This story is a sequel to Only The Beginning
King has come to terms with his life. He is not welcome in the life he thought he had. With the absence of his honor guards, he would have to be careful. He has yet to know if Celestia had mentioned him yet. A part of him hope that she hasn't.
FEATURED 1/4/2021
This looks fun
IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII'VE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS! I just read "Only The Beginning" yesterday!!!!
Interesting
Well... that was fast.
Next thing we know he just gets attacked for not doing anything...
"A story is sometimes better left untold"
Unfortunately this isn't one of those times. The two stories should be part of the same one, instead of two separate ones. The first chapter should be removed or expanded on, or at the very very very least connected. Not even connected better since that implies a connection in the first place.
There's little flow, the pacing is off, and there's little actually interesting about the main character. He was a kid who watched mlp, who was sent to equestria with godlike powers, and then was captured by the princesses for alleged crimes that probably never happened or he was framed for.
You're all "woooo, mysterious stranger, what could his story be" when everybody reading this know the exact plot points you're going to use. That's not usually a bad thing, but when the additional character doesn't actually have character beyond "mysterious stranger" well. Let's just say this isn't going into my tracking.
'Toon'? Do is it supposed to be tune*?
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Of course they did.
I thought he already told them his name.
Send this dude back.
Isn’t that the same as others?
Ok, I’m so confused.
Yeah, what is happening now? Like where did the suit come from and who is the a.i? When did he get these back? Why is he near the Empire? How did he get there? I have so many questions.
Actually also I thought he was a cat?
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:3
oh he is.
All I will say is that Andrew and King are the same and related in more ways than you think ;3
Ah ok
is it going to turn out that king could have stopped this but was trapped?
Where did king come from?
Is everyone gonna put their differences aside and fight together?
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Hmmm getting there
Is it talking to us?
Anyone else getting some naruto vibes?
So whoever this is will be revealed?
so he offers assistence and wants to help and even offers his location as a show of good faith and they want to attack him? guessing the elemets wont work or will lock onto celestia and luna insted
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YES! Please!
Oh no.
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I have a more fitting punishment instead for the near future.
;3
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I hope so they murderd king if what you wrote is right
Wait, first he says there a way to stop them and now he’s saying there isn’t?
Ok, so you could blame a lot of characters for this.
This is crazy.
Will there be a sequel?
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For that I am going to have to say maybe
Little bit of an odd ending. Will there be more to King's story?
From what it looks like there isn't any reason to seek "Redemption", as doing so is basically just begging people who hate and abuse him to love him.
So he never actually did anything wrong. Then why is there this tripe about redemption?
This doesn't seem like it should even be in the story with the total lack of connection to anything else.
So Fluttershy is an idiot then. She makes a bowl of salad and puts it in front of him, but somehow that wasn't meant to him to eat, and causes him pain? Either shes a moron or just malicious.
Is there really any reason for him to be there other than get abused?
Why is he even trying to be friends with them? The only way they'll be happy is for him to be killed, so there's no point in staying in equestria at all.
So not only are the princesses evil, but the Element Bearers as well as the Elements themselves are Evil. The only conclusion is that Harmony is either fucking stupid or deliberately evil and malicious for harming him when he is innocent of wrongdoing.
So his entire story was pointless then. It just seems like a drawn out overcomplicated suicide.
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because celestia is a bitch in this story... but i aint complaining
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I smell a sequel!
10684097 Yeah, he's clearly been horribly abused by Celestia and Luna and done nothing to deserve it, and we'll never find out why they would act so ridiculously out of character.
And sometimes, you just want to set up a sympathetic character and demonise canon characters but can't think up a reasonable explanation as to why or what happened.
10562912 Agreed. Time to see if the author can do anything interesting with the extremely overused 'Displaced' set up. Based on what I've seen so far, I'm not holding out much hope.
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I did not wach Naruto.
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You probably should.