Earthbound
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Patient Name: Rainbow Chroma Dash
Species: Earth Pony
Affliction: Neige-Aero disease
Treatment: Unknown
Patient Name: Rainbow Chroma Dash
Species: Earth Pony
Affliction: Neige-Aero disease
Treatment: Unknown
Well, the concept has been done before, but not overdone.
However, the spacing is all wacked out, it honestly was hard to read like that. Also, she's still a pegasus even if she doesn't have any wings. Earth ponies have like earth magic or something lame like that. So RD would still be able to move clouds and manipulate the weather, just not fly.
So overall, neither a thumbs up or a thumbs down.
that was really good for a one shot. I thought with the description, this would have to be longer. I don't read very often, so consider yourself lucky I read and liked your short story. Have a mustache
Kudos on an impressive premise. First person of one of the mane six? And the grammar and syntax was fairly well done? This kind of concept has potential. Have a moustache and a thumb.![]()
I was expecting
But I got something better. Thumbs up 4 u.
This is a good story but............................. I hate it that dash lost her wings![]()