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FoughtDragon01

Joined August 2012
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Aim for greatness, not perfection. Trust me, you'll save yourself SO many headaches in the long run.

Stories (8)

  • Live by the Creed
    Rainbow Dash discovers a dark secret in her family's past that could change her life forever.

    209,222 words · 10,412 views · 1,183 likes · 23 dislikes
  • "Diplomatic Relations"
    Celestia invites Chrysalis to Canterlot in order to discuss the possibility of repairing the relationship between changelings and ponies. Just about everyone else thinks that the two are discussing a relationship of a different kind.
    9,944 words · 2,482 views · 228 likes · 8 dislikes
  • Things Best Left Unknown
    Sometimes, history is forgotten for a reason.
    9,120 words · 964 views · 104 likes · 2 dislikes
  • Orderly Chaos
    Chaos is disappearing from Equestria, and it is not as nice as it sounds. As all of the land falls into an orderly, non-chaotic routine, the spirit of chaos himself and his begrudging purple companion must find a way to bring the chaos back.
    10,627 words · 397 views · 43 likes · 0 dislikes
  • An Uncomfortably High Number of Twilights
    6,621 words · 288 views · 39 likes · 0 dislikes
  • Rats!
    9,977 words · 193 views · 18 likes · 0 dislikes
  • Time is Convoluted
    8,392 words · 84 views · 11 likes · 0 dislikes
  • Can't Let You Go
    13,412 words · 298 views · 33 likes · 5 dislikes

Blog Posts (19)


For as long as Rainbow Dash could remember, her life was simple, straightforward, and planned out with one goal in mind: become the best flyer in all of Equestria. Simple. But when she unwittingly comes across a tool that allows her to relive the memories of her ancestors, that simplicity is challenged when she discovers dark secrets hidden in her family's past as well as Equestria's history that not only challenge her perceptions of reality, but threatens to alter her very psyche.

As she's thrust into the remnants of a centuries-long war, as she questions the morals of those around her, as she battles to separate reality from fantasy, will Rainbow be able to hold on to her own beliefs or will she embrace her family's blood-stained traditions and finish what they started?

First Published
27th Aug 2012
Last Modified
29th Apr 2014

Comments ( 1,025 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

This could be a lot of fun :pinkiehappy:

#2 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Tracking this one for now.

And take this:moustache:

#3 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Well, I'm intrigued.

I've read through what there was of Brotherhood of the Moon by Zak TH.

Let's see where you'll go with this concept of Rainbow Dash's ancestor being an assassin.

#4 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Nice start.

Gonna keep an Eye on this.

#5 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

You did good. Do you have an editor? This story could be much much more excellent.

#6 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Lemme guess, it's gonna be Dash chasing the goals of her ancestors, only to find out that one of her friends is a Templar, and then they have an epic showdown in front of Canterlot Castle, one of them dying in an overly-show-y fashion, and one of the Pieces of Eden is locked away in Luna's keeping, as she is also an Assassin.

...I swear, if I got that right, I'm gonna laugh. Really hard.

:pinkiesmile: "You sure you aren't learning too much from me?"

I can't learn enough; the Pinkie Sense is an enigma all its own!

#7 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

only 2 mistakes other than that it was awsome

#8 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

I'm wondering what Flutters saw... She seemed like she saw something embarrassing

Anyway, tracking this for now. .

#10 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Animus spell? Good concept.

#11 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Having not read this, nor played any Assasin's Creed games, this could be what sells me the games.

Fo:E sold me Fallout 3 and Fallout: New Vegas, after all.

#12 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Has promise, but needs serious editing. Will be watching this one.

#13 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Aceasta era uimitor. mai bune sa se drumul tau. si mai întuneric toamna in lumina.

(The fun is guseing what i'm saying. i'll give you a few hints. Stokes. 1800's)

#14 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Assassin's Creed crossover about Rainbow Dash? INSTANT WIN

#15 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

cool:moustache:

#16 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

You got me hooked! :pinkiehappy:

#17 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

MORE MORE MORE! I CRAVE THE AMAZINGNESS!!! :pinkiehappy::moustache:

#19 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

This is absolutely brilliant! I love this so much. Excellent writing skill you have. I love how easy you make it look to do a brilliant crossover like this. Keep it up! :pinkiehappy::yay:

#20 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

damn this is good.

“Please, do it quickly, and then meet me back home.” The stallion nodded, and the two parted ways. Shadow kept her eyes fixated on the stallion. She needed to get her hands on that schedule, but had to do so without causing a scene. That was simple enough.
Hands?:twilightoops:

#21 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1179114

Hehe. Oops.

#22 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

Looking good so far.

#23 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

One thing I notice is that you have a habit of changing tense in the middle of a sentence. Everything will start out in past-tense, and suddenly the rest will be in present-tense.

#24 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1167450 Maybe she was a clown or a... political figure... who lies a lot and get taken down by Rico Rodriguez. That just seems like the more humorous and unexpected choice.

#25 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

I it good, but like reading a wall of text at some points.

#26 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1167922 where does this need to be edited? :rainbowhuh:

#27 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

you are a motherbucking genius, keep this going man.:pinkiehappy:

one thing though. the blocks of text are a little too big sometimes:unsuresweetie:

#28 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1180597

Well, it needs editing wherever there's a grammatical error. Didn't notice many spelling errors, but there are issues with grammar sewn throughout. There are also the mid-sentence changes of tense I commented about on Chapter Two.

#29 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

She's gaining the abilities of Shadow Streak !! :pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy:

#30 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

Rainbow's famiry past is going to reveal.... EEEEEEVIL, and it will make the world a sad place.

#31 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

I find myself both excited and intrigued about the direction you're taking this in. Other than some grammatical errors (like the tense-switching I mentioned before) and the awkward phrasing (you have a great deal more awkward phrasing here than you do outright errors, if it's any consolation), this promises to be quite the epic tale, I think. On the subject of the mechanical issues, do you have an editor? I can't begin to count the number of authors I've seen that try to edit their own stories and wonder why it's still riddled with errors. When you know exactly what you're trying to say, you can't objectively look at what you've actually written and compare the two. Your brain glides right over the bumps in the road, because you know precisely where that road is leading. When someone else reads your story, they don't actually know where things are going to end up, so they are much more likely to notice every little pothole along the way.

#32 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

Oh man, one of her ancestors has to be Firefly! :rainbowlaugh:

#33 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh my gosh, she is playing excatly how I would in Assassin's creed. Thats right Dashie, ignore the streets, those are for losers!!!

Anyway, Awesome fic, this is getting better and better. I like how this feels like number one and how it is slowly building and the use of the pieces of eden is unique.

#34 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 1d ago · · ·

Please, continue.

#35 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 1d ago · 2 · ·

:rainbowderp: A thousand views. Wow. I have to admit, I didn't expect this story to do as well as it did. While I'm no stranger to writing, this is my very first fanfiction. Heck, this is the first story that I've written in months. What more can I say except...thanks?

#36 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 19h ago · · ·

>>1189177

no prob bro, but man you did a great job with the cross over. This is what writing should be. Some problems though...

sometimes, dialogue is better than plain walls of text

switching tense is a good idea, but maybe a bit smother would be nice.

in any case, keep up the great work.

#37 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

YAy ! Update !

#38 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh Luna's sweet flank! Celestia is a Templar!

#39 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

Potential. That's all I'll say.

#40 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

This is interisteresteringtastically wonderful.

(Pronounced Inter interesting tastically)

#41 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

Celestia is Abstergo? I didn't see it coming.

Please update soon.

#42 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

Bad ass story engage.

Oni
#43 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1198531 NUH DUR. templar's did consider themselves the holy knights. who do you think would be running the organization, abstergo? Templar's (formed under celestia) could have easily been what caused the assassins to go into hiding a few decades into her rule.

Oni
#44 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·
#45 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

back to waiting: chair mode activate

#46 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

Aw dangit. Celestia is Abstergo now... Now Lna needs to be made an Assassin and everything can play out nicely. Although, I wonder if Discord is on either side.

#47 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

Celstia is a templar, meh, as long as Twilght doesn't turn into templar like Celestia, I'm ok with it,:applejackunsure: Also this is really cool and really well written, keep up the good work:twilightsmile:

#48 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

OH MY GOD! Rainbow Dash is sooooo badass! I can't wait to see how awesome she will become! :rainbowkiss:

#49 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

Hmmm... I wonder if there is a Prophecy (note the capital 'P') regarding The Last Daughter of the Assassins, the Weilder of the Power of the Rainbow.  Or maybe Celestia has wished that the Assassins hadn't died out because their usefulness as a near-cult-like police force.  Maybe she wants Rainbow Dash to refound her ancestors' order? :trixieshiftright:

#50 · Chapter 3 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

Is Luna going to be the one who's actually working for the assassins? It'd kinda make sense.

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