A dood from the west. I'm not a brony anymore and I haven't posted here since I was teenager, but I hope you enjoy the few stories I managed to finish back then!
Derpy's life is great. She is married and in love, she has a filly, she has good friends, and she loves her job. But on one fateful day, her whole life is flipped upside down and shattered. Can one little filly piece her mother back together?
This story is tied to my other story Gray Rainbow, however reading it is not required. This story explains what happened to Derpy's husband after Gray Rainbow hinted at a tragic event that happened with Derpy's husband.
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Oh boy this sounds amazing. Great chapter.
Great so far, but I have one suggestion; instead of 'the alarm clock roared', I suggest 'the alarm clock blared'. Otherwise, awesome job.
EDIT: Read the whole thing. Dat last line.
Echo Mail.
E-mail.
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This story is very descriptive and very neat. Ending of this chapter was very
1169516 Thanks!
I was literally just sitting at my laptop going "Heerrrrrrpppppp uhhh....
1169526 Hmm, that would probably sound better lol.
1169548 Oh. My. God. I DIDN'T EVEN THINK OF THAT!
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Echo! Cause why not?"
1170282 Glad you liked it!
No punches were pulled in the writing of this episode.....
1170844 What?
1170671
It means that we're getting to the point right quick like with that wham line ending this chapter. (Also, the site needs a 'hurt/comfort' tag to describe the genre this one is in.)
Wonderfully painful. Have a song:
1171749 Glad you like it
Loved the song.
O_O
sad song time:
Finally got around to reading... I like it so far! Keep going strong!
1176703 Ohai TSIBP. I'm surprised you didn't use the "And you yelled at me for killing Fluttershy.." thing again.
Glad you enjoyed it
Somepony is very talented! The ending tho
Keep up the good work!
1181177 Grasias
Yeah, I love putting endings like that to a chapter
You,re really good at makeing cliff hangers, ill totally give you that. Amazing job but sooo sad that she had to whatch her husband die
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1183116 The point is to punch the readers right in the feels so they come back
And maybe I just sometimes run out of ideas for the day...
The worst(by worst, I mean the worst for readers where they would be like "GOD DAMN YOU BRONYDERP!") cliffhanger that I've done was probably the one in Chapter 4 of Gray Rainbow.
Good but doesn't bother anypony else that ditzys husband calls her DERPY? I'm sorry I just have read to many sad derpy stories
1189743 Glad you like it. I hate her name being Ditzy, it will always be Derpy to me. Sorry if that bothers you
If you read my other stories, you'll be able to tell I'm a bit of a sadfic writer/sick bastard. I guess either one works
Though a story that I'm going to write sometime in the near future will be brighter than my other stories.
1190565 yeah I like derpy it's not offensive or anything but I'm used to in sadfics about derpy calling her ditzy but keep writing
1192488 Oh alright. I just never liked the name Ditzy. And believe me, I won't stop writing until my hands are literally incapable of writing/typing. Seriously, I LOVE writing,
1194975 agreed!
realy looken forward to next chapter. you sir have earned yourself a favorite.
1898059 Thank you.
I'll write the next chapter for this sometime....eventually...
It will happen, though!
sounds good :)