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What is your name?
What does it mean to you?
What do you do when you name is stolen? Forced away from you.
What happens when you forget your name? Only to have it changed for you.
What do you do when you're called a monster?
Cover image goes to Cosmic Unicorn. From her Discordantly comic series. All credit for the image goes to her.
Odd basis, but could have been considered emotional, had it been written more emotionally.
I find that if I pour every bit of emotion into what I do, it turns out very feels-y. Then again, I've already lived quite a full, feels-y life. What I would recommend, if it doesn't come naturally to you, is to work on spelling and grammar and cut the sentence fragments short. Apparently, according to a few critics, I can write sentence fragments well. Like in this. (I think it's kinda weak, but majority rules.)
If you need an editor, sorry, I have no free time. 
But I'm sure if you visit the Editor's group, someone will gladly help out.
>>1155869 I was almost in tears reading the description, mate. Let me fix it up for you.
What is your name?
What does it mean to you?
What do you do when you name is stolen? Forced away from you.
What happens when you forget your name? Only to have it changed for you.
What do you do when you're called a monster?
Also, in the title, names are almost always written with capital letters.
Sarcasm doesn't work against the truth. Seriously! There have been so many fanfics made that any new story that is written is cliche. I'm also sick of all the cliche comments that people post which makes them cliche too.
I think the Captain has an image that he showed me a while back that said something along the lines of: "Content posted in the brony world is original for about 10 minutes before it becomes cliche" or something like that.
The concept veiled inside this unique piece of literature has encouraged my intellect to voice its opinion that this text should be reconstructed into a full pledged story. Knowing you though I'm not sure you could do it.
Read the happy ones then!
I recommend listening to this song.
While it doesn't entirely fit the story you still get the idea.
Oh no! I forgot to correct one of the sentences!
A short time later I learned that I could actually roam outside my prison, not unlike a ghost. I still had my human form, but I lacked weight or mass and moved by floating rather than walking, which was a huge relief as it was very dark inside my stone container. Anyway, my ghostly form allowed me to see my face and the expression it wore right before I ‘died’. It was still contoured in pain and agony, the tear that never fell was frozen on my cheek, which was no surprise. Looking at it is seemed painful and sad, and yet, at the same time it seemed to say ‘thank you’ for an odd reason.
It should say:
Looking at it, I noticed it seemed painful and sad, and yet, at the same time it seemed to say ‘thank you’ for an odd reason.
Sorry!
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