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The Historian


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Death is scary. Death is painful. Death is lonesome even surrounded by many, but moreso when it happens out of the blue.

What would you do if you had a second chance? In a new world, one of peace and prosperity. One you're already familiar with, and one you know the quirks of.

For one man, we find some answers and end up with a boatload of new questions. But, in many ways, it's just The Same Old Story you've already heard. He's just another Human in Equestria.

//First Fic, all criticisms accepted + wanted//Further characters added as they become relevant//

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 49 )

Wrote this whole thing in a funk the past few days. I'm fully expecting it to be terrible, but I may be pleasantly surprised.

Comments and Criticisms appreciated.

This is chilling; it touches my soul in ways I cannot describe and brings spectral visions of escape from this empty life. Keep it up & now following you.

Me gusta man, all i have to say. im expecting more of this really soon :rainbowlaugh: no, im serious :trixieshiftleft:

You've spiked my interest please continue.

Very good writing, definitely tracking.

love it already! :pinkiehappy: you had me at power outages

I Needs more..............IT TO GOOD!:raritycry:

Well I read the first chapter, so far so good. Fav + thumb.

Must say though, I've been electrocuted so many times in so many ways, I think it's safe to say you wouldn't die from a teensy little 110v shock (220 if you're on the strange side of the planet). I've been zapped by household voltage, car igntion coils, and even burned a hole in my left palm from a computer power supply's main capacitor. A few months ago, a parts delivery driver gave me one of those electric zap prank pens to sign the invoice. I tried writing with it a few times, finally gave up and said 'your pen don't work.' He gave me the weirdest look and told me it was a prank pen that was supposed to shock me. I just lol'd :rainbowlaugh:

But um... you know... however you want to kill your main character is fine. :fluttershysad:

I must read more of this fanfic :D:moustache:

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Party pooper.

I never said that he died in a factual sense. That's only the character's assumption at this point, because that was what it felt like. For all we know, his atoms were dissolved by an unknown electrical reaction, and resolved in another universe entirely. The initial pain, we can thus assume, is lost atoms and other issues created by the transfer. Now, just let me hang this lampshade somewhere...

1186364 Figured you'd say something like that. :rainbowwild:

On a lighter note, idk this story did it or not, but I had a dream about getting lost in a dark snowy wood.

I'm afraid this next chapter didn't really have as much mojo as I had before while writing it. Not sure why.

I now present: A Boring Day in Ponyville General.

that was really... interesting? . . . . *crickets* it was alright, should have made a heavy reference when he was fighting bears

Um, I really like his... beard?
I like this story. It is a well written story.
Alex beardo reminds me of that guy at the farmer's market who makes fishing poles out of deer feet.
(I'm sorry if this comment is completely nonsensical, but I have a fever in the triple digits and it's 11:55. I may come back later to edit this statement.)

i like it but if im allowed to be curious is the fanfic you mentioned real? if it is what is it called?

The fic at the beginning? That's "Oh to be Old Again"

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/35763/Oh-to-be-Old-Again

One of my faves on this site, really.

This is turning out to be an awesome story! I'm not surprised it has gotten so much praise, so I'm gonna add to that praise.
Good Job Sir! :pinkiehappy:

I find this to be one of the funniest stories I have read so far, I can't wait for the next chapter either!

"I facepalmed as my muddied and dirtied pants went on, along with my boots and socks."

He put on dirty pants at the hospital... but I thought the doc said they were sent to be cleaned in a previous chapter..?
"I don't suppose you have my old clothes?"

"They're being washed, at the moment. I noticed your species doesn't have a... ah... carrying place, as it were?" He asked, and I coughed awkwardly.

Also...

' "MONSTERR!" She screamed in terror, and rushed into the kitchen,'
Sweetie was afraid he was a monster... but she already met him at the hospital while visiting scoot...?
"I'll say!" Said Sweetie, her hooves holding Applebloom's back. "You look like somebody tried slicing you up with some kitchen knife!"

The clothes have been worn for months. Even though they've been washed, they're still going to be stained and messy.

It's a little different to see him in a hospital bed all bandaged up and to see him at full height and having just noticed him. It's the difference between meeting a bear in a zoo and suddenly running into one on the wilderness. One's "oooh cool" and the other's "OMG!"

When you said you played Spectrum for scootaloo, do you mean the one by acousticbrony?

OK, chugged 7 chapters. Damn good stuff, sir.

I do say, the conditions for Sweetie calling Alex a monster are a bit strange. I'd buy the 'he's huge and scary when he's not in a hospital bed' thing, but again, the conditions. She's depressedly trudging down the stairs, then sees him and calls him a monster and runs away. It reads less like a surprise to her than it does something in her opinion of him has changed. A quick fix would be to give Sweetie a line like 'Oh, sorry, I didn't recognize you Alex!' She smiles and walks away. And we don't know why she was all sad in the first place.

Also, HARUMPH!

I didn't get a harumph outta that guy!

Give the mayor a harumph!

Harumph?

You better watch your ass!

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Eeeyup.

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Yeah, it was more of an oversight. Gonna change that now.

I'm a an Onomatopoeia master, what can I say?

1198467 I guess the harumph reference was lost on you.

oh you're fucking kidding me!
If you're on fimfiction you HAVE to know who he is!
THERE IS NO POSSIBLE WAY TO NOT KNOW THESE THINGS IF YOU'RE ON FIMFICTION! :flutterrage:
thumbdown!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

though if you made it so you lost your memeories from the zap then that would work. I have not seen any sentince that proves that yet so we wouldn't know

Just as an update to all: School starts in two days, so I'm probably going to update on weekends from now on, starting the weekend after this. I have some story-boarding and general things to work on before I move forward. And, again, please try and toss some input in on what you'd like to see? 315 minds are better than one, right?

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The fanfic he mentioned is Oh to be Old Again. It's a memorable fanfic, and has been pretty amusing.

Edit: Didn't notice this was already replied to in another chapter. Ah well.

OBJECTION!!!The great and powerful Doctor Whooves shall not be addressed as Time Turner

Are you till working on this? Because its been at least 3 weeks since last update, maybe even more. Not that I am rushing you, its just good to know you are still working on it. I assume you have A-Levels or coursework in which case I am prepared to be patient.

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It's first in my writing cycle, but schoolwork is kind of stopping it up right now (3 AP classes). I'll see if I have time for a chapter this weekend, but no promises.

1355023 Very well, I will remain patient. Thank you for this conversation, it was very informative.

I freakin cried at the end of this because the story just ends right there

Please sir, may I have more? :fluttercry:

"We're supposed to be friends here Applebloom! Why can't you two back me up on a solo thing?"

Friends Don't let Friends do stupid things.

ALONE

Well this story still says incomplete....

At least there is that.

im waitin.... i be waitin mah brony.

hey is there really a story like the one you mentioned in the beginning of this chapter

Awww, story is as dead as the Main Character seems to be.

You are going to make more right? This is one of my favourite stories....:pinkiehappy:

I'm gonna call it. Scootaloo is gonna get adopted by Alex

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