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The Box holding the block

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The Box holding the block by Longshot brony

Crossover Adventure

While reading one of the famous Daring Do novels at the library Rainbow Dash notices a strange figure outside the window. Little does she know that theres more to come from this strange object.

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25th Aug 2012

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25th Aug 2012

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SageLovesLuna

#1 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago ·

WOW, never cliffhanger your first chap. And this was very rushed, needs more describing words, and more... plot. Very rushed and short. Check your spelling. :ajbemused:

Just some advice, you know a bunch of ppl will post hate comments if u don't fix it all now.... you'll thank me later, for warning you :applejackunsure:

- :heart: Sage, a helpful writer to those in need. :twilightblush: glad to have been of service.

Br2nd66

#2 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago ·

yeah she will be encased in coblestone lol

legoman2852

#3 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago ·

Decnt enough story but like Sage said, never ever cliff hang your first chapter. and the grammar errors nearly killed me. :pinkiesad2: Other than that, pretty decent story needs more description though...