Well, I thought this was pretty good, especially considering that this is your first fic. I do agree with Tamara Bloodhoof , tho, If I were you I would add more setting. You can still have a pretty short fic, if that's what you're looking for, but if you add more setting, then it will give the readers a better experience. ( And I know this from experience myself; I've written some stuff, gotten comments, and then I edited it.)

Overall, I like Rainbowsoar; Rainbow is ALWAYS being paired with the mane six, so it's nice to see her with Soarin. Good job, I hope to see more stuff from you! You're a good writer!

>>11942221194222 awe thanks ill edit it when i get time im working on part 3 i had to re start it because of the coments but thank you

Sure thing!

:mlp-tbob:

I can't tell if the "girlfriend" thing came on to quickly or just right. There are a few grammatical errors here and there but other than that I love it!!!!

I really like your story but I would like to know how it continues. How could you be finished already???

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These ones

Rainbow Dash walked to the center of the floor, and began flapping her wings. With a split second she began using agility and doing 360s around the arena. She had mastered her routine in the short two hours and all that was left, the Sonic Rainboom. She flew to the sky and began bolting down as she picked up speed, her tears flew back her face and then it happened, the Rainboom. The sky filled with color and the rainbow wrapped around the arena and Cloudsdale. People from Ponyville and Canterlot watched in awe as Rainbow Dash finished her routine.

Way to fast, slow it down a bit. I'm guilty of it too, but we both just need to slow down.

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Ok, I was just mentioning it... I know what it's like to write out detail, and it can be REALLY tedious! Thanx!

BAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWW

decent fix the grammar, and make the romance a little more out their. ... if thats okay with you.

Awwwwwwwwwwww

>>11948241194824 im still working on it dont worry im just really busy but ill have part 3 up by sunday!

>>11968881196888 yay

>>11961091196109 i edited it all tonight but only part one just before but thanks for your opinion !

It's to awesome! More Chapters!!!!!!!

>>12010461201046 awe thank you ill have chapter three up by tomorrow

Yay

I Love this so much! what a great start! :D

>>12040131204013 thank you if youre wondering im having part 3 up by tonight so stay close :3

Image: http://fc05.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2011/218/b/e/epic_brohoof_by_mixermike622-d45m32o.gif

this is how i imagined scootaloo and rainbow dash brohoofing

So sorry I'm late, family emergancy today so i didnt get to work on it until late but it's here sorry for any typos or problems I'll edit it soon I'm sorry if i don't catch every typo or mistake i'm trying

Nice, but one question bacon?

wait a second make that two were did Pinkieeee... never mind.

>>12111301211130 i ment to add tat in ... thanks

oh i rly love this story so cute

but there were a few spelling errors..may want to fix that, just saying

ME GUSTA MUCHO!!!!! ............

D'awwww

AMAZING!!!! On one of the chapters You Should have Derpy In their :D P.S You deserve 3 Mustaches..

There are a few errors with grammar as you said but other than that you are doing a fine you just try to improve that grammar (it might be that damn auto correct but i dont know)

you may want to read all 3 chapters over again there are several mistakes in grammar and spelling...other than that interesting story

this story is out of

I think that you should continue it until Soarin and Rainbow get married and have children... Otherwise, lovin it!

Okay, a bit fast, out of character. You did get pinkie personality spot on though. Nice story.