Well, I gotta say it was actually pretty good!

Not bad, good sir/ma'am. Not bad at all.

It was very cute but...there were many misspellings and capitalization errors. It's not the worst I've seen, but it could be better. However, the story didn't feel too fast or slow, and I thought it was very adorable

>>11994841199484 thanks, I was afraid I may have rushed this  

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So many errors, yet so much adorableness. You, sir or maam, need to create a sequel about the life of Bumbleshy!

As stated above, there are a LOT of wrong word usage (their/there/they're, its/it's, etc.), along with other grammar mistakes. Also, i felt as if some parts were rushed, although i see some disagree with me.

But overall i like the plot and execution (minus what i said above.) I think having someone else look over this before you post it would do wonders.

Also, more would be appreciated!

Grammar aside, this was a super sweet story. It would be nice to see our human society be as open to same sex relationships as our Equestrian counterparts do (at least in this story). Look forward to moar!

A few grammatical errors, but overall ,a fairly cute story, I enjoyed it. A little.... Strange, in the ending. But, ive discussed magical inseminations with rob, and as creepy as it is we've both said its possible. But yea, good shit. Much better.