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Rainbow Blitz falls for the quiet and bookish Dusk Shine, but nothing goes as planned for the poor pegasus, and he becomes a victim of intolerance and prejudice, with betrayal lurking around every corner. In the meantime, Dusk doesn't know what he should do, this is something he has to work out by himself.

First Published
28th Aug 2012
Last Modified
10th Sep 2012

Dusk is reacting quite realistically to this.

Lets see where this goes.

Gonna have to note that the intro was cliched - you can drop the weather report and the "this is how my life was turned upside down", just start with Blitz flying through the air.

I Would Love To - Steve Vai

A very interesting start, faved to see where you go with this :twilightsmile:

Is that Rainbow Blitz with a Lightning bolt scar on his forehead?

Is that... HARRY POTTER?

zel

>rule 63

As much as I like MM romance, I simply have no power to deal with this genderbending bullshit in the morning.

Srsly, blitz has to have the worst design in mlp famdom history, maybe except alicorn OCs.

Hnng!!! My heart!!! :pinkiesad2:

Hm. Well, Blitz sure a jerk and idiot here. Even straight confessions not like "I love you, I love you too, yay sex". When your crush not even gay\bi himself, what you expected, honestly? Dusk need time to undestand his feelings, to get why, when and how. It's not like he has obligation to return Blitz's feelings.

Rainbow just has to deal with it and stop thinking all about himself. What happened to "make you happy"?  He sure acted oppositely.

>>1173223 It's his eyebrow, dingus.

You know, normally I find M/M stories odd or uninteresting, and yet I'm perfectly fine with F/M and F/F, with TwiDash being my favourite. So, having decided to try and over come that hypocrisy I decided to read this after finding it. So far I have not been disappointed. Lets see how well this goes :twilightblush:

UNCHARTED WATERS AHOY!

>>1173618

Looks more like Harry Potter's scar. Just sayin'.

>>1173521

It's what happens, believe me, I've been there a number of times, in both Dusk's and Blitz's shoes.

>>1173714

Yeah) I'll wait what happens next. Interesting story. Not your usual shipping where you KNOW they'll be together at the end.

>>1173656

Ah cool. I hope you enjoy the rest of it! :twilightsmile:

i can compleatly relate to blitz:fluttercry:

>>1175325

That was the aim, I hope I caused feels. I can relate too, since it's based off personal experience. :fluttercry:

your the best man:twilightsmile:

:fluttercry: My heart.......

If anyone is wondering why this is all probably shit, it's based on my own experiences over the last few years and it's a really good outlet for me to get it off my chest and get it down in writing. If you enjoy it as well, I just consider that a pleasant bonus. :twilightsmile:

I'm sorry to hear that you went through these kind of things. I don't get why people make such a big problem about it.

Anyway, great chapter. Very emotional.

>>1181308

I have gone through this as well. Loving this, but please. PUMP OUT MORE CHAPTERS AND FAST! I NEED MOAR! :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

>>1182606

I was gonna make an Applejack type speech about how quality takes time, then I remembered I randomly sneeze out like 1,500 words a day, do minor revisions on bits I don't like then hope for the best! :twilightsheepish:

'S'how I roll I guess. :pinkiecrazy:

Expect a new chapter soon, Friday at the latest. :twilightsmile:

>>1182635

Alright, speaking of Applejack...I have gone through this as well with country people. I live in Kentucky and they would do this kinda shit, but I was like, "NOPE! I DUN CARE!" It still annoyed me though. I have lived in 7 states and this is the only one that acts like this towards me. Go figure fucking bible thumpers.

>>1182672

It's always upsetting to hear, I am sorry you went through that. Here in Britain, it's just the older people, about 40+, them and the religious types...

I wanted to get the theme of religion in, but Equestria doesn't have religion, so instead I tried to work out a historical basis for the hate that AJ spews out, it was difficult, but I did it in the end. All shall be revealed soon!

>>1182698Oh thank you that you aren't putting religion in this. I know that sounds like a typical atheist thing to say but I can't stand anything to do with religion.

>>1182713

Nah, it's cool. I don't blame ya, I've only suffered from the hands of religion for the simple virtue of being true to myself.

>>1182733

Everyday someone tries to start shit with me about how I am an idiot for not believing in god. Smh, it really gets under my skin. :twilightangry2:

Applejack, you BASTARD.

As I quote from Jon Spiro: Isn't Artemis a girl's name?

Then again, Artemis Fowl is awesome, but I doubt that a R63'd Luna would be much of a "hunter".

>>1182742

I know the feeling of annoying religious types, my sister is some kinda born again christian or something and I'm agnostic athiest, so me and her are ALWAYS getting into arguments over who's wrong and who's right, even though I expressly told her that I don't really care.

>>1182635

So far so good, still uncharted waters for me, but I like how it's based off real events <I don't like that the events actually HAPPENED, but when a story is based off of them it makes it seem more, I don't know, real I guess> just one question though, who's Macareina?

>>1185803

Yeah, I tried to make this as realistic as possible, well, as realistic as talking ponies can get.

My poor attempt at feminising Big Macintosh's name. :twilightsheepish:

>>1185889

Big Mac eh? I thought it was Caramel. I guess because when I first read it it made me think of the song Macarena, which I always associated with maracas for whatever reason, a bulb on the end of a stick, kinda like how a Caramel Apple is a bulb on the end of a stick.... No one ever said my mind works normally, I don't even know how it works :rainbowlaugh: HURRAY rambling! :twilightblush:

I fucking love you.

zel

AAAW YEAH:rainbowlaugh:

Although I do not really think that original twi would go to celestia for help with her sexuality.:trollestia:

Still, awesome story when you disregard the fact that blitz is ugly.:moustache:

>>1194579

Still, awesome story when you disregard the fact that blitz is ugly.:moustache:

Beauty is in the eye of the beholder

Oh Applejack. :ajbemused:

Oh my... Well now, that was, um... yeah I got nothing :twilightoops:

Good chapter though! Poor Blitz, and AJ is really making himself out to be an ass :ajbemused:

This is a great idea for a story. Don't know how I've never seen other similar stories. Well, anyway, I still have more of this to read, so...

This is an awesome story. Great characters, realistic reactions (I think... I believe so) and a new perspective on the whole thing.

Thank you for this.

Solaris needs to go burn the shit out of AJ with sunfire.

God, I just want to kick AJ in the face and give Blitz a huge hug.

AJ is acting pretty OOC. Even if R63-ed AJ was pissed that a friend of his was gay, he wouldn't send ponies to beat the stuffing out of RB. But then again, they were drunk. Then again, AJ wasn't drunk before. Then again, AJ might be acting homophobic because he is gay. Then again...

>>1198600

There needed to be an antagonist, and I wasn't gonna make an OC, so I needed a canon character. Since most characters are lovely and kind, there was gonna be some OOCness somewhere, I chose AJ because he/she seems the most likely of the Mane Six (to me) to be homophobic.

And small point, AJ never once directly told them to beat Blitz up, in fact he stopped them, albeit grudgingly.

And for the record, no, AJ ain't gay in this one.

>>1198649

Darn it.

That would have been too expected, eh?

So I added this to the LGBT Group. Because its awesome.:rainbowkiss:

This needs to update like yesterday.:pinkiecrazy:

:rainbowderp: wow, this is good, faved and a thumbs up to you. AJ is a bit frustrating (I've known people like that), I can't wait to see where you take this; so far so good :twilightsmile:

Well, I can't say I quite relate to this, seeing as how I'm not sexually inclined the way Blitz is. But he still gets all my feels. This may not have been straight up rejection, but it still hurts no matter what gender/sexuality.

ON TO THE NEXT CHAPTER! :rainbowdetermined2:

Applejack... you... fucking... asshole...

I may not be gay, but behavior like that completely and utterly disgusts me. I'm sorry to hear that you had to experience this type of discrimination.

Also, good work with your fic. I've read only a few M/M fics and yours is the best one yet. :twilightsmile:

Applejack needs to get raped once a day, everyday, by a stallion in pony hell. Oh, the cruel, cruel irony. So delicious.

Another awesome chapter. Can't wait for the next one.

Poor Blitzy! I can't fault Dusk for his reaction - and there's a big difference between "I need to be alone" and "Get away from me" - but it hit Blitz pretty hard. That guy needs all the hugs. I'm a bit worried at how coldly vicious Applejack and his friends are being, and at the more widespread homophobia in Equestria, but I do understand the need for an antagonist. I'm sure everypony will come to their senses and write to Prince Solaris about this important lesson in friendship.

Oh, and ten bits says that Dusk had a crush on his foalsitter when he was younger. :twilightblush:

Now I am working towards the ending as I speak, the last chapter will be very long, so be patient, and you shall has it before the week is out.

Peace. :heart:

EDIT: Rekorderlig is the tastiest cider.

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