Wow, that was amazing. I especially like the epilogue, “Her mask, haunts dreams at night.”

This line in particular sounds a bit creepy, rarity is watching me!

That picture has interested me... Bravo

I am normally disposed to dislike anything that warns me up front that it's Non-Clop -- not that I'm a big fan of clop, as I usually find that sort of thing distracting -- but this was so elegantly constructed that I'm wishing I could give it two thumbs up.

I don't understand the epilogue. Was it all a dream?

A few errors; for example you use "starred" instead of "stared" a couple times. Yeah, your writing could use a touch-up by a careful editor, but hey - pobody's nerfect!

Anyways, this was well thought of. A really pretty story, wistful and enchanting in a creepy sort of way.

You better continue writing! I'd love to see more of this sort of material, especially if it were free of errors.

>>12023931202393

Nothing new there, then!

>>12025141202514

As I said, this was based off of a song. Those lines are lyrics!

>>12029481202948

I like the picture too!

>>12030251203025

Thank you, I think that is one of the kindest comments I have ever got!

The reason for the 'non' clop part is that I have also written a seprate spin off, one that involves clop. I just prefer this version, so I posted it instead.

>>12030661203066

If you're really interested, you can PM me and I'll talk you through my thoughts on the matter. I'd prefer not to say it aloud in the comments.

>>12031761203176

Thanks dude, I'll look into it! This is the first time I have posted anything without anyone or even myself really giving it a second read.

And enchanting and creepy was what I was going for!

... Time to fix shit!

>>12032031203203

Thank you my good man!

.....i was half expecting (sadi)rarity's eyes to flash red...............the epilogue made me more sad than creeped out....<.<

>>12051501205150

Haha, is that a good thing!? I was going for sad/mysterious, but people are getting 'creepy' vibes!

Well, I'm good with that. People seem to be liking it!

>>12052121205212

considering where that cover image originated from......red eyes means immeninet torture gtfo now..........>.>......now i'm wondering what sweetie was doing during this.......heh bittersweet endings

>>12052301205230

Haha, you follow that Tumblr too? Haha, yeah, it's taken out of context, but... well, it fit the mood!

And as far as this Fic is concerned; there is no Sweetie Belle! ...Which is sad...

>>12052411205241

-_-.......i didn't even know about it till i saw that image link......>.>......i read through both sweetie's n rarity's entire tumblir within the hour......so yea

>>12053181205318

Haha, so I also brough you a good Tumblr! Huzzah!

>>12058711205871

Haha, well, they're radically different aren't they?

Anyhow, I wrote this quite a while back so... it didn't really cut into the time too much. Besides, I had this as an idea for quite a while, and it kinda forced me to stop writing SacchArc for a bit. It was creating a block, and after I got it out, I was fine again.

And to be honest, this story started out as clop and I wrote a clop section of it. But, I liked this version SO much more, and kept it instead.

Also, you'll be happy to know that right this very instant, I am writing more SacchArc, but, as I said in my blog, it'll take ages to finish. 5-9K chapters don't appear overnight, and I write slow as fuck!

Glad you enjoyed this too though, dude!

Bravo, good pony. Bravo.

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>>12256401225640

Haha, you like it, then?

>>12288751228875

supremely.

>>12296591229659

One giant thank you to you, Sir!

>>12459941245994

Thank you, I try my best!