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The town of Appaloosa is under some tough times. The buffalo have stopped coming, bandits harrass the good ponies of the town, and the town deputy has mysteriously gone missing. Private is called to the settlement in order to solve the case with the help of an old friend. But the desert has claimed many a pony before Private, will he be able to face the challenges ahead? Or become a victim himself?

This story is dedicated to Kkat, my inspiration to have me write fan fics in the first place. If it wasn't for her and her brilliant masterpiece that was Fallout: Equestria I never would've wrote myself. I cannot thank her enough for writing such a superb story that to this day effects my writing style. Consider this the greatest thank you I can give.

Note: there will be an appearance of a character from another fan fic in this story. I want to remind everypony that this appearance is to be considered non canon in that story. This is simply how I imagine the scene with this character.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 125 )

Ooh, another detective! Homicide branch...

I can imagine a seen with bandits like that South Park episode when the tour camp gets raided.

"We need a telephone to call for backup!"

"They're ain't no fancy smancy telephones in 1864!"

1212967Somehow I don't think finding a telephone will be an issue here. But yeah this story is a little less serious then my last couple. I wanted something a bit more light hearted

Bloomy running off with a maple tree? Eh, still a better love story than Twilight

1215048Them maple trees I tells ya! They steal all the women! Wait...Applejack stop writing my comments!! :ajsmug:

Damn...fucking dark ending there ...

I like that, the more violence the better!:pinkiecrazy:
Just not Michael Bay level though...

1218650I don't want people to start throwing up

1218663 A typical Michael Bay movie:

Emotional seen with plenty of room for character developmeEXPLOSSIIIOOOOOOOOOOOON!!:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

1218811I at least have characters with some depth...I think I've only had two explosions in the entire series so far...

Damn bandits are skinning everything! I really like how you're not afraid to kill of kids, like other authors. Anyway another fantastic chapter!

1224592It's grim, I'm not going to lie that I'm starting to push the teen rating with this one. I think I can get away with it by not describing in detail all that happened to the buffalo

1224599 indeed, gore is ok as long as you dont go into overly detailed about it, you should pass on the T

1225046That's good...what do you think of County by the way?

1225060 She's a great add to the list. She works well with Private as a detective, plus drunk her is hilarious.

1225249I was hoping to nail that part of hers, she's a fun character to right because she's brand new. Also I had a lot of fun coming up with her dialogue while she was drunk as hell. But she can be sweet and kind and even insightful when she's sober. Sadly...she likes alcohal too much

Party hard Private!

I have a feeling Voice is going to be a bit illusive like Cardinal's grandmother.

1230452Sometimes what you are looking for is right in front of you...:raritywink:

1230456 God damnit! Meh I'll just wait till its revealed and scream PLOT TWIST!:twistnerd:

D'awww, everyones happy!

For now...

I think Applesnack is Voice, but you like to pull the rug under my assumptions...

1230929Just so you know...Applesnack is a character in another popular fan fic...hint: The author has this story dedicated to her

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH *rips hair out* DON'T MAKE ME THINK OF THAT STORY!!!!!!!!!!

1232499Never actually could get to the ending, I could only read it for stretches at a time it was so darn long.

1232530My story? I still have at least two more chapters

1232530I know how it ends I just didn't read it

1232840I know bad right, so I haven't heard you comment in a while, what do you think of the recent cases?

That couldn't work though! AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

I thought you said this would be a "short" chapter? 2500 words long doesn't seem very short.

Howdy and welcome to yer SUUUBCONSCIOUS!

Littlepip, Littlepip...WHAT IS SO FAMILIAR ABOUT THAT NAME?! Was it in one of your cases?

Also you don't actually have to censor fucking for a T rating.

1240156No, look up the author I dedicated this fic to, you'll find out about Littlepip and why I dedicated this to Kkat in the first place

1240172 Huh. I missed the main fucking character of Fallout Equestria's name. Nice job there, DarkSkyz!

Nice homage at the end! Another great case closed!

Now, question time!

Will we be seeing more of Applesnack and County?

Will Luca become part of the team?

1242104To answer the first question County will make an appearence in later stories especially in flashbacks because she worked with Private prior to all of this. Applesnack...I don't know I'd feel like I'd be stealing from Kkat if I kept using him but I will reference him from time to time. Luca is officially Private's pet...Angel is going to be terrified of him

Nice song. I remember hearing the real version at the beginning of battlefield 3

1248575I was listening it all the time I was writing this story so I figured why not put it in?

1225301 county reminds me of me when my friends are in love in fact i sang that exact song so beautiful :fluttercry:

1589166 the song that private was singing or some variant of it The philosopher mentioned it

1589212Tis the song called "God's gonna cut you down" by Johnny Cash, reworded for ponies of course

So wait, the Equestria Noir 'verse becomes the FO:E 'verse? That's kinda depressing.

1806197It is, in my Fallout Side Story, As I Wander, a lot of what could happen if Noir went the route of Fallout is explained. Let's just say a lot of nasty things happen to the ponies involved.

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