yay a good macdash...... this ship is the best....

looking forward for the next chapters and happy hearth warming

Never seen a MacnDash fic before.  Good idea.  

I like :)

fantastic

Big Mac is my favorite pony. All he needs to say is "yep" and he won me over.

As soon as I saw that this was a MacDash fic, I already knew I was going to like it.

Now, you have an interesting dynamic here. Typical, but their character conflict is going to be the best part of the fic, I can already tell. The fun part is watching it unfold.

I'll be here until the end.

Epic!

do want

tracked

Seeing the possibility of another of the rare MacDash I had to give this one a shot damn good thing I did. Keep it up man  

That's so rainbow dash!

liked the way you ended. I did the same thing for my story the Insecurity. Worked really well.

Maybe, just maybe, a tiny bit more description on the scene with the hat.

Chap. 2 anytime soon?

                      These 2 go so well together...

>>8658986589 Thanks! Happy hearthswarming, christmas, hanukkah, kwanzaa, festivus to all!

>>8676186761 He's such an enigmatic character, its like he's a blank slate to work with. Also, he is one of my favorite non mane 6 ponies.

>>8692386923 Yeah, there have been so many ship fics that focus on similarities like FlutterxMac, so I figure opposites attract!

>>8700487004 Thanks much! I agree it's a rare pairing. it was hard enough to find good cover art, and I still feel like Rainbow's eyes are weird looking in that pic.

>>8709887098 Chapter 2 will be out, but no specific timeframe. I've got a couple hundred words down already, but Discords reign is my current focus. this was actually just a quick write I did for a warm up one day that I thought had potential.

Thanks for the positivity guys/gals!

I am disturbed by cattle slavery.

Perhaps taking the cattle back to their temp agency would work better?

>>8841088410

Yeah, I'm pretty much glossing over the fact that the cows can talk and are sentient. plus the animal-heirarchy sounds like another fic altogether.

>>8844088440

I think the cows just go with it. They'e getting protection in exchange for their milk. I'd imagine them as being very docile and lax about the subject.

Which would explain the absence of bulls.

I'm liking this so far, hope to see more from you soon

lol, another good chapter, looking forward to the next one

Such a rare combination! I really like this story; very entertaining. Keep at it!

You've caught my interest. When 90% of shipping fics these days are "Why do I have these strange feelings when I see XX?", this is a relief to read.

Please, continue.

This chapter did not disappoint .Keep it up!  

All right! Another update day! I'm SO HAPPY!

>>119821119821 You know, I've noticed that too. That a lot of shipping fics seem to be that, I mean. It's not too bad, I'm used to it, but it's a little cliché, I suppose.

At the story; I'm pretty sure Rarity wears more clothes than the Apple family.

Count me as a follower. I'm also partial to MacDash. I think my favorite part is that after the second chapter, they are barely cordial. So many romance fics, regardless of the characters involved, just rush it. Its good to read a story with a sense of pacing that doesn't just pull the love at first sight routine. I'm also a fan of the subtle inclusion of little stringers that may or may not lead anywhere. I wanna know what the mystery item is, and I wanna know now

Keep up the good work, it's appreciated.

>>119821119821>>121426121426

Yeah, I always noticed that most of the popular fics are just a bit rushed, or use some of those old cliches >>119821119821 and >>121426121426 mentioned.

This is new, I already followed, start pumping those chapters out!

love it :)

Anyone else have this show as three chapters on Bronius' page, but then only two when you try to read? I get my hopes up every time ...

Hole-ee Christ, this is bloody brilliant!  I cannot wait for the next chapter!  Actually, I can, take as long as you want.  I would feel terrible if I mad you rush.  Best wishes!

I have a huge complaint. You don't write fast enough!

Other than that, I like the story. You really portray the characters quite well, and so far it's been a fun little story. I'm looking forward to the rest of the fic.

I hate rattlers. They're a pain to deal with...

Eager to see how this plays out.

and that's why cowboys wear boots.

Question: Can't the cattle in MLP talk?

Boy howdy, that stallion has no luck at the moment does he?

>>161790161790Thanks! Not to worry, I make every effort to release the chapter when it is up to par. Unfortunately this can result in some inconsistent update patterns.

>>161795161795 Ah, yes. The time I have to write is somewhat limited by outside influences, as well as that other fic I've got going that's nearing completion. After it's done however, this will be updated a lot more frequently.

>>162239162239 Yes, but for the sake of this fic, they keep to themselves. That may be lazy writing on my part but screw it.

I'm glad y'all are enjoying the ride!

>>162247162247 none whatsoever.

Very good chapter!

I wonder how much responsibility Rainbow's gonna have after that venom spreads...

I hope Mac's got a remedy...

And then it became a matter of life and death for Big Macintosh. Hopefully Rainbow Dash can save him.

...on second thought, he's doomed.

Just thought I'd like to say that it'd be nice to see Big Macintosh see that there's more to Rainbow Dash than just a loudmouthed athlete. It'd be a great development point for him.

Big Badass Macintosh!

THREE CHEERS FOR RAINBOW-MAC!

I love seeing that blue cutie pie with the tender arms of a stallion moving all over her.

Lol, love that last bit.

Rainbow. Rainbow, Rainbow, Rainbow. Pride inevitably cometh before a smack in the teeth with a wet fish!

Go Rainbow go! Prove those jackflanks who call you lazy wrong

Awesome chapter, Bronius. Really awesome. I've dealt with snakes in my life, being born in Texas and going on many a camping trips. Looking forward to next chapter.

"Unless you're chicken like your little buddy Scootaloo!"

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA... love it

So RD's got a fear of needles?

I hope Big Mac gets better too!

I mean he will get better, right?

Right?

RIGHT?!?!

Nice chapter! I'll always be hoping for more soon, right?

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...right?!

-PwnyBrony

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RIGHT?!?!?!?!

Trouser snake antivenom, Really?

A proud, inexperienced pegasus and a KOed ton of pure, muscle VS a pack of hungry Coyotes. This does not bode well.

HURRY UP AND GET BETTER BIG MAC!

>>180610180610 They called me a madman when I told them I could write a cheap dick joke in an MLP fanfic. Well who's laughing now?! Mwahahahaha!

Seriously though, you're the first person who noticed,(or at least called me on it) so you get one free internets. Congratulations!  

>>181008181008

Woohoo, I earned a free internets!

BTW, I believe that trouser snake antivenom is called spermicide.

Love this!

Oh man this is really good. I am glad I decided to read this. Although I noticed a little spelling error in it.

Rainbow perked up, now she was talking her language.

I think you mean that HE was talking her language. Confused me when I first read it but after re-reading it I realized what it meant. Just something to edit if you have free time. I shall continue to read the rest of this awesome story.

>>189582189582 Thanks much for the point out! I have a pre-reader but sometimes little things like that slip past the both of us. Glad you're enjoying the story so far!

Congrats on getting on Equestria Daily!

I love it when I find a good story before Equestria Daily does, Congratulations.

Rattlesnakes are far less lethal than that, actually.

>>161790161790Azarune eeyup

Since my brain lacks any smart comments right now:

MUFFINS!

well i found this in eqd decide to give it a try and i got to say... I LOVE IT

cant wait for more

w00t i like this story a lot!

How long does it usually take to finish a chapter? i rly cant wait ^^

cool shit

BRO

Hetero Dash ship?! I salute you sir!

Ok, I don't normally read shipping fics. But you have convinced me to read this one. Oh and on a side note, I had to stop reading for a bit because I couldn't breathe from laughing so hard. The trousersnake just got me that good. Definitely going to follow this.

I was following this over on Fanfiction.net. Finding it here makes it that much easier to keep track of. Great story so far!

GRRRRREAT story! It's a pity I can only offer 5 stars. This work deserves more. Much MOAR :).

Great story so far! Also:

He tipped his hat back over his eyes, and rested against the saddlebags he'd been carrying. As funny as she had been these past few hours, he knew by morning she would be nursing what was in all likelyvhood the worst hangover she would ever experience.

Random 'V'.

>>190975190975

damn, and here I thought I had gotten all the stragglers. Thanks for the point out and glad you're enjoying the ride so far!

TROUSERSNAKE!!!!!!! AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHAhahahahahah....

okay okay you've got a good one here lease continue

This is a wonderful fanfic and so well written too!  There's so much Mac-Fluttershy ships out there, it's refreshing to see Rainbow and Big Mac.  I like how you're developing their relationship here.  I'm looking forward to finding out what happens - hopefully Big Mac will be okay.  

Trouser snake......I see what you did there.......

>>179515179515 or in most cases, a baseball bat to the brainpan.

I find it hard to believe that RBD hadn't seen the night sky in all its glory before, considering that she's usually above the clouds. Ponyville isn't really a city and there'd be very little light pollution.

That kinda ruined the realism of the situation for me, which otherwise is pretty good. I'm tracking the story, which says much about how much I enjoy the rest of it. Keep it up. ^^

CAN'T WAIT FOR PART 5!!!

>>195918195918 Well I suppose we could argue all day the finer points of light pollution, but I'm glad that detail didn't detract from the rest of the story for you! But a country sky is something to behold if you live in any kind of lighted city.

*starts to read immediately* (love this story!)

damn! honestly, i think the story is progressing a bit slowly. I just want to read oohoooon!

Even though Mac was in the grips of the fight of his life, Rainbow still couldn't help but think how funny it would be to have thas kind of dirt on the toughest stallion in Ponyville.

Just noticed this, thought I should point it out.

Its going great though!

Very Un-Macintosh... My this-won't-end-well senses are tingling!

So yeah Rainbow isn't exactly the most proper and soft of mares, but even I would think she would be a better mother than Big Mac's nightmare. Despite what her Faustness says about her not being a good sister and whatnot.

Great chapter, think you got both spot on and having a good build up to any kind of Romance. Now it is no longer If they get together, but more of When. Keep it up my friend.

In the Name of Her Serene Majesty,

Celestia's Paladin, For Honor and Duty, for the Sun and Moon  

And thus the shipping begins, and I loved how you handled it. I like the idea of Mac choosing Dash, because it's time to move away from his comfort level is great kinda like a welcomed early mid-life crisis. Opposites attract. People tend to ship Dash and Apple Jack or Fluttershy, but very few ship her with Mac when he's basically Apple Jack's and Fluttershy's personality mixed together with a masculine overtone. Kudos to you sir or madam.

Peace Out.  

>>197011197011 Son of a whore! I scoured this chapter for errors and I still missed one!

>>197044197044 That she might, but keep in mind, Mac's dream version of Rainbow is his perception of her, not who she actually is.

>>197064197064 Opposites attract is pretty much my mantra for this story. I like writing unusual pairings, simply because of the challenge presented to make their interest in each other seem believable. I can get quite tough at times. And this sir will take your kudos fair waffler.

>>197226197226

I figured as much, Bronius. And you are quite right, without watching the RD centric episodes that is the impression I might get about her.

That was a great chapter. I am really enjoying this, it definitely seems you have thought this through. Oh and belated congratulations of making it onto EQD.

Yesss. It updated.

Still doing great so far. I almost don't want to see this end. And now I'm wondering how Rainbow Dash will react to un-Macintosh. Something tells me she might like it.

Must keep reading.

For once in your life, Mac... take a chance.

Do it, Mac. Do iiiiiit.

The pre-dream sequence section feels a tad off to me. I feel that RD would be at least a little more worried about her friend's brother, you know, dying, than you paint her to be.

Other than that, not bad.

good shit bro

>>197841197841 I figured a chapter about her climbing the walls with worry would be too out of character for her, especially after I spent the first few chapters portraying her apathy to her situation. Plus, with anti-venom, all you could do is hope it works, so I wasn't really sure how to show her passing the time other than trying to hide her concern by thinking about other stuff. Glad you're enjoying it so far!

and then they all bucked.

but seriously this is a pretty unique ship.  I don't think I've seen it before, but it's certainly refreshing.  I really want to see where this goes. You seem to give Big Mac a deeper characterization than in some other fics I've seen.  I agree with the personality that you give him. My gripe with some fics is that they portrait him as shy, when he merely seems introverted.  Indeed, everyone in the Apple family seems to be rather amiable and quick to welcome new folks.  

I'm hoping that the next few chapters have Dash act in her 'be nicer' mindset, and have Mac rethink his dream/nightmare marriage scenario.

Yes update cant wait for more

un-Macintosh... this is going to be AWESOME

So... + = Complete Offspring Hell

>>198361198361

STILL TOTALLY WORTH IT!

This story is one of a kind sir.

Nice work!

We'll be getting more soon I hope...?

-PwnyBrony

>>196221196221

That's fair enough. I suppose I just don't see RBD as a city-pony because of her athleticism. It is your take on the character however, so it's silly of me to take umbrage.  

Indeed I have seen the night sky - in Oman there is a large section of beach which is made free of all light pollution so the sea-turtles can find their way to sea. The night sky there blew my mind completely.

I'm eagerly awaiting more chapters!

.....we would totally love you for it.

Do it. You can't run from your feelings Mac! DO IT!

    I wonder why I am sometimes...

                              -Delta-

I read this chapter before bed on my ipod last night, so here is my typed comment on my pc.

Well, you've done an okay job with this story so far, although I feel as if this chapter lacked a bit of everything. I mean, not really much happened... The main thing that occurred (I think) was the nightmare Big Mac had (which was kind of cool, not gonna lie). It reminded me of that one episode of Hey Arnold! where Arnold daydreams about marrying Helga and having a bunch of rowdy kids while she just sits on the couch and does nothing all day. I was hoping to see some wolves and perhaps Rainbow Dash protecting Mac, but I suppose what you did was alright as well. I don't know, something about this chapter just feels "empty" compared to the previous. There wasn't much progression anywhere and you kind of went on to talk about stuff that didn't really seem to matter.

I'll keep reading if you keep updating, but I'm hoping to see some more action next chapter. Don't take my criticisms to heart, I'm only trying to help you out. Just try to pick up the pace a bit and we'll see how it turns out from here.

>>201259201259

This was a bit of a filler chap, I'll admit, but it was necessary to establish the beginnings of a change of heart or two. In all honesty, I didn't want to escalate the story with every chapter, though I know you and I'm sure a few others would like to see it that way. This isn't supposed to be a very long fic chapter wise, so look for things to pick up in the coming updates. Glad you're enjoying it so far!

I love where this is all headed. Though I think I understand why Applejack sent Rainbow to herd the cattle. She's playing matchmaker again like she tried to do with Fluttershy, Twilight, and Rarity. Keep up the good work here. Tracking this story.

Why is Applejack staying to help Applebloom with her math? Big Mac's the one that's good at math.

>>211757211757 Because if Mac didn't go on the cattle drive, there wouldn't be a story! Perhaps AJ's inflated sense of pride told her that if her brother can do math, she could too!

I'm starting to lose faith in this fanfic. This chapter was really boring, and I found myself skipping whole paragraphs. You also seem to insult anything that isn't country. I'm a New York girl, and we don't have fast food and pizza boxes lying around everywhere, and we don't let our kids run around like wild animals. I feel like this is a good story, but it's taking forever to get to the good stuff. Maybe it's just me. Maybe I'm a person who hates when people take it slow or deny their feelings. I'm the type of person who is most likely to say "Yeah, I do like him." and then go about my business.

>>211958211958 Right, keep in mind that the views expressed in this fanfic are not necessarily the views of the author. I have no problem with big cities, in fact I love them (kind of a fine dining nut). Also, the segment you were referring to was a dream, and the Rainbow dash in that dream was Mac's perception of RD, not who she actually is in the story. As far as the pacing is concerned, I've always disliked fics that are generally nothing more than 'I like you.' 'I like you too!' 'yay!' the end. Personally, I don't see the fun in shipping if everything just goes swimmingly for a pairing. That to me is boring, tired and quite frankly a cliche in the fandom at this point. I can tell you it will pick up, and if you decide to stick around, that's great! If however you think this isn't for you, I respect your decision.