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While studying the founding of Equestria in the Royal Library, Twilight comes across a very odd, and very old, book. Some of the historical accounts found therein are very familiar, part of any filly's childhood education, but there are more details. Troubling details. Since Celestia has taken leave for unknown reasons, Luna is the only pony around who gives Twilight any hope of finding out the truth. A truth that, as it turns out, Celestia never wanted her to know.

Teen rated for 'sad feels' and implied (though not explicit) deaths.

Special thanks to sqarishoctagon for giving me some useful pointers on formatting and helping to edit the first five chapters!

This was initially an in-universe story, but as of February 16th, 2013, it was rendered non-canon. It takes place in an alternate universe in which Season 3 never happened.

First Published
25th Aug 2012
Last Modified
22nd Sep 2013
#1 · 112w, 2d ago · 2 · · The Void, Part 1 ·

:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#2 · 112w, 2d ago · · · The Void, Part 1 ·

Simply amazing! I haven't seen a fic like this in a long time!

#3 · 112w, 2d ago · · · A Most Alarming Discovery ·

Okay, big problem right off the bat with the first chapter: your vocabulary. You're using rather obscure words. "Lugubrious", "intransigent", and "irascible" are all words I have never heard before. While you don't want a story to be stupid, you also don't want your readers to need a dictionary just to understand what's going on.

#4 · 112w, 2d ago · · · The Void, Part 1 ·

>>1157648

Oh, sorry about that, I was studying for the GRE when I revised that chapter so my vocabulary was going a little haywire. I like to think I used fewer obscure words in the later chapters.

>>1157646

Thanks! I've been a little reluctant to start posting this story, but that's encouraging.

>>1156973

So much smiling Pinkie Pie! Is this on account of the fact that I'm a new pony?

#5 · 112w, 1d ago · · · A Most Alarming Discovery ·

On the contrary, Jphyper, having to use a dictionary to understand what's going on gives the reader a chance to learn something new.  That being said, I suppose not everyone appreciates such an opportunity.

#6 · 112w, 1d ago · · · The Void, Part 1 ·

>>1158818 On the contrary again, a new word or two is ok, especially when used in a context where the meaning is easily understood, but having to flick over to a dictionary does kinda ruin the immersion for me.

#7 · 112w, 1d ago · · · The Void, Part 1 ·

>>1159108

I don't mind I like learning new words. :pinkiehappy:

#8 · 112w, 20h ago · · · The Void, Part 1 ·

>>1157743 :rainbowdetermined2: Buck  Yeah!

:moustache: Not to mention this story rocks!

:scootangel: Make more!

#9 · 111w, 6d ago · · · The Void, Part 1 ·

I liked it

#10 · 111w, 6d ago · · · A Most Alarming Discovery ·

>>1157648 From what I saw, it was mostly Luna using those words, which makes sense, if you ask me. I mean, there is a lot to catch up on in 1000 years.

This story is awesome. Why does it not have more attention?

#11 · 111w, 5d ago · · · The Void, Part 1 ·

>>1166333

Well, thank you kindly! I promise there's more on the way, the story already has a middle and an end, but the middle between the middle and end still needs some (a lot of) work. And I'm quite busy now that school has started back up.

>>1177070

Quite right, that's the main reason I left those words there, even though I was a bit worried about them.

Anyway, it's probably lacking attention because I'm a total newbie who doesn't know what he's doing. Looks like the more popular stories are put into groups to help interested readers find them. Still, the amount of attention this has received is giving me such an intense feeling of gratification— the fact that I captivated the imaginations of dozens of people for well over an hour is... Well, it's just amazing. I'm so very grateful to all the people who've read and favorited this. I suppose it'll be bumped when I add more chapters; I'll be thrilled if I get a response then that's even half as good as this one was.

#12 · 111w, 5d ago · · · The Void, Part 1 ·

This is the best Luna story I have ever read. I love it. I don't really k.ow whay else to say but that, other than I hope an update comes soon! :twilightsmile:

#13 · 109w, 4d ago · · · The Void, Part 1 ·

Came here from your Reddit post late last night. Gotta say, this is a stellar Luna story right here. Amazing writing, and very captivating detail. Everyone seems to be in character. Now tracking.

#14 · 106w, 6d ago · · · The Void, Part 2 ·

UPDATE!!!!!! YES!!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#15 · 105w, 6d ago · · · Triumph ·

Really good so far, can't wait for more!:twilightsheepish:

#16 · 105w, 5d ago · · · Pinned ·

yay update

#17 · 105w, 3d ago · · · Pinned ·

dang that element is ruthless.:twilightoops:

#18 · 105w, 3d ago · · · Pinned ·

no romance? *walks away*

#19 · 105w, 3d ago · · · Pinned ·

>>1427906

Indeed. Definitely not the kind of thing you wanna mess around with unless you absolutely have to.

>>1427931

I didn't get the memo that shipping was required to make it to the featured box until I was already halfway done. No turning back now! :derpytongue2:

#20 · 105w, 3d ago · · · Pinned ·

>>1427988 featured box? i have no idea what you're talking about.

#21 · 105w, 3d ago · 1 · · Missing Ponies Report ·

RD = Really Dedicated! :rainbowlaugh:

#22 · 105w, 2d ago · · · Pinned ·

>>1428950

It was a joke regarding that box at the top of fimfiction with popular stories scrolling across it. Nothing but TwiDash, as far as the eye can see!

#23 · 105w, 2d ago · · · Pinned ·

Wow this is actually fantastic I only have one request for the striper please make it a twiluna plllleeeeeeeaaaaaaasssssssseeeeeee. Also why are the people that are bound to the elements so easily manipulated, if it said that I was just sometimes pet I would be like yes and.

#24 · 105w, 2d ago · · · Turbulence ·

Has to be Gilda:pinkiehappy:

#25 · 105w, 1d ago · · · The Void, Part 2 ·

Loving the way this story is coming together. Doctor Whooves seems sure to show up later, Alicorn Twilight, Mystery, Trickery, War and Secrets. Pretty exciting!

Oh, and I wouldn't be opposed to some TwiLuna.

#26 · 105w, 1d ago · · · Pinned ·

>>1439803

Glad you're liking it so far! Expect more Twilight, more trickery, more war, and especially more secrets as the story goes on. No comment on The Doctor; we'll learn more about him in a couple chapters.

Seems like everyone wants to see shipping, though I find the genre a little intimidating. I'm neither confirming nor denying the possibility of some slight shippiness later– so many details left to work out.

I like it.

But, it escalates way too quickly. Tons of new information and facts pour onto my head.:twilightoops: You're not wasting any time :twilightsheepish:

#28 · 104w, 5d ago · · · Pinned ·

>>1450741

I'm very bad at wasting time. As a matter of fact, this story is a byproduct of massive procrastination efforts. Somehow, when I try to waste time, even more productivity happens.

I don't even know how I would slow this down... It's almost like I only have two speeds. Fast... and supersonic. :rainbowdetermined2:

#29 · 104w, 17m ago · 1 · · A Very Clever Mare ·

>"That's my little timelord," Derpy added, extremely quietly, kissing her daughter on the cheek.

D'awwwwwwwwww... :twilightsmile:

#31 · 103w, 20h ago · · · Emotional Corrosion ·

this story, as long as it doesn't turn lesbo- deserves many more views than it has.

#32 · 103w, 19h ago · · · Pinned ·

Please, no TwiLuna. Your story is going awesome so far, no need to confuse the story with such things.

>>PonyJesus (Oh, and I wouldn't be opposed to some TwiLuna.)

I know what the REAL Jesus would have to say about that....

>>Kripk3y (Wow this is actually fantastic I only have one request for the striper please make it a twiluna plllleeeeeeeaaaaaaasssssssseeeeeee.)

Luna:THOU SHALT NOT TWIST OUR PREFERENCES WITH THY PITIFUL WORDS!

I can't wait for the next chapter, so I'm going to steal the TaRDiS and go read the rest of the story now!

#33 · 103w, 19h ago · · · Pinned ·

This story is amazing!

I can't wait for the next update!

#34 · 103w, 12h ago · · · Pinned ·

>>1525529

Thanks!

...deserves many more views than it has.

Suddenly, my viewcount anomalously spiked last night with about 300 new views, and dozens of favorites.

Are you a wizard?

Don't worry too much about shipping, the story doesn't really leave any room for any real romantic action, and my experiments with allowing the story to stray in that direction haven't gone well. I was able to do it without damaging the story, but it didn't really add anything either, so I'll probably leave it out. Maybe provide it as a 'deleted scene' for those so inclined to read it.

>>1526128

Thanks!

... Soon.

#35 · 102w, 6d ago · · · Pinned ·

Now twilight needs wings, make it happen. Because we all know that even though alicorn twi is sometimes overused, it's badass.

Liking it so far, next chapter pls?

#36 · 102w, 6d ago · · · Pinned ·

>>1532626

Maybe she will, maybe she won't. She has the strength necessary to lift her self off the ground with a levitation spell, so they're not necessary in a practical sense.

I'll just mention that TheGhostHybrid didn't ask me about the future of the story before he gave me his endorsement. That's not to say it won't happen, and that isn't to say that it will happen. Just know that stuff will happen, and that stuff will involve things, and nobody has confirmed any particular stuff or things.

:twilightsheepish: No spoilers...

About the next chapter... It's practically ready, but some gut-feeling is making me hold off on posting it, and my gut hasn't led me astray on this project so far. Of course, I better pick up the pace if I want this story to end before Season 3 starts. I have a feeling that the very first episode is going to blast my fic into alternate-universe territory.

#37 · 102w, 5d ago · 1 · · The Void, Part 2 ·

>stallion from the blue box

>The Doctor as trickster god

I fucking love you! :raritystarry:

Also... is this whole "immensely powerful artifacts that make you insane" thing a reference to Assassin's Creed's Pieces of Eden?

#38 · 102w, 5d ago · · · Pinned ·

>>1540440

:derpyderp1: Love? I have adoring fans?! Yay!

Nah, I am actually really, really, behind on games. The whole ancient artifact thing is just my fanon; the best I can do to explain every villain mentioned in seasons 1 and 2. As a science nerd, I feel a need to explain everything with expansive, adaptive theories, and I spent a lot of time on the mlp subreddit discussing my ideas with others, exchanging cool hypotheses and challenging/defending flaws found in different fanons. Eventually, that's the one I settled on.

#39 · 102w, 5d ago · 1 · · Missing Ponies Report ·

I smell a disaster approaching... seriously, why does Dash have to be so awfully stupid sometimes? :facehoof:

#40 · 102w, 5d ago · · · Turbulence ·

GILDA.

#41 · 102w, 5d ago · · · Triumph ·

I see Derpy is your favorite. :pinkiesmile:

#42 · 102w, 5d ago · · · Pinned ·

>next chapter is practically ready

:pinkiecrazy:

The description of it led me to assume Pieces of Eden.

Glowing ball covered in symbols capable of corrupting and controlling minds... sounds suspiciously Apple of Eden-ish.

Ah well. It would have been a nice :twistnerd:.

#43 · 102w, 2d ago · · · The Calm ·

I'm kinda surprised that there wasn't any discussion with what Twilight let herself in for... not to mention the reference to Nightmare Moon. :twilightoops:

Here's hoping that the "metal princess-suit" doesn't have side-effects... :facehoof:

#44 · 102w, 2d ago · · · The Calm ·

>>1554911

As far as Twilight's lack of apprehension... Well, Luna believed in her, and she believed in herself, and desperate measures were called for. We'll see whether or not it was a good decision in coming chapters.

If you're worried about the transducer's radiation, don't be. It's no more dangerous than a pegasus spending a few hours flying through the upper atmosphere, or being within about fifty feet of a sonic rainboom.

#45 · 102w, 2d ago · · · The Calm ·

>>1554946

Oh, I don't mean radiation... I meant Element-like side effects.

You know, causing eternal night and suchlike.

Also, I wasn't talking about Twilight's lack of apprehension, I was talking about everypony else questioning her choice.

#46 · 102w, 2d ago · · · The Calm ·

>>1554949

Ah. I'd like to think she's clever enough to have built the system with isolation measures in place. We'll see...

Aside from Celestia, the others haven't quite figured out what's happened to Twilight yet. As far as they know, she's just being particularly magical today.

#47 · 102w, 2d ago · · · The Calm ·

>>1554969

Aside from Celestia

To be honest, I was expecting total hostility towards Twilight and/or Luna.

she's just being particularly magical today.

What other examples of size change due to magical power are there? Luna.

Either everypony's holding the Idiot Ball or shenanigans are afoot. Probably both...

#48 · 102w, 2d ago · · · The Calm ·

>>1554980

:twilightsmile: You're asking exactly the kinds of questions I was hoping people would ask. I suspect the next couple chapters will go over well.

#49 · 102w, 2d ago · · · The Calm ·

The appearancechanging armor has realy became standard.:rainbowlaugh:

#50 · 102w, 1d ago · 1 · · The Oncoming Storm ·

Good job AJ! Keep poking Twilight's buttons when she is fighting to keep from going crazy.

What could possible go wrong? :trollestia:

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