While reading one of the famous Daring Do novels at the library Rainbow Dash notices a strange figure outside the window. Little does she know that theres more to come from this strange object.
WOW, never cliffhanger your first chap. And this was very rushed, needs more describing words, and more... plot. Very rushed and short. Check your spelling.
Just some advice, you know a bunch of ppl will post hate comments if u don't fix it all now.... you'll thank me later, for warning you
- Sage, a helpful writer to those in need. glad to have been of service.
yeah she will be encased in coblestone lol
Decnt enough story but like Sage said, never ever cliff hang your first chapter. and the grammar errors nearly killed me. Other than that, pretty decent story needs more description though...
this is great but... WHAT THE FUCK ARE YOU DOIN WIT MINECRAFT!?!?!?!?!?!?!
Very good. My only complaints are a few spelling and grammar issues here and there, but other than that, I liked it.
lol. This is hilarious.
You must make more man, MORE!!!
where the hell are you