FIRST!!!!!!

edit: It is true that the stars are symbols of many things in several myths

you are modeling the Zebrican myths after Africa's natives lore aren't you?

and so far so good, man I missed your writing

Just got thumbs up number three. I feel special to hold a high place in such an amazing story, now. Reading time!

1st again!!!!!!  

edit: A new spell, blackmail, character development, and making Einstein roll over in his grave? This so awesome!!!!

and that last part, curse video games for tainting our minds full of rpg style lists

Awesome.

Not only is everything paced well, and done in a very nice format. The last bit with the notes on the party makes it feel almost like a game, and just that much more enjoyable. Well done, Seven. Well done.

>>12127211212721 It very much is game inspired, so I'm glad that the notes were making the right impression. I'm glad you've enjoyed it thus far.

Also inspired a bit by Fallout Equestria, as well.

Like it so far. The game perk aspects are always fun. You gonna add more tags to the story as it goes on?

>>12128201212820 Yep... and characters too.

I spy a spelling error!!

"You try flying a quarter tonne of flowers halfway across Ponyville in the sweltering heat.”

I'm not a huge expert on grammar but that doesn't seem right to me...

and the way Twi is writing in that tome reminds me of Final Fantasy/Pokemon Ranger

>>12128251212825 Beast.

>>12128341212834

A tonne is equal to about 1,000 kilograms, mate.

>>12129471212947 sorry, I sometimes question words I don't understand

>>12130891213089

It's understandable, I was under the impression that tonne was a misspelling until a few months ago.

let me guess, you one of Seven's editors?

it seems that i got something else to read that i know ill like thanks

the Mother of all Alicorns

Lauren Faust is in danger?!? NOOOOOOOOOOO!

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Oh, man. This is awesome stuff. I very much look forward to reading more.

This is great so far, and I love the game notes at the end of the chapters, they add a nice touch.

The extra information at the end is pretty similar to what's in 'The Legend of Echo the Diamond Dog'.

I love it.

Also, is it possible that tags could be added to the story?

Because I really don't know if you're going to go anywhere with that 'awkwardness-towards-Braeburn', or you're just keeping it in for the sake of awkward comedy.

It just feels like there could be a potential shipping; one which I would whole-heartedly support.

>>12253141225314 I add tags as are needed. Same with characters.

Sweet baby luna is this a sequil I smell and THIRD

I found you through your Lyra fic, and I am glad I did. I love your stories.

Amazing!!!! Glad to see you're back, SevenFates! I totally loved this, great beginning, and I see you're doing quite a good job keeping grammar and spelling under control.

I love this! The plot is going swimmingly. By the way...

"The filly was the best in ponyville at the moment, and she couldn’t wait for Rainbow Dash..."

Ahem, Ponyville.

And didn't Goldenrod used to be a unicorn Well, it does seem to be more appropriate if he was a pegasus for this.

Love how this is going, and the log that Twi writes in the end makes it seems so awesome, almost like a video game!

Oh, I see, so that's why Goldenrod's a pegasus! Loving this so much! Can't wait for more!!

"...say, Star Swirl the Bearded―had been offered a step into godhood?"

I'm pretty sure it's spelled "Starswirl" but maybe that's just me.

Going great, can't wait for chapter 4!

>>13223001322300 Eh, you say potato, I say potato. Oh, and I think you mean Chapter 3.

>>13223181322318 Yeah, Chapter 3.

I have a bad habit of counting the prologue as a chapter.

>>13221001322100

Did you read the end of Displaced? His current form as a Pegasus is explained there, as are a lot of the connecting elements to this story. You might want to go back and read it again.

Also, CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS BLACKMAILERS YAY! Don't you dare give them that idea, Scootaloo, don't you dare...

And the RPG list at the end is pretty sweet. Actually, for a lot of stories, something like that (a quick summary of the previous chapter in RPG or similar form) isn't a bad idea, especially while the story is being written, so people can remember the previous events when a new chapter is added.

>>13624761362476 Oh, is that so? I forgot all about that! I read Displaced a while ago, and I've read a few more fanfics between reading this and the last book. Thanks for the reminder.

I like how Goldie gets all flustered around Braeburn.. is that gonna be frequent in this story? :3

........... For some reason, when I heard "laughing mountain", I thought of an old bottled water commercial involving a volcano and a dinosaur.

>>13979801397980 Oh, the Volvic mineral water commercials. I remember a whole arseload of YTPs being made from those.

Yuss!

It's been so long since the last update, I had to reread the entire story. I enjoyed every second of it.

So Strongheart joins the party and leaves a millisecond later. Well, okay then.

Why am I getting a serious Legend of Zelda vibe about these 'temples' they are heading for? Seriously. Four temples, each with it's own element of fire, water, earth, and going to assume wind. Each one has an artifact related to said elements, and each artifact is being guarded by the four beings brought down from the stars... Eeyup, total LoZ right there.

>>16626331662633

LoZ had more than four temples though, you sure you aren't thinking of Final Fantasy?

>>17907501790750Haven't played that many FF games. And I don't mean exactly 4 temples. All LoZ games have the original 3 (grass, fire, water) then go on to other temples. Just saying the elemental temples sounds like LoZ. And btw, Spirit Tracks has 4.

Twilight forgot to set the loot master

Unless Twilight already set it to free for all

cancelled what where am i what dimension am i in????