Electric Hellfire - Black Label Society

Rushed.... try fixing it by adding more chaps and lengthening the story. Thicken the plot a little too. Make it interesting!

- just some helpful advice

Glad you wrote a fic. I'll read it later and tell you what I think. Pre-thumb for that story title. I mean, seriously, that thing is great.

>>11534671153467 This is just the first chapter, more will be added on latter. As for the rushed part, sorry. I havn't written a MLP story before and it came out a little awkward and rushed. Just give me time.

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Pinkie..Space?

*ILIKEID!*

Don't care much if a few parts are rushed,-

I look at stories for the plot :T

>>14456351445635 thank you for reading it!

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==>>DISCORD: FIRE LAZER

"BUA!"

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Certainly an interesting buildup. It's something different from the always-happy environment we are used to.

I like the plot, but the story is rather rushed.

Infernus... WHY U SO POWERFUL?!

>>21306022130602 thanks. For the comment. I am currently doing a rewrite of it so far, so it will flow smother.

Cool.

I like the story, I don't care if it's rushed or not, I like the story it tells.