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    Twilight and Luna explore a land that appears on no map  · Daetrin
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  • 1w, 1d
    Apotheosis audiobook chap 6 up.

    As always, Ilya Leonov and Scribbler do a fantastic job.  

    2 comments · 57 views
  • 4w, 1d
    On Artifacts

    I'll be honest, I don't much like 'em.  Kind of a silly thing to say when the first three seasons of MLP had the Elements of Harmony hanging around in the background, but it's still true. Now, this more applies in specific than in general.  A single Item Of Power can be a useful narrative tool, and in fact often is.  It's usually a MacGuffin but they have a long and noble history.  But when you start introducing many of them, that's when I have issues.

    First of all, the more objects of power you have the more you're taking away from your characters.  You're offloading their agency onto inanimate objects, their value onto something that exists independent of a person's drive and interests.  What makes a person special should be their personhood, not that they happen to possess an Infinity Gem. Not that you can't actually write something where that's true, it's just as you introduce more and more it gets harder and harder.

    The other thing is that the more objects of power you put into the setting, the closer it slides to Lovecraft.  When you have many, many objects and items that are incredibly powerful, you're starting to build a world where there are far too many threats for it to be at all stable.  Now, I like Ask The Night Guards as much as the next guy, but that's exactly the kind of world that bothers me.  Even played for comedy, you're edging into territory where ordinary people are no more than victims.

    Again, it works with a single instance, because that's a story where the issues are resolved.  But as you construct a universe where there's this constant low-level background horror of innumerable instances of artifacts of doom, you're making a place where things can never be resolved.

    20 comments · 241 views
  • 4w, 5d
    On diplomacy and war

    I've noticed that, of late, the feature box has held a bunch of stories having to do with diplomacy and war.  This is of some interest to me, given that I am currently writing a bit about war.

    My problem is that these stories generally don't give anyone a fair shake.  Yes, I think that ponies generally have advantages when it comes to war.  But that doesn't mean that everything is going to be (or should be) a curbstomp.  On either side.  When it comes to war, we're missing a few things...

    One is that each race has, presumably, its own skills and talents.  Diamond dogs seem to be able to travel through earth as easily as over the earth.  Think about how important sappers were to warfare, and consider that talent.  Gryphons are pointy on five out of six ends and every single one of them can fly.  We don't know much about Zebras or Saddle Arabians but we can presume they have their own specialties.  

    There's also the fact that they are different races. For humans, when you invade, you end up marrying the locals, your culture mixes with three or four generations there's just people.  That...doesn't work with Equestria.   There is no integration.  If you invade, you are either waging a war or extermination or enslavement.  There are a few other options, but you're just begging for revolts regardless.

    So overall, a serious clash between two species is going to be a terrible and terrifying thing.

    As for diplomacy. Celestia is over a thousand years old.  She has probably spent more time in negotiations than most rulers or diplomats have been alive.  Celestia is going to be very good at it.  And she's going to take it seriously.  It's not a game.  Hundreds or thousands of people, whether they're hers or others, might die if she doesn't handle it right.  I realize a lot of these stories were written to be amusing, but...they're sort of fridge horror in that aspect.

    37 comments · 263 views
  • 5w, 1d
    Pony scifi

    Bit of a signal boost here: Outside The Reaching Sky.

    It's a good story overall (fair warning: you're going to get hella annoyed around the middle of it, but you're supposed to, so take that on faith), but what really shines is the pony technology.  Dear lord the pony technology.  It is utterly amazing and if I ever do a far-future Apotheverse thing I will beg Karazor for the ability to steal from this universe.  There are so many little details that make this pony scifi, not just scifi with ponies.  The differences in how the tribes interact with it, the fusion of Equestrian magic and classical scifi technology.  The different ways the Mane Six interact with said tech, even.  It goes beyond the source ideas of scifi and really applies them in fun and unique ways.  Definite recommend, and hey, he's supposedly making a sequel!

    8 comments · 199 views
  • 6w, 1d
    What do you find objectionable in a story?

    This is a followup to a previous blog post, since I saw a lot of people saying they thumbs downed offensive or objectionable stories.

    To me, what I consider objectionable in a story falls into a few categories.

    -Malicious OOC (Character Assassination): Celestia is most often targeted by this, but I see it in Twi, too.  Characters made OOC not through any lack of talent on the writer (characterization is hard!) but because they specifically want to write a story about how stupid/evil/awful these characters are.  For some reason people seem to think that these characters couldn't possibly be actually good people.  No, Celestia has to be secretly an evil ruler that exercises mind control to the extreme, and Twilight indifferent to the welfare of others to the point of being a magical Mengele.  I give comedy stories a bit of a pass, but only a bit, because you can write comedy without reducing ponies to three-stooges slapstick.

    -Postmodernism:  Some of you probably have no idea what that means, and some of you are probably rolling your eyes.  I'll try to explain.  In postmodernism, the noble virtues do not exist.  People are not kind or loyal or selfless.  They're only selfish and self-interested.  Not evil per se but incapable of greatness.  And the world is devoid of wonder.  Everything sucks forever, even if it's not actually a dystopia.  This has been sort of the normal status quo of fiction for the past decade or two and it's really, really annoying.  And completely opposite to a magical world where friendship is magic.

    -Ponies are evil: For some reason there's an entire set of "Ponies enslave humans" and the like.  This is sort of the character assassination above, but applied to the whole setting.  Conversion bureau apparently is like this?   Regardless, it's completely disregarding the setting to make something that seems like a form of revenge porn against a setting that makes them feel inadequately virtuous.  They can't live up to it, so they have to drag it down.

    While I personally don't read dark much, I don't object to it in theory.  It Spills Over is a wonderful Dark story that absolutely still fits, for example.  And my own stories have plenty of content that could be considered pretty dark, at least in passing.  But so does the canon - Chrysalis and Tirek are pretty terrifying.  It's not a shiny happy nothing-ever-goes-wrong world.  There are dangers and terrors.  But they get overcome.

    34 comments · 298 views
  • ...

When Rainbow Dash's newest trick backfires spectacularly, she and Fluttershy find themselves stranded in the middle of nowhere. Together, they'll have to survive and find their way back to Equestria and matter how far the journey.

(Originally submitted to Equestria Daily)

Art by katwalk.

First Published
10th Aug 2011
Last Modified
10th Aug 2011
#1 · 167w, 14h ago · 1 · · Terra Firma ·

Still find the ending a bit awkward, probably mostly for the somewhat cornball end line (I mean that in the most endearing sense though) or maybe the stealth shippy element (seriously, did it exist? if it did, I'm still completely oblivious to it), but, well, as I said on EQ, this is a damn near perfect representative of the adventure genre.

Still a feckin' brilliant story, good writer, feckin' brilliant.

#2 · 167w, 14h ago · · · Terra Firma ·

OTEOTM suffered rather severely from lack of planning and ending fatigue. Hopefully my future efforts will be somewhat less crippled. I learned a lot writing it though, and I had a lot of fun experimenting with various techniques. Insofar as the shipping goes, it was the foundation-building for a relationship than a relationship itself. So, yes, possibly too subtle but the intent is there.

#3 · 167w, 13h ago · · · Terra Firma ·

>>1623 I could kinda see the ending fatigue to certain extent with the amount of elements that ended up in the final chapter (the ghost town, the spirit coming back, the injury to Fluttershy, the abbreviated homecoming recap), most of which probably could have held a chapter all on their own. You still handled it better than most (and I love surreal/horror elements anyways so the ghost town was filed under A for Awesome) so I really have no right to complain. After all, these were far above the normal/average chapter length at 10k plus per, so can I really call it brief.

Awesome job anyways, even my reservations about the very end don't tarnish what you managed here.

(I definitely got the relationship building, the role reversal worked very nicely towards that end, I think I might just be ignoring the potential for shipping/romance since I not really that big a fan of it. Don't hate it, just don't look for it)

#4 · 166w, 4d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Awesome fanfic is awesome

#5 · 166w, 3d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

I loved this.  Including the ending, honestly.  I've gotten a bit tired of shipping fics.  A good adventure story that resolves into a relationship and a future together was much more satisfying than all the shipping angst that so many of these stories are full of.

#6 · 165w, 5d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

This fanfic is just too awesome, And this is now one of my more favorite mlp stories.

:rainbowkiss: So Aweosme!

#7 · 165w, 5d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

I must say, that I LOVED this story,I swear its probably better than most of the books I've read and even if I expected the "shipping" to be more explicit.... ( I love Flutterdash :rainbowkiss: )

Please, make another fic like this one, *yay* :yay:

#8 · 161w, 13h ago · · · Terra Firma ·

One of the best pony fics there is! Glad to see it here. :rainbowdetermined2:

#9 · 160w, 5d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

This is so incredibly written. I was astounded at the word length, which is excellent, because, not only did you cover such a BROAD expanse of subject matter, but did it in such a way as to call it efficient. Just purely astounded! And, yes, I took the time out of my sleep this before-morning to read it. (I kid you not, I probably spent a good hour-and-a-half reading, it was THAT enticing) I honestly cannot wait to see what you have planned next, and now I must catch up on your remaining stories.... in the morning...... if you have more, that is. ;P

#10 · 160w, 14h ago · · · Terra Firma ·

That was an amazing story! I can't put into words of how much it was an awesome read. Your use of imagery let me paint not just scenes, but a flowing movie in my head the whole time I was reading. Thank you for this wonderful Braingasm! :pinkiehappy:

#11 · 158w, 5d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

omg this fan fic is awsome

i couldnt stop reading it!:twilightsheepish:

#12 · 158w, 3h ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Legitimately one of the best fanfics I've EVER read.:twilightsmile:

#13 · 155w, 19h ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Woah, woah, woah. WOAH. This fic is truly amazing! It's well after midnight and I have work tomorrow but I don't care because I just read the best pony fic ever! Scratch that, the best fic ever! Amazing. I hope you write more stories one day.

#14 · 154w, 6d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Sequel is 5/8 done.

Features Luna and Twilight.

#15 · 151w, 4d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Good read, and suddenly it's past midnight...

#16 · 150w, 4h ago · · · Terra Firma ·


Oh, yes please!

Tip: when you post it, if you make a blog post and tag it with this story, everypony who's tracking this one will get pinged.  

#17 · 149w, 3d ago · · · Terra Firma ·



#18 · 149w, 2d ago · · · Terra Firma ·


Check out the sequel for both more story and more romance.

#19 · 148w, 6d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

This story is awesome. Enough hints of romance to satisfy shipping lovers, but subtle enough to avoid putting off those who don't like mane cast shipping. I loved it when I was the latter, and I still love it now as the former. :pinkiehappy:

Heck, it was this fic that made me want to start writing fan fiction in the first place. You are officially awesome, worthy of a Spike Stache. :moustache:

Five stars. All well-earned!

#20 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Super awesome fic, I'm glad i read it.  Keep up the great writing.

#21 · 147w, 18h ago · · · Mare Incognitum ·

No comments? Crazy.

Still reading through, but so far so awesome.

I imagine the next chapter will be just as great.

#22 · 147w, 17h ago · · · Hc Svnt Dracones ·

And another chapter of this awesome story down.

You've really done a good job of describing some of the locales they've been in, and their reactions seem very hum- er, pony-like.

It's been a very engaging read so far, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

#23 · 147w, 17h ago · · · Terra Firma ·

And now, with all three chapters read, I can safely say that was the most well written, well fleshed, and well composed fanfiction I have ever read, based on any story.

You told an amazing tale, from start to finish, and I felt really involved in the story. I loved your subtle hints at romance along the way, and it seems like a real and believable development, without being blatant "Oh my god I love you so much" like so many fics tend to do.

Leaving this story (to the sequel, of course!), my thoughts are mostly comprised of 'If this author ever wrote a novel, I would probably be so compelled I would read it start to finish in one sitting, then wake up the next day and feel a strong urge to do it again.'

Keep up the great writing.

#24 · 144w, 1d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

This story was the first MLP fan fiction that I read when I saw it on EqD. I must admit, I had a slightly cynical outlook of the fan-produced stories and the quality that might be, but that changed swiftly once I began to read. I was quickly absorbed by your work, and I can safely say that it catapulted me into reading fan fiction wholeheartedly. I thank your for your brilliant work.

#25 · 144w, 1d ago · · · Mare Incognitum ·

Why is noone commenting on this?! >~< RainbowShy is my second favorite pairing, and I have a feeling this fic is going to make it number one. Awesome fic, keep up the good work!

#26 · 144w, 1d ago · · · Hc Svnt Dracones ·

I really like how you keep their personalities intact, but still make it more... How do I say... Realistic? Anyway, awesome read.

#27 · 144w, 19h ago · · · Mare Incognitum ·

So I got about half way through the first chapter of Apotheosis, and there were a lot of references with RD and fluttershy that I wasn't understand. So I checked your stories page, and sure enough, here's this!

Since Apotheosis seems to be so popular, maybe you should link this story in your synopsis to get more comments and views. I know I would have appreciated it :pinkiesmile:

#28 · 144w, 15h ago · · · Terra Firma ·


You're right, and I'm dumb.  Fixed :D

#29 · 144w, 5h ago · · · Terra Firma ·

This was the first pony fic I ever, EVER read. And I love it. It was cute, heartwarming, awesome, had some sad bits, and kept me on the edge of my seat. The only thing that bothered me was the ending, and that was because it was the end. That's it. I would say "MOOOOAR" but I doubt you'd make more, aside from the pseudo-sequel. I just wanted to let you know that this was my first pony fic ever read, and now that I have found it again it has secured its spot as my #1 favourite fan fiction ever.

Five stars and favourited. And even though it's pointless, tracking as well. Thank you for this. Flutteryays for you. :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

#30 · 142w, 6d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

I have read plenty of fanfic's in my time in this fandom, but This is so much more than a simple fanfic. It is the embodiment of everything a well wrote and well put together story should be and has quickly ranked right up too #2 in my most favorite fanfic's I've ever read. I just wish i had read this before i read it's sequel.

All in all, excellent read and excellent work. You have gained the right to half of my currently owned internets, congratulations. :twilightsmile:

#31 · 140w, 6d ago · · · Terra Firma ·


#32 · 138w, 1d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

i really enjoyed this story thanks

#33 · 138w, 5h ago · · · Hc Svnt Dracones ·

I had a lot of fun imagining your fictional settings:twilightsmile:

#34 · 137w, 5d ago · · · Hc Svnt Dracones ·

I couldn't help but hear everything Scar said in Kelsey Grammar's voice, and then he turned out to have an attitude almost like General Marian Cross, much win.

#35 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Well, after reading both Apotheosis and OTEOTM, I think I must logically conclude that you are easily one of the better (if not the best) adventure writers within our fandom. Of course, this saddens me to know that it is unlikely that we will see anything new from you in the future!

Anyway, top class adventure story. My one nitpick would be the transition of time. I wasn't able to get a feeling on how long they had been away, so when I was told that they had been gone for over a month, I was left feeling very confused and a little disorientated. I guess as an extension of that, some of the action transitions felt too smooth as well. Scenes like the ice dome collapsing just seemed to lack a certain kind of punch, and I think that might have been because there was no room for tension or forewarning. Ironically, I think that the lack of tension stemmed from the smoothness of your sentence structure, haha.

Anyway, I'm going to stop nit-picking, because I really, really loved this. It was a great read with amazing vision and imagery. Daetrin scene/world building is best scene/world building. Best of luck for all your future writing endeavours!

#36 · 136w, 3d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Anyone else notice, the god that essentially saves RBD's and Flutters is described almost exactly like Discord? O_o

#37 · 136w, 2d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Well-written, engaging, page-turning plot.  Definitely deserves a thumbs-up.  One question, though: why the "romance" tag?  The change in their relationship (as mentioned on the last page) seemed more to me like a closer friendship than a romance.  I didn't pick up on anything romantic at all in the story.  Maybe I'm missing some subtle innuendos...? :rainbowhuh:

#38 · 136w, 2d ago · · · Terra Firma ·


That was my first thought when it was initially described at the island lake.  There are some subtle differences, though.  Not to mention that the characterization is completely unlike that of canon Discord.

#39 · 136w, 2d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

>>315602 yea. Other then that though......:rainbowhuh:

#40 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

I found Apotheosis before this, but have now read both several times. And you are a master. Each time through reads as naturally and engagingly as the first.

#41 · 131w, 1d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Hm. Speak of Rainbowshy or Flutterdash or whatever else - all I found was a grateful, heart-mending end to a crazy adventure starring two very different ponies, their differences between somehow saving both of them from terrible danger - mere chatter amongst a greater truth. Faith, hope and the knowing what comes shall be overcome is the permeating gift left me from this wonderful tale.

Well written, well inspired. I look forward to more of this sort of writing. Huzzah!


#42 · 130w, 6h ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Read this again, just because it's THAT good.

Adventure romances are win, which is why my next story will be one.

#43 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

One of the best stories I've read

#44 · 129w, 2d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

A lot of people complaining about the ending, I found it sweet.  Well done, I enjoyed reading it.

#45 · 129w, 5h ago · · · Terra Firma ·

I wrote a poem for this story. Here it is.

#46 · 129w, 5h ago · · · Terra Firma ·


Oh wow, fantastic, I certainly was not expecting anything like this.  Thank you!

#47 · 129w, 5h ago · · · Terra Firma ·


I was asked to read over your story and write a poem for it. A few months ago I had been going through a stint of allowing people to request stories and poems from me and a poem on your story happened to be one of them. Even though it wasn't my idea to write the poem, I still had a lot of fun reading and writing for your story.

Ahem... anyway, what exactly about my poem was "fantastic"? (leans in close, nearly falling off chair)

#48 · 129w, 5h ago · · · Terra Firma ·


I knew nothing about this!  Who requested it?

And the poem definitely manages to distill the emotive components out and in doing so heightens them since they're more concentrated. Though it seems one-sided I freely admit OTEOTM was not narrator-balanced so it certainly is more from Dash's POV as the poem is.  That's probably due to the high contrast between the two though, Dash has a tendency to seize agency.

#49 · 128w, 5d ago · · · Terra Firma ·

Well, in my first month of being a full fledged brony, I have read some of the greatest stories I have ever read. I have not seen a greater story with such a good example of character development and not to mention keeping the spunk of rainbow dash and the subtle actions and words of fluttershy WHILE showing advancements in their characters. This is a very memorable story and I did not see much romance, but I did see a relationship emerge. It was of a great love of a friend and not of a deeper variety. You, sir, get a 5 star from me.     :fluttershysad: :heart: :rainbowderp:

#50 · 128w, 5d ago · · · Terra Firma ·


Thank you, thank you, it's not as good as it probably could have been, but I was mostly happy with what I did.  

Now, on to Apotheosis! >.>

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