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After the events of the Royal Wedding, Spike still isn't entirely sure what marriage is. Isn't it just when two ponies decide that they're going to live with each other for the rest of their lives? Well, there's certainly one pony whom he wouldn't mind spending the rest of his life with: Donut Joe and his toothsome toroidal treats.
Edited by awesomepony Exuno.
That was not at all how I was expecting Donut Joe to react. Can't tell if I should be 
, 
, or 
Hilarious. Upvote solely for using "gustatious." Someone took LATIN. Or just knows lots of weird words. There were a few minor grammar mistakes, mostly having to do with tenses. In addition, I would recommend not indenting and leaving a line empty between paragraphs; although this is not proper writing format, you'll find most fanfic writers use no indenting and an empty line because it's easier to read on a screen. The standard format for writing was built for paper books. Really more of a stylistic choice, but most people find it easier to read that way.
hahaha i would love a sequel to this
a sequel full of doughnuts and extra smooth and sweet cream.
Hmm. I'm afraid that is not the ending I was looking for. Not my kind of humour. Which doesn't mean its bad of course, its just not for me.
This might be the kind of story where you might wanna try a couple of alternate endings, if you feel up to it. Would not make separate chapters for them though, should you be willing to do it.
I was hoping that the ending would be a bit ambiguous as to whether he was serious or not; but I think I may have messed that up with the "hearts in his eyes" thing. I actually had an idea for an extra scene after this, where it's revealed that the whole thing was a setup by Twilight to get Spike to curb his donut addiction, but I decided against it.
As for the age thing, in my headcanon Spike is at least generally as old as the other Mane 6 ponies (in dragon years), or, at the very least, only 3-5 years younger than Twilight (depending on how old she was when she hatched him).The "baby" thing is more down to his relative youngness in the dragon life-cycle, his small size and his social naivety (a symptom of living with Twilight, a social shut-in herself).
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I knew it seemed cramped. I can fix that. 
Sorry. Maybe I had just misread something somewhere. 
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yeah that's it.
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