Silver's father urges him to become the master he never became himself, Silver decides to take his fathers request.
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Interesting. A bit too fast-paced and a few spelling mistakes are here and there, but I'm intrigued.
A swordsma-...Err a swordspony fic! Awesome!
So, feedback time. Gotta love that feedback.
-I love the concept, the fantastic tale of a parent forcing their dream on their child. But instead of beauty pagent (or the infamous "Soccer Mom") you did it with swords. Sorry, but I'm a sucker for swords. Nice.
-Some grammar mistakes. Woops!
I reccomend getting an editor (or if you'd like I can run through it for you) to fix most of 'em.
-Try and describe Silver in different ways. If it wasn't for the picture for the preview image I wouldn't know what he looked like.
-Also, you shouldn't have to use apostrophes for thoughts. Italiacs are enough
I made the same mistake ages ago.
So, giving this a 3.5 It's good, but with some minor fixes it could be great!
74308 um k......
74308He won't lemme and we're bros, so I dunno if he'd let anyone else.. and why not punctuate thoughts in like "quotes" someponies cant read italics I thought??
---- YEA, I DUNNO IT'S 2:55 am AND IS CHRISTMAS, yawn.
76287 HEEEEEEYY, SILVER!!!! SLEET FINALLY READ THE STORY I THINK. all caps hehe owow point & click browsing sucks =3=
sorry that i have not up dated (if that's how you spell it) its hard to get to a computer.
I finally am able to update
When i get my flash-drive back............... :(
A lot of things happened but i think with my new profile (forgot the password to my old one) i,m gonna try to do this story again. So hope for the best.
Need to also change my image a blank pony is really creepy.