You are aware amnesia is spelled without an h, right?

Edit: I just finished reading this, and I feel like a jerk for reserving the spot of first post, but whatever.

You misspelled more than a few words, missed a few capital "I"s, and forgot an apostrophe. I'm afraid I'll have to stab you.

Seriously, though, the grammatical errors were few enough that they didn't detract too much from the story, same with the spelling problems.

Story-wise, I like it. Amnesia is an old plot mechanic, but a good one when used well.

Fix up the grammar problems and spelling mistakes, and you're writing a great fic.

I liked it, write more.

>>11988241198824 Thank you for the information :)

the cover looks like Octy would be saying 'You looking at my flank?'

>>11989681198968 And we're all like 'Ofcourse we do!' ? XD

>>11989711198971 Of course we ARE* not do XD

>>11989751198975 I can't brain today? :) Sorry, I just have a habbit of failing hard with my grammar when commenting xD

>>11989781198978 hmmm

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ATTACK!

>>11989801198980 NOOOOOOO, STAY AWAY FROM ME! I'VE DONE NOTHING WRONG!

>>11989851198985 the grammar Nazis failed in that pic...

Time...*

NEW PIC

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>>11989951198995 I always use shift. Caps doesent feel right :P

>>11990041199004 Yeah, enough with the grammar nazi spam now... if that's okay with you that is...

>>11990101199010 ok...

>>11988241198824 If I were to give you the google docs link could you leave comments pointing out the mistakes? I kinda have a lot of problems with grammar :)

Oh and thanks for the constructive feedback, the fact that you claimed first to give me such feedback instead of saying first makes me happy :D

I liked the plot, but the grammar bothered me and the speech was straightforward and simple.

>>11994801199480 Yeah, I'm weak on dialogue and grammar. I really should find an editor for this fic.

I'll read it later, it looks like a very interesting and great story line!

But the title has to change, Octnisia? That's the lamest pun I have ever heard!

The plural of 'nemesis' is 'nemeses'. The last 'e' is pronounced like the 'ee' in 'meet'.

>>11997991199799 That's why I said Name suggestions are welcome XD

>>11998631199863 Thanks I did not know that :)

Ive Enjoyed this...Thy is pleased... :) Have a Wonderous day

>>12003981200398 :D Have a wonderous day aswell!

>>12002111200211

You're welcome :) But take one 'es' off the end of it.

Oh god, soo many people are favoriting? That means I have to release chapters everynow and then. I'll try to stick on a maximum week between each chapter schedule, but I can't promise anything.

Interesting story, tracking.

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no comment on the grammar issues. I will say that this was pretty awesome and I'll be keeping up with it.

>>12298151229815 Thanks :D

Wow this is a really super good story so when is the rest coming out i really want to read the continuation?

>>12404191240419 I'm trying to stick to one chapter each week, but it really depends on how inspired I get and wether I have the time.

more please.

>>12002111200211 Still looking for names?

>>13252971325297 Considering no one has mentioned the horrible pun yet I'm not sure. Give me what you've got and I'll consider it :)

>>13253061325306 Hmmm, Challenge accepted

Forget spelling and grammar, your pacing is skewed all over the place

One moment they're at a hospital, the next they are at Ponyville

PACING! Remember that mate, it is very important for an author to get their transitons down, or they are out for the count.

>>14072361407236 I know I know, I'm currently working on another fic where I put a lot of focus into the pacing and showing part.

Aww, its ended :( but put the link in a new chapter when you start your next vinyltavi fic :D

It's a shame to see a story die but, best of luck on your next project.

Whääähäää and it started so well :/ Snief, however, nothing I can do I guess ^^ I hope your other stories will get along more smoothly

>>16213541621354 >>16213571621357 >>16213621621362 I feel so horrible for letting you guys down. I'm really really sorry! :(

>>16213771621377 It's okay :) We still like you :D

>>16213771621377 As long as you learn and move forward at least I can forgive you, I don't like speaking for others.  I'm sure most will feel the same way.  Best of luck.

>>16214321621432 Thanks a lot. You guys are way to kind. I have learned and I shall do my best to make this next fic the best it can be!

>>16214391621439 No problem I've been here for just over 27 weeks and I've yet to post a story despite having 4-5 that I am trying to write.  Mistakes or not at least you can say you have something posted.  One day I might put people though torture of reading my stories but for now I will wait because it might become a war crime to willingly submit people to that.

>>16214731621473 Your fics can't be that bad. Also, if you wanna improve your writing check out Author Support. Great group on fimfic :)

>>16214801621480 If you wish to submit yourself to the horror that is my writing just say the word and i can give you links to 3 that I'm writing.  Just remember you can't unread that which you have already read.

>>16215401621540 Add the email daweed1296@gmail to the gDoc and I'll have a look at it later :)

>>16215521621552 Your added don't say i didn't warn you first I may work on 2 of them tonight or not who knows because I don't.  Just leave any complaints wherever you feel.

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But this story starts excelent, but OK, I will check you other stories.

Thank you, for having the decency and tact to at least tell us that this fic has been canceled. I am sad that this fic will not be continued, but my mind is at peace because I know this fact.

For instance, I have been waiting for the better part of a year for another installment of a fic I am reading now, and I don't know if the author is even still alive. (I've been waiting 36 weeks... yeah)

Anyways, thank you for the heads up, and I look forward to the next taviscratch fic  that graces your keyboard.

>>16236181623618 I'm really really sorry, but this fic is just dead in my brain. I've tried several times writing the next chapter but it's just stuck to me. Sorry

>>16243521624352 I will do my best to top this fic and bring joy to the heart of my readers once more :)

Hey, um... So, the idea's good but countless punctuation errors that are obvious. Main point of this comment: I love the thought of them being enimies but not knowing it, and I'd rather like to take this idea further. I will only do so with akaPinkiePie's permission and some other encouragement. Comment respond!

>>22226932222693 It would be my pleasure of if you took it into your own hands :)

>>22231952223195 Okay, so that's one requirement.

Oh, and, good job on The Life Of a Lily inThe Album

>>22250742225074 Thanks :)