parent theory.

Anyway, nice work with this. Nice to see AJ appreciating Twilight in a new light, though AJ's self sacrificing nature will likely prove to be a problem for any potential romance.

Regardless, an excellent read.

I've always enjoyed AJ's and Twilight's relationship on the show...  There's nothing romantic about it (obviously), but it's noticeable that they rely on each other a lot and are the first ones they turn to when they need help.  As such, I really enjoyed their interactions this chapter...  I think their enthusiasm for working together came through, as well as their quirks and differences.  

Weeeee. This is awesome! I'm giggling like an imbecile over here and I couldn't be happier! Some excellent allusion to AJ's past in here, enough that you kind of think you know what happened, but just maybe, just maybe you don't. Loving it.

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!!

>>13181941318194

Who knows? We might find out which theory is correct by the time this story is through.

>>13185371318537

I'm glad to hear it. I always feel like the two are a natural match as friends in terms of being hard-working, dedicated ponies. We'll see if that leads to anything more soon enough, I'd expect...

>>13192181319218

I'm so glad you're enjoying it. I had a great time writing this chapter.

>>13176131317613

And what a prize they are!

Touche.

>>13197941319794

Even Twilight!

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Loved this chapter! The pacing and buildup are perfect. Twilight is often portrayed in fanfics as clueless outside of booksmarts. Here, it's more believable: inexperience with romance plus the fact that no one's sure she's into mares keeps the disbelief in check.

Minor corrections:

"Fluttershy was acting like me moving one was the end of the world" - should be "moving on"

"I should be thank you, really." - should be "be thanking you" or "I should thank you, really."

>>13202781320278

Once again, you come to my rescue. Thanks, and I'm glad you're liking it.

Early updates? What is this madness?

This chapter was a ton of fun to write, so I hope it's at least partly as fun to read. In case you don't notice, I tried making a funny in there, so let me know if that worked at all.

Bonus points for anyone who spots the Doctor Who reference.

Fluttershy crying?

  . . . .

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Sorry if it is too big . . .

I predict nothing but hurt feelings. Big Mac is the only one in the right.

Oh you are mean. TwiJack is one of my favourite pairs and I want to see more of it, but I also don't want Flutters to how cruel of you.

i sense a shit storm is a coming and Fluttershy, AJ and Twilight are going to be in the middle of it

Oh boy, this is gonna get messy. And not in the fun way either. I hope this ends well for all three.

Well, good news for Fluttershy is that she made the short list of not-rejected-immediately possible romantic partners.  The bad news being she didn't top the list.  Personally, I think AJ and Twi make the cuter couple here, but I look forward to seeing how it all unfolds.

Pfft, "That's what she said" joke

I certainly stopped reading and went all,"wait, what? Oh, okay, heh"

It's nice that AJ's finally going with the flow

I'm sure there will be many, like (), feels.

Many feels.

Many.

Feels.

(Only noticed that, "I mean, either names fine." should be "name's", but otherwise really good chapter)

I know it's gonna hurt Fluttershy, but I find myself still rooting for Twi/Jack.

Sorry, I just find that they work better together. Like Twi said herself, Fluttershy and her just don't have the right dynamic for a romantic relationship, but Twi and AJ do.

I just can't read this anymore. It's a decent story, but I can't stand seeing a hurt Fluttershy, even if it is just in fanfiction. Sorry.

>>13446001344600

If that's how you feel, I can't stop you. I'd just like to let you know that there's no sad tag on this story for a reason. It'll work out in the end. How exactly it does is what I'll leave the reader to find out.

Yay! Although I felt pretty bad for Applebloom. She just wanted to be a part of the goings-on!! Sorry sorry, brings back bad memories of my youth as the youngest.

Awesome chapter. Loved the discussion between AJ and Big Mac, and how you showed Twi's internal monologue first, then jumped back in time. Excellent storytelling. Definitely looking forward to more!

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

An update?

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Late night publishing is the best kind of publishing. I may very easily have missed glaring typos or nonsense in this chapter, but hopefully it turned out largely okay. I tend to focus on dialogue and introspection more than action in my writing, so this is out of my comfort zone. That said, I hope it turned out okay, and don't hold back on criticism, constructive or otherwise.

This chapter covered way less ground than I initially thought it would, but I think it'll fit in well by the end. And now I'm rambling, so good night all!

>>13679571367957

Yes! I'm excited too! Hope it doesn't disappoint.

"In the midst of the clear blue sky, Rainbow Dash found his target:" Suddenly Rainbow Blitz makes a cameo

The stunt scene in general has a few instances where you refer to Rainbow as a male.

Yes! Just as I find an amazing story, it gets updated!

Can't wait for the next chapter!

At least Shy's cheered up some.

>>13679581367958

"I may very easily have missed glaring typos or nonsense in this chapter, but hopefully it turned out largely okay."

Uh-oh, look what I found... (Warning! Warning! Long comment ahead!)

Except, now that he thought about it, that was sort of dumb.

keeping herself slim and aerodynamic as he plummeted toward the ground.

She kept her eyes close, opting instead to let her instincts guide her.

To Fluttershy, the excitement register as fear more than anything.

blowing Fluttershy's hair as she came within mere feet of the her nervous spectator.

Rainbow Dash opened his wings less than thirty yards from the ground.

To her relief and to her utter glee, it did, The clouds, pulled outward by the winds she created,

When Rainbow whipped the into a constantly spinning ring,

Think I got 'em all. I dunno, I didn't really search avidly for them; I just happened to notice them while reading. Good story though, lookin' forward to the next chaptah.

Haha  Applebloom! Good one!

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>>13682471368247

I noticed too.

All the Rainbow Dash/Fluttershy time is really dragging on.

I honestly just found myself skimming a lot of this.

I get the feeling Shy's gonna spill her guts to Rainbow over this meal, which'll cause friction between Rainbow and AJ if and when Rainbow finds out about Twi's feelings for AJ.

However, come on Twi/Jack!

>>13682471368247

>>13684251368425

Okay, so now I know not to post chapters when I'm halfway asleep. Thanks for the corrections!

Hmm, maybe Flutter's attention is wandering a bit, or could she be hatching a plot to make Twilight jealous?  Updates anticipated!

Couple of minor fixes:

"Well, are you busy today." - should probably be "Well, are you busy today?"

She felt brush past her haunches before landing right behind her - maybe this should be "She felt something brush past her haunches "

>>13696731369673

Woops! Thanks. Fixed... now!

interesting

For some reason I though this would be a fic when I read the description. I was pleasantly surprised.

Is this going to end up as

I don't get it the "That´s what she said" joke.

>>13805571380557

It's mostly about "plowing," but Apple Bloom is really just sort of using any excuse to say it. She just wants to belong.

Special thanks to The DJ King for proofreading this chapter. It's definitely more polished than it would've been without his help.

I really like this chapter (I'm not sure if I've disliked writing any of them so far, but I'm biased ), so hopefully you all enjoy it too. As always, feedback and corrections are most definitely appreciated.

Oh this is wow........hmmm.......I'm conflicted now.......AJ and Twi look cute together but so would Flutters and Twi being together........Gaahhhhh I hate choices....*prays I never get stuck in such a situation*

"If this is what love is like, I hope I never have to deal with it."

Dashie, my dear, when the time comes, you'll hope something else.  Count on it.

Applejack, you dummy! Didn't you take anything away from what Big Macintosh told you?

i sense a love triangle somewhere in the future here

Threesome. The perfect solution.

>>14014871401487 What he said.

Another great chapter. Definitely looking forward to more.

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

Oh AJ.....

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Much as I like Fluttershy, I'm afraid my vote remains for AJ/Twi. They just work so perfectly together.

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Maid café

'One foot in front of the other'

Huh... made AJ cry

I can already see this going AppleSpark (or at least it seems more plausible than FlutterSpark at this point)

>>14024921402492

"Foot"? What are you talking about? I don't see that... (Fixed. Thanks for pointing that out. )

My God.

Just when you think things can't get more complicated, the universe will always throw a screwball at you.

"C'mon! What've you got the lose?" The off-hand way in which Rainbow spoke unnerved Fluttershy, but she couldn't quite grasp why.

got to lose isn't it?

Darn it AJ, you can't just run from this.

>>14009641400964

Trust me, it is a horrible situation.

First kiss in 2 chapters.

*Slams 10 bits on the table*

LET'S DO THIS!

Another huge thanks to The DJ King! Not only did he help make this chapter sound better than ever: he also got it back to me so I could post it early! A bit of a shorter chapter this time around, but I didn't want to force more words just for the sake of length. Look for the next chapter over the weekend.

Well, I guess that answers why AJ suddenly turned cold when Twilight mentioned that nickname..... Poor AJ.

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i really want to see how this ends up.

Hoo boy.......this is just a big old bomb of drama and sadness and all other sort of nasty feeling things waiting to go off......and we only got RD to defuse it for now. No offense to RD but......ya I think the statement 'We're boned' applies to how that will go down. I can only hope RD can do it or at the very least lessen the blow up.