3. Of Bunnies and Rainbows
Chapter Three
The pegasus mare looked up at last and saw the Doctor standing there on the path; she let out a soft, tearful “eep” and shrank a little closer to the bunnies. Presumably, she was Fluttershy.
He suddenly comprehended that he must look like a bit of an outlandish oddity, so he respectfully removed his fez, setting it on the ground. Instantly he was by her side and speaking gently. “Hey now, it’s alright. I’m the Doctor. I’m here to help.” He doubted whether there was anything he could do, but it was not his style to abandon those in distress.
She sniffed and gazed at him with huge, sea-colored eyes. Dark tracks made by tears wetted her cheeks and she looked absolutely miserable. Finally, she seemed to overcome her doubts about him.
“O-okay,” she whispered. “Please…is there anything…anything at all…?” she trailed off, glancing again at the critters and hiding behind her mane. Her voice was barely audible.
Quietly and slowly, in order not disturb the skittish mare, he bent over the trio of bunnies. They were wet and bedraggled, their fur sticking out at crazy angles. He carefully shifted each one with a hoof. There was no response. Out came his screwdriver. He swept it over each body, willing the device to gather the correct data. There could be no doubt; they had drowned.
Finally, he turned his gaze to her. Just a tiny flicker of hope had been kindled in those eyes, but it died when she saw his expression. “I’m very, very sorry,” he said. “I’m so sorry, but…I’m too late. There’s nothing I can do.” He sighed. What good was it being the “Doctor” if he seemed to lose so many lives? They were only rabbits to him, but to this pony, they had evidently been friends and cherished creatures.
She gave a little cry and burst into a fresh wave of sobs, putting her face in her hooves. The Doctor knew what to do. Without saying a word, he placed a hoof over her shoulders and stood silently. For a long time the pair was motion less by the riverside, the hush punctuated only by the muffled sound of weeping and the chattering of the river water as it rushed by. He didn’t know the direct reason for the three bunnies being so dear to her, but it didn’t matter for the moment.
At last, she sniffled a few times, wiped her eyes and spoke in a broken little voice. “They were just starting to get better,” she said, looking off into the distance. “They were all very sick and they had recently started coming around…” He knew she was only half speaking to him.
He removed him hoof. “Were they very close to you?” he asked quietly.
She nodded. “Two brothers and one sister of my friend Angel Bunny.” With a little whimper, she gulped back more tears.
“And Angel is…special?”
Another nod. “I take care of a lot of animals, and all of them come and go, but…Angel’s never left me. I’ve known him since he was a tiny little rabbit and I understand him better than any other critter. He’s going to be so upset when I…when I b-break the n-news.” The Doctor looked at her flank and saw three pink butterflies. A trend was beginning to surface, he thought. Pinkie had boasted party balloons and she was clearly a hyperactive party mare. Rarity had sported gems and she was a fashionista whose store had contained several gem-encrusted garments. This mare had butterflies, saying she took care of animals. Perhaps they were an indication of certain talents? He thought about his hourglass mark and wondered.
But now was not the time for that. “Listen, what’s your name?”
She glanced at him again for the first time in a while, and now she seemed to grasp that she had been conversing with a complete stranger. “F-Fluttershy,” she murmured, her voice sinking low again.
He laid down (or was it sitting? Or both?) on the ground in front of her and assumed a kind but firm expression. “Now, Fluttershy, you’re going to have to be strong for me. I know it’s rough, really I do. I’m not asking you to do this just yet, but soon I’m going to need you to tell me exactly how this happened. I’ve been doing a bit of investigating around here and it’s important. But not yet. Not so soon. First, I’d like you to tell me if there’s a special place where you’d like to…lay your friends to rest. Remember, I’m the Doctor. I want to help.”
For a few moments, she was silently. Then she gave a tiny nod and he saw a new strength in her eyes, the strength to overcome grief. “I…I can do that. Okay. Um, there’s a place nearby, it’s down in a little hollow where the river branches off into a stream. That’s where I lay all of my lost friends…” She gulped. “…to rest.”
“Would you be so kind as to show me there?”
Fluttershy lifted the three bodies with all the tender care of a mother and placed them on his back, at his request. It appeared to be the pony style of carrying things if one had no saddlebags. They were light and felt like feathers on his back. She glided over to her house and came wordlessly back, holding a shovel in her hooves.
Together the pair set off for the hollow, not speaking but instead simply taking part in each other’s company. The sober feeling of the occasion rested heavily on both of them; Fluttershy flew a feet off the ground, kept her eyes downcast and sniffed every now and then, while the Doctor stared ahead and tried to keep his mind from straying to the many, many friends he had lost. Nine hundred years was a long time to live. The fact that he had spent so many of those years in the company of humans, and other species that died young, had rendered the pain of a friend’s passing a frequent thing. He could sympathize with the pegasus.
The animal graveyard came into view as they left the main river behind and went down a grassy slope. A foot-wide stream bubbled merrily along its grassy edge. Small stones in neat rows protruded from the ground, each one marked with neat letters spelling out the fallen animal’s name. Flowers poked their way through the turf here and there, completing the restful feeling of peace. There was an open space at one end where Fluttershy began to dig.
He raised a hoof. “Here,” he coaxed, “let me.” He took the spade and began to do the work himself. The yellow pegasus opened her mouth to say something, closed it again and trotted off, quietly searching the banks for suitable stones.
It took some maneuvering and experimentation to figure out how to use a shovel with hooves, but he managed it. Thankfully, he did not have to use his mouth. The work was not too strenuous; he was only digging graves for bunnies, after all and by the time Fluttershy had gathered the headstones he had three rabbit-sized holes ready in the ground. They looked at each other and nodded. She picked up the bodies one by one and lowered them gently into their graves. He put up his hoof in a salute as she did so. He didn’t know why, it simply felt appropriate.
The Doctor used the shovel once more to fill in the graves. She placed the markers at each tomb’s head and they stood in a moment of silence. Out of the corner of his eye, he saw a single tear slide down Fluttershy’s cheek, the sunlight glinting on that one droplet and intensifying the feeling it expressed. The smell of freshly turned earth played sharp in his nostrils and he suddenly took it all in; I just dug bunny graves for a Pegasus I’ve never met before. He did not resent this. No, in a way it was rather fantastic, new experiences always were, but it was also heartrending at the same time. He doubted he would have done it for any old person. There was simply an air of kind and gentle innocence about the pegasus; it had made him want to help her.
Her voice shook him from his thoughts. “Um, Doctor? Listen…thank you…thank you for everything this afternoon. I don’t know what I would have done if you hadn’t come.” She gave him the tiniest of smiles. Considering the way she was feeling, he deemed that the greatest of rewards. “You said that you wanted me to tell you happened? I-I think I’m ready to now. If you don’t mind, can we go back to my cottage? I don’t think I can do it here. I’ll come back later to mark…to mark the stones.” Looking away, she hoofed at the ground. “If that’s okay with you, I mean.”
He assured her that it was indeed okay and they wound their way back up the path. Of course, he didn’t forget to retrieve his fez on the way. He was somewhat relieved that Fluttershy didn’t pry into his life and past with questions, and that around her the quiet was anything but awkward.
They arrived and as soon as she opened the door, animals bombarded their adopted mother. Apologetically, she told him he could sit on the couch while she tended to a few of their needs. Here a new dilemma presented itself: how to sit. He stared at the couch, a low-slung green affair with plump cushions, and jumped on it. With his back legs dangling and his front ones at his sides, he sat like a biped, but that felt extremely strange. He tried a variety of other positions, falling off the couch several times, before settling on a dog-like posture that was the most natural. Thankfully, Fluttershy noticed none of this. She was too busy with her critters. He was comforted to notice that caring for them appeared to take her mind off the recent tragedy.
Ever the fascinated viewer, the Doctor drank his fill of the sights while muttering under his breath to himself. Beautiful birdhouses and cages, clearly hoof-carved and hoof-wrought with extreme care, hung from the rafters that supported the turf-life roof. There were strategically placed holes in the wall for mice and such, while rabbits, squirrels, chipmunks, all sorts of small creatures hopped in and out of hutches on the floor. Fluttershy went into a door leading into the kitchen and returned with a bag of bird seed in her hooves. She flew to each house and cage in turn, feeding the occupants and humming as she did so. Some of the birds looked ill or injured and these she spoke a few words of comfort to. Then she attended to each hutch. Every separate species got a refill of its food, and he watched in fascination as she changed the bandages on a tiny raccoon with a broken leg.
“That’s just fantastic!” he exclaimed as she finished up and settled down on a chair opposite him.
She titled her head at him. “What is, if you don’t mind my asking?”
“All of this! What you do, it’s really quite spectacular. No one’s telling you to do it but you take care of each and every animal here like they’re your family. It’s really quite…amazing.” Humans never ceased to amaze him, and now it seemed ponies would do the same.
She blushed heavy and hid a smile behind her mane. “Oh, it’s nothing really. It’s what I love to do the most. Although lately, some of the animals have been acting so strangely…thank goodness they’re all okay now.”
“What do you mean, strangely?” He rubbed at his mane, mussing it up with his hoof and knocking the fez askew. “Now, don’t you think I’m just someone prying and asking questions, because someone who pries is just boring. I don’t like being boring, really I don’t. I’m, ehm, investigating odd happenings around Equestria. Generally we keep it to magical fields of study and other related things, but really we only want to make sure everything runs smoothly so anything can count. I try not to act too official because, again, boring!” He gave her an awkward grin.
For a second, he was afraid that she wouldn’t accept this. But she nodded. “If you say so. It’s fine with me. Anyway, about their behavior, well…the biggest instance was with the three bunnies.” The catch in her timid little voice showed she had not gotten over her loss, but went bravely on. “They had all been very sick and feverish, but they were starting to perk up and move around again. They played a little together and were eating more. Then, just today, all three suddenly seemed to go…wild. They had so much energy for recovering little bunnies, and they were running around the house and upsetting all the other little animals. It was as if they didn’t even know what they were doing. Their eyes…they didn’t look right. Then, before I could stop them, they all climbed up on the furniture and jumped out the window. They must have lost their heads, because they ran right in the direction, and…the current was too strong. I couldn’t get here in time.”
He broke the ensuing silence. “I’m sorry, Fluttershy. I’m so, so sorry. That’s a terrible thing to have happened.”
She shot him grateful glance. “Thank you.” Clearing her throat, she kept speaking. “But that was the worst time. Other things have happened, though.”
“Like what?”
“Nothing too specific, but…some of the birds will be flying around, and then they’ll all of a sudden lose control. A few of them have gotten injured from hitting objects when that happens. It’s so odd. Then one day, some of my squirrels who were the best of little buddies starting fighting each other for no reason. They were going crazy. I had to separate the poor dears and put them in opposite hutches or they could’ve gotten hurt. The same thing happened with some of the chipmunks.”
“The other big thing is that some of the critters seem to have problems with their identities at random times. They’ll try to take each other’s food or act like each other. I’ve had mice jumping off furniture trying to fly and birds trying to fit into mouse holes. Bunnies will try to eat nuts and squirrels will try to eat the rabbit’s carrots. They’re all sort of small problems, but adding it all up, it does make me worry.”
“Now don’t you fret. The Doctor is here, and trust me, I want to help set thing right.” And figure out if any of this weirdness has any connection to me, he added mentally.
Fluttershy opened her mouth to reply, but she never got there. An unexpected, loud crash sent the birds into panicked flight and the grounded animals into a mad scramble. She and the Doctor looked up in surprise to see a blue pony head poking through a new hole in the roof, one graced with rose-colored eyes and a flamingly vibrant rainbow mane.
That face looked sheepish. “Uh…Sorry, Shy. New trick didn’t work out so well. I kinda lost my control there.” She caught sight of the Doctor. “Hey, I haven’t seen you before. Who’s the new guy?”
“I don’t mean to be rude, but perhaps it would be best if you removed yourself from the roof before we go through with the introductions, hm?”
“Oh. Right. Heh.” With a grunt and a strong tug, she managed to extricate herself. A second later the mare strutted through the front door.
“Don’t worry, Fluttershy, I’ll definitely come back and fix that. My bad,” she said, glancing at the hole. The mare, who was a pegasus as well, was the most tomboyish one he had seen in Ponyville so far. Her mane and tail were spiked, her mark was a rainbow lightning bolt shooting out of a cloud, and she had an athlete’s build.
“Oh, that’s okay Rainbow,” Fluttershy replied meekly. “As long as it’s not there for too long.”
“So, mister, who’s the new face in Ponyville?” the blue pony asked casually.
“Oh, me? I’m the Doctor, just the Doctor, nothing else but. Who’re you?” He straightened his fez and beamed.
She raised a skeptical eyebrow, taking in his appearance. (Wait. Ponies had eyebrows? Could they really-no, bad, that was a train of thought for another time.) “Just the Doctor…right. Me, I’m Rainbow Dash! The one, the only, the awesome.” Her wings flared open and she flicked her mane out her eyes with a hoof. “So, what’s brought you to Fluttershy’s place?”
The Doctor glanced at the pony in question, who lowered her blue eyes and stared at the floor. “There was an accident today with three of my bunnies and the river. The Doctor h-helped me take care of it.”
Rainbow clearly understood the meaning. She moved over and put a hood on her friend’s shoulder. “Aw, Shy, that’s so terrible. I’m sorry.”
“Thanks Rainbow. I’m okay now thanks to the Doctor.” Fluttershy flapped her wings open and gracefully flew to each bird, coaxing them back into their houses, leaving the other two on the ground to converse.
Dash was clearly still bemused by his getup. “What’s brought you to Ponyville? No offense or anything, but I’ve totally never seen anyone dressed like you before.”
“I’m from a long way away,” he answered enigmatically. “From a place where fezzes are cool. What’s brought you to Fluttershy’s roof?”
She perked up. “I was practicing one of my newest flight tricks! I want to get into the Wonderbolts. They’re my favorite flight team and my new moves are sure to knock them flat!” But then she looked depressed, her ears drooping. “I can’t seem to pull it off, though. I always end up crashing into somepony’s roof.” She snickered, a little self-consciously.
“Roof…the roof…ah!” He could almost feel the light bulb go off above his head. “I’ve had a great idea, no, a brilliant idea! Listen, I’m not going to explain this now, it would take too long, but long story short I’m a bit of an investigator. I look into…stuff. Do you think you could get me up onto the roof?”
Rainbow blinked at him several times. “Uh…the roof?”
“Yes. The roof. Of course the roof! You crashing into gave me an idea. My job around here is looking into the odd stuff so why not get higher up to look for the odd stuff?”
Her look suggested he was insane. Which, of course, he was. “I…guess I could. I don’t get it, but hey, it can be done. I’ll need Shy’s help though.” To emphasize that last point, she yelled up, “Hey, Fluttershy! Could ya gimmie a hoof? Doc here says he needs to get on the roof for whatever loony reason.”
The two pegasi were baffled, but the Doctor offered no explanation. Their combined strength (although Dash certainly offered more) was enough to lift him up off the ground and to the top of the cottage.
The mares stood on the ground, watching in bemusement as he climbed to the highest point next to the weather vane.
“Oh please be careful, please be careful!” Fluttershy kept saying.
“Don’t worry about me, I’ve climbed way higher than this before! It’s just a matter of keeping your foo-I mean, hoofing!” He withdrew his screwdriver and pressed its button, aiming at the sky and in all directions. The sun was beginning to set.
“Hey Doc, what’s that glowing thing you got there?” Rainbow hollered.
“Ish mer surnic scurdruver!”
“What?”
He spat it into his hoof. Oh, how he hated having to operate it with his mouth. “It’s my sonic screwdriver!”
“Oh! Uh…okay!”
The thing in question was telling interesting things. Most unusual things. He kept up a running monologue. “Well that’s weird, I’m detecting a massive disturbance up there. But that’s up there, way up in the sky. What could be up in the sky? I doubt the humans gave this world spaceships, I mean, doesn’t seem to fit with the time period.” He pressed the button of the screwdriver again. He spat it out once more. “And what’s more, it’s a sort of time and space disturbance, too, not just an atmospheric one. But that doesn’t make much sense. Or does it?”
“Doctor, what are you saying? I can’t quite hear you!” Fluttershy’s voice jarred him from his rant.
“Nothing important! Just talking to myself!” He reared back, screwdriver sweeping, trying to pinpoint the exact place of the disturbance. He replaced the device. “It’s no good, I need some sort of telescope. Maybe I can-” He stretched himself as far as he would go. It was a precarious position, teetering on his hind legs and gazing at the sky. “Can’t see a thing, blast it all-whoawhoawhoa!” He lost his balance, tipped over and fell off the roof.
“Oh my goodness!” Fluttershy shrieked.
Luckily, the cottage wasn’t too tall, and the grass of Equestria was surprising soft and springy. Smacking into it wasn’t the most fun thing, but at least he was still alive despite being temporarily winded.
“You okay?” Dash asked anxiously, speeding over and standing by him.
“Please say you’re not hurt!” Fluttershy looked stricken.
“Oh..ow..okay…ugh.” He shifted about in his place on the ground. “Nothing broken, that’s a surprise, but very nice. I think I’m just going to be a bit bruised. No, very bruised. But that’s okay.”
“What were you up there for, anyway? If you don’t mind saying that is.”
He didn’t really hear the yellow pony’s question. He was staring at the sunset skies instead, thinking hard. “I’ve just learned something interesting. Something very interesting…something timey-wimey…do either of you know where I could find a telescope?”
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Updated just hours before the new season of Doctor Who airs! Yay!
So this scene may or may not have dragged a bit, I wasn't sure how long to make it. In any case, as always comments on the correct protrayal of characters are always welcome!
Well of to Twilights place
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And I have to miss the new episode...
Hope someone records it.
Anyway, another good chapter, definitely showing that Eleven is not all jokes and bow ties. He can certainly be goofy, but can be just as serious if he wants.
Also, I did notice some errors (Rainbow asking "gimme a hand," spelling, etc.), so I would advise doing a quick proofread.
Other than that, good chapter. Allonsy!
He just found out the sun and moon revolve around the planet didn't he?
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couple typos:
Fluttershy flew a feet off the ground
He raised a roof.(I'm the carpenter just the carpenter
but went bravely one.
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No, he didn't, but that would have been amusing.
Also, thanks. I make stupid mistakes like that a lot.
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That's exactly the sort of feeling I was looking for, so I'm glad it came off well. I admit I'm an awful proofreader, it takes three or four reads for me to catch mistakes sometimes.
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Is it? Oh. I've seen it different ways. I'll probably change it later.
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Hmmm, well if that's not what he just discovered, I'm now expecting that to come up later.
Celestia: "One moment Twilight, I'll help you and your new friend as soon as I raise the sun."
Doctor: "...pardon?"
*Magic performance and sun raising*
Doctor:dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Soarin_dayum.png
...This video makes me miss Donna.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_cry.png Great companion she was.
...Hmmm I wonder what he found though. This being Doctor Who, it literally could be anything.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Rainbow_Dash.png
Also no problem, everyone makes them, you less than most I've seen.
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Since multiple people seem to be awaiting 11's reaction to alicorns controlling the sun and moon, I'll be sure to throw in something about that. However, I don't think I plan on giving Celestia a major role for a few reasons. (I'm not TOO sure yet, but...)
Donna. Omg Donna. She's my favorite. It took forever to decide that I liked her better than Rose, but I did.
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She shows up to either teach a lesson, or perform a Worf, to show how powerful the villain is.
Here's hoping Celestia gets to beat a baddy on her own next season, and show the awesome power I know she has.
Well that's fine, even the show doesn't give Celestia a major role.
Yes Donna! Rose was great and all but she got a bit bland to me, plus I really didn't like the romance between them.(Just didn't work in my eyes) One reason I loved Donna was because there wasn't a romance, just a mate...as in friend!dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rainbow_Dash.png
This is quite an amusing take on the Doctor in Equestria. Not so much the circumstances, but just your writing style that captures the wackiness of the Doctor so well. It's like we're in his head, seeing his slightly disjointed thought processes. And then the third chapter, with some rather depressing mood whiplash; honestly, poor Fluttershy.
You write very well, which is the appeal of this fic. That, and bow ties, because bow ties are cool. 
However, I did notice an error. In Chapter 2, you had “Welcome to Carousel Boutique, where every garment is sheik, unique, and magnifique!” I believe what you meant was “chique”, not “shiek”. “Shiek” is something else. Just as a heads-up.
Oh, also, I can’t wait to see Twilight meet the Doctor. His disjointed thought processes will clash quite amusingly with her OCD-ish tendencies.
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Exactly. Plus, I have a bit of a Luna-is-best-princess-and-Celestia-is-an-effing-trollface bias.
)
And not only is Donna just a friend, she's bloody hilarious. (Which is why I loathed Martha. She was in love with the Doctor, pined after him, bitched about him never noticing her and wasn't very amusing.
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), and I can't believe I didn't notice my error. 
It's comments such as this one that make my day a thousand times better and make me want to keep writing. Thank you! A crazy trip through the eyes of the wacky Doctor was exactly what I had intended, so I'm really glad you like it.
You know, I know why I put sheik in (long thought process so I won't explain it
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Donna and her grandfather were great. (Her grandfather's actor was actually in the second Doctor Who movie!) She was hilarious and really kept the Doctor on his toes.
Martha? Oh you mean black Rose.(seriously she was a carbon copy of Rosedl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rainbow_Dash.png ) What a waste she was. If they wanted a Rose character...why not just keep Rose?!
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Seriously first time I saw Martha I thought: "Why is Rose here and why did she dye her hair?"
Hmmm, yaknow...I think you were the only person who updated a story I'm tracking today...that makes you awesome to me.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png
Great chapter!
Can't wait for the all new Doctor Who tonight! 
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I-Im awesome?! Shucks, you people are way too good at making my day.
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Well we have to do something in exchange for you entertaining us with your awesome story.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra2.png
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One would hope that they do read it in his voice, since it's kind of what I intended, but it's not a huge deal if they don't.
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It's a firefox addon. Though I think it works for Chrome as well.
http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/25924 (This blog explains outlines it.)
If you use Firefox download the addon greasemonkey then install the scripts. You'll have a whole bunch of extra emoticon options in the same area the normal ones are. (they're still there too)dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png
Well of to Twilight's house!
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Hey 1200329 stole my line!
I'm not much of a proofreader, but I like your story line so far.
I think that you've captured the Doctor perfectly. Oh! and I demand Daleks...........
MUST GO WATCH DOCTOR WHO!
*flips computer table and rushes to the television*
I love my DVR..............
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Oh God, I know. I was basically melting into a puddle of fangirl in front of my TV and the premiere was absolutely *brilliant*.
Daleks....hmmm. Bit of a stretch. I have a few other ideas in mind, though.
1202178 It's Doctor Who. Its always a stretch. And the Daleks can be used in anything. They're the coolest badguys ever. At least 20% cooler than any other villain.
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Hmmm...well...you're right, really...
And I think I just had a plot idea too...
1202222 AAAAAAAAAHHH YEEEEEAAAAAHHH! We gonna get some Daleks aint we!
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And that is all I have to say.
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Timey wimey shit's about to go down
You might want to refine Pinkie's and Rarity's lines. I don't think Rarity would suggest a new fasion line with bow ties and fezzes. Also, slow the dialogue down during the bunny scene. It was obviously intended to be very emotional, but with the speed it went by, you didn't get much out of it. Try to add hoof movements or details about the scene during the dialogue. Try to expand some thoughts and lines to make it last longer.
Good fic, good grammar. I have no more petty complaints!
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Hm. Thanks for shedding light on all of that. Perhaps I'll revise things; I'll definitely give chapter 3 another reread. I didn't want it to be too long of a scene, since I figured that'd just slow everything down in general.
And as for Rarity's suggestion, you never know with her, nor could I resist. So I think that's staying.
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Be prepared for the shit to go down over the course of more than just the next chapter.
On the Doctor's reaction to Celestia's and Luna's control over the sun and moon, I'd figure it wouldn't be too extreme. It's entirely within the Doctor's capabilities to drag stars across galaxies, I doubt he'd be too overly surprised. Intensely curious for sure.
1202977 BRILLIANT!
D r. who......... Dr. who........ Dr. who ........Dr. Whooves
wha
MOAR!
I have to wait for the episode to be available online. :|
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Well, I think it all depends on how it's revealed to him. You have a point, for sure. That's probably going to happen in the next chapter.
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I'm going to avoid hurting my brain here and say that your theory sounds about right. The fact that he keeps going back to visit the Ponds in the show and stuff sort of sets things askew, so let's say it's just after he says goodbye for the FIRST time.
i have a lot to say this is good but i did notese some interesting things the doctor not being interested in the phycic powers of unicorns
is derpy going to be in this
and how will tilight respond to the doctors time travleing abbility and likewize how twilight almost coused a grandfather paradox but simply caused an exusabal bootstrap paradox
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I don't like to give things away, so you'll have to wait and see. However I am planning a longer, more in-depth scene with the Doctor and Twilight that'll cover a lot since Twi loves to debate and find things out and such.
there is a DARLEK on page
1200659 No, I don't think it's 'chique' either. I believe it is 'chic'.
chic/SHēk/
Adjective:
Elegantly and stylishly fashionable.
Noun:
Stylishness and elegance, typically of a specified kind.
Synonyms:
adjective. stylish - elegant - smart - posh - fashionable - dressy
noun. style - elegance - smartness - elegancy
Definition for sheik:
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1242335: [color="red]Oh, yes, that's right. Silly me.
Its tha moon man.. the moooooonnnn...
Moar plz. I am loving this! Your characterisation of the Doctor is perfect.
I am also loving your name.
A Doctor Who fic that actually has the Fourth Wall as a plotpoint? My, this is certainly most intriguing! *monocle*
The stars are all wrong? The animals - aka, the characters of the show with the least developed... well, character - are having an identity crisis?
Why do I get the feeling that something isn't quite right anymore with our ponies little "pocket-universe"?
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You get the feeling because something ISN'T right, my friend.
I dunno about the Fourth Wall though, because the Fourth Wall is ever a concept that confuses me despite how hard I try to understand it.
>>everyone
Sorry for the large update gap, a combo of excessive schoolwork and writer's block is making things difficult. I'll try to start chapter four soon.
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Heh, well I'm not the one to complain, I'm still enthusiastically working on the next three chapters of my story and yet haven't managed to update in 2 months.
What's so difficult to understand about about the Fourth Wall? It's the thing Pinkie Pie keeps breaking. ;)
Also, I'm writing a story about that, perhaps I can clear things up if you phrase your question a bit more specific?
A few things I don't like:
1. add a line after each paragraph, and keep them separated. ( Makes it easier to read)
2. Why are all the ponies saying 'anyone'?
3.
4. doctor seems to be a bit pushy. (Though, maybe that's just me.)
5. Don't let me eat pears I hate pears!
And idk what else to say. I like the story idea, but bunnies make me cry?
Y u do tat?
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I know what the fouth wall is, I suppose, but...I still don't get what it means to break it.
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1. I think that makes a story look too choppy sometimes I don't think I'll be doing that.
2. They are? Sorry. First pony fic, I miss some of the terminology, don't sue me.
3.
4. Well, he is pushy sometimes.
5. ....As far as I know, I didn't mention pears in this chapter.
>>everyone
I'm trying to write, but my time is being cut rather short, and unfortunately I have to devote it to things other than crossover fics. I also want to do my best to please the various people who've pointed out potential points of interest that should be explored in the story, but that's a bit difficult. I'll do my best. 
I'm possibly feeling an on hiatus gap possibly coming on.
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1. Alright then...
2. Be the pony.
3.
4. That he is.
5. Apples are rubbish, I hate apples.
new list:
1. Don't quit!
2. I really enjoy the story.
3. Hiatus suck!
4. Please?
5. encouragement! (Woot, woot you can do it!)
This is just great! Can't wait for the next chapter.