rainbow dash ship fic? continue...............

nice chapter. Dash was very quick to accept that he's not from Equestria.

keep up the awesome chapters, i eagerly the next chapter for this and tale of shadow 2.

One word.

Derp

yay

>>11562411156241 Possibly you'll have to read the next couple of chapters to find out

>>11562641156264 Yeah i know it was a bit rushed but this is a story i was working on back in the day and i just wanted to get that bit over and done with...But i still have about four chapters left to edit and post and a chapter of Tale of Shadow 2 to finish

>>11635671163567

awesome.

Lol...Just noticed this story has been liked more than the Tale of Shadow 2 and has nearly reached more views

good story, but i think rd was a little too quick to accept from he not from equistria, she shouldve been more like "you must have bumped your head or something" very good story always a fan of rd x oc ship fics

kinda seems a little rushed but i like it.

>>11730891173089 Yeah i know it all may have been Rushed but I just wanted to get the introduction stage over and done with ASAP and im thinking of re editing that chapter when he first arrives

good good we demand moar.

And More you shall get

im surprised lyra hasn't kidnapped him yet.  

>>11749431174943 hmmm...That gives me an Idea (Next Chapter Flash kidnapped by Lyra)

I SMELL HUMAN

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Human in equestria storys are terrably awful or stupidly good, and this is the latter

Seems like a decent HiE fic, some parts were rushed earlier while the latter is taking a good pace. Nice format too with your dialogue so that's a plus. Keep up the nice work man.

PS: At Chapter 4: Teleportation Fun

[quote“Yeah I believe you all know…Could you please put me down” Says Jonny frantically squirming around in the air]

Needs to be to change the Sentence to "Yeah I Believe you all now. Hope this helps.

>>12692331269233 Yeah i rushed a bit of this fic cause i really wanted to get into the really good stuff of this fic as soon as i could but i probably should have done it alot better

And i never new that i did that i better go fix that up. thnks for noticing

It's shaping up well, if a bit fast.

It's a little dialogue heavy, though, and there are spelling and punctuation errors everywhere. You might want to consider picking up an editor or you're going to scare people away with that.

Looking forward to more.

Yeah I have been looking for an Editor and haven't found one yet, and im trying to get out of the habit of working on my fics at one in the morning

good story so far, but really curious when the next chapters are?

>>14793221479322 I have begun working on the next chapter, hoping to have it done some time soon Really sorry for the wait, been busy with school and music that I haven't had the time to write

Plz tell me you haven't given up on this story!

>>18538351853835 No I haven't given up on it im currently writing the new chapter and hoping to have it finished just been trying to find the time has been hard with Christmas and all that jazz

FINALLY!!!

UPDATE!!!!!!!

In other news this chaper was good

>>18707231870723 Thanks