The return of Princess Luna inspires SkyJagged of Ponyville to investigate occurences during and after her banishment as Nightmare Moon. Only one stands out; the departure of six semi-unnamed ponies from Canterlot due to the prophecy of Nightmare Moon's return. A vague reference is made to a dark forest unknown to ponydom, which SkyJagged believes lies right outside his home.
He enters the Everfree Forest, seeking answers to a tale long forgotten.
What he finds is far from what was expected.
A story derived from Donitz's "Friendship is Magic: Story of the Blanks", the first portion of the trilogy investigates how Sunny Town came to be, and if there is any hope for its inhabitants... or those who find their way in.
The second portion establishes what happens when its visitors have escaped... at least,when it seems that way. But are the ponies of Sunny Town still able to reach him... through his dreams?
The third chapter, the final showdown, is the ultimate battle. It is time to finish what Sunny Town has started. But even with their combined strength, will three friends be able to stop a thousand-year-old curse?
Gah! Sunnytown is back?! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!
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1206929 Hahaha! This was actually a project in the making since about the beginning of the year. Donitz gave me permission to develop a story for it, and personally I think it's the best out of the two others I've read.
Unfortunately, that does nothing to change the insanity of the Sunny Town ponies.
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.....Assuming that's what you're talking about. I don't really see why double-spacing is necessary, but if any more people say that it's hard to follow otherwise, I can go in and change it.
Yeah, unfortunately FIMfiction was being incredibly hateful and wouldn't let me upload it as it was in Google.docs.
Nice work
The story is coming along really nicely. I also approve of how well that you've portrayed Midnight Shadows, my only criticism is that Midnight has a nightmare moon color scheme rather than a luna color scheme. Other than that it's great.
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Yeah, totally forgot about that. This is why I like to have my friends double-check it!
I know there was an update for this on Equestria daily but there link was broken and I somehow found it on this site. I'm so glad I did. Keep up the good work.
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I am so glad that someone found it!
The administrators and I just couldn't fix that problem. Ultimately, I left a note to everyone saying that it was available here and on Deviantart. I haven't had any responses though, so I'm worried that the ones who were so excited to read it may never get to see parts 2 and 3...
Oh hey. This is on Fimfiction. Excellent. Nicely done on the first chapter. I enjoyed the game, and enjoyed the story even more. Now to read Chapter 2...
So that was certainly an interesting chapter.
Just a small thing, though. When you switched perspectives to Leech, put a little more space there so the reader isn't confused by the sudden switch. But other than that, good stuff.
Happy writing
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Thanks! Yet another follower managed to find this elsewhere. Stupid EQD... J.K. I love that site. It just doesn't love me back.
Well, I already double-spaced that paragraph, and whenever that happens in books it indicates either that a lot of time has passed or that there was a shift in perspective. Trust me, I read a lot. I know these things.
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Books also tend to have a "***" or some sort of marker to indicate a shift in perspective or time. I read a lot too
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Yes, I've added that effect to Chapter 3, and may go back in to do that with Ch. 2.
Really good story, one of the best fanfics I've ever read. It also shows and teaches us about many important things in our lifes, when one knows where to look
Thank you and keep up the good work :)
I think Ruby said that one.
Anywho, this was a solid conclusion. I liked the game this came from, and I liked this story. Well done
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I agree. Anyway great story I was little confuse about Ruby but not anymore. I miss read a little and reread some parts. Again thanks for the story.
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It was my pleasure. I could see one main theme in the game, and in trying to develop a happy ending for it, I noticed a lot I could work off of. Glad you enjoyed it!
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Bah... No matter how many times I read it, or my friends read it, there's always trouble... Mitta and Ruby's names seem to be the main cause of issues.
Thanks!
I need to say, quite good surprise i though it will be about Applebloom but it wasn't
Heh from start i though Leech will be changeling but with that Doctor who it was just "wat?".
Doctor didn't act like he should on start, later it was more in his style but still.
Sometimes i didn't know how to see Mitta do she look like zombie or normal? If like zombie then why that doc shadow don't panic about her look ?
1358210 I'll... try to reply as best I can, but you should focus harder on your writing if you expect anyone who doesn't live with a 7-year-old brother to understand you (that's not an insult, my brother really does write like that).
No, it wasn't about Apple Bloom. From the start, I wanted to make something that involved breaking the curse - at least somewhat. Had Apple Bloom been able to do that, I have no doubts she would've gotten her cutie-mark, and I am NOT going to go there.
The Doctor has many forms, first of all, so it makes sense that his character is not an exact copy of the Tenth Doctor (David Tennant). I specifically wanted him to be a little more innocent, the way the other ponies are.
Again, you guys, you have to read between the lines. Wherever the area is dark, Mitta appears to be a zombie. In daylight or in bright enough houselights, she looks completely normal. Doctor Shadow's office was light enough for her to appear normal.
I hope I was able to answer your questions clearly.
THAT. WAS. AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
1562118 Well, it's been a while since anyone visited here! I'm glad to know it's still getting feedback.
If you don't mind my asking, how did you get to this page?
i know this question was not directed at me but.... I came across this when i was looking at the comic version of 'story of the blanks' by template93, some one mentioned it and i knew i had to check it out.
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I only learned about that comic after Template took the pages down and started re-drawing them, so I have no idea what the story he's telling is. Frankly, I don't like the style either.
What I do know is that since "The Cutie Pox" came out, people have been obsessively writing up stories about how Sunny Town's curse was caused just because they murdered a pony, because they feared her cutie-mark.
I think it makes sense that there was more to it than that. The ponies of Sunny Town betrayed who they were, and moved into a dangerous place, which eventually corrupted them. The final straw was Ruby's murder, not because they thought it was a disease, but because they feared having another Nightmare Moon. They wanted to prevent having ponies around who were more powerful than others, and cutie-marks qualify on that category. Those three slips are what cause their curse.
I hope I managed to make this more interesting for all of you. If Donitz himself appreciated the story, I'm really glad. But even more important, I hope the messages in this story manage to make you all (and me) better people.