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Fluttershy is a young pegasus. She has not been in ponyville very long and rarely speaks to other ponies unless she needs to go shopping or if their pets are hurt or sick.
There is a large storm on its way and Fluttershy hears a cry in the distance. She takes off to care for this animal, but they get stranded in the Everfree Forest.

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Really good! I loved the ending, especially the last sentence. It really finished the story perfectly.

I love the last line.

But, its SUPREMELY rushed. Everything happened so fast. I didn't even know where Fluttershy got her actual bleeding wounds till I went back and read it again. This has potential, just slow down a bit.:pinkiehappy:

1234151 Thank you very much, i love getting help with knowing what i did wrong, i am writing another one right now and have incorporated the advice you gave me in this one ^_^

1239030 I'm looking forward to it!

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