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Rainbow Blitz falls for the quiet and bookish Dusk Shine, but nothing goes as planned for the poor pegasus, and he becomes a victim of intolerance and prejudice, with betrayal lurking around every corner. In the meantime, Dusk doesn't know what he should do, this is something he has to work out by himself.
Hm. Well, Blitz sure a jerk and idiot here. Even straight confessions not like "I love you, I love you too, yay sex". When your crush not even gay\bi himself, what you expected, honestly? Dusk need time to undestand his feelings, to get why, when and how. It's not like he has obligation to return Blitz's feelings.
Rainbow just has to deal with it and stop thinking all about himself. What happened to "make you happy"? He sure acted oppositely.
You know, normally I find M/M stories odd or uninteresting, and yet I'm perfectly fine with F/M and F/F, with TwiDash being my favourite. So, having decided to try and over come that hypocrisy I decided to read this after finding it. So far I have not been disappointed. Lets see how well this goes 
UNCHARTED WATERS AHOY!
If anyone is wondering why this is all probably shit, it's based on my own experiences over the last few years and it's a really good outlet for me to get it off my chest and get it down in writing. If you enjoy it as well, I just consider that a pleasant bonus. 
I was gonna make an Applejack type speech about how quality takes time, then I remembered I randomly sneeze out like 1,500 words a day, do minor revisions on bits I don't like then hope for the best! 
'S'how I roll I guess. 
Expect a new chapter soon, Friday at the latest.
Alright, speaking of Applejack...I have gone through this as well with country people. I live in Kentucky and they would do this kinda shit, but I was like, "NOPE! I DUN CARE!" It still annoyed me though. I have lived in 7 states and this is the only one that acts like this towards me. Go figure fucking bible thumpers.
It's always upsetting to hear, I am sorry you went through that. Here in Britain, it's just the older people, about 40+, them and the religious types...
I wanted to get the theme of religion in, but Equestria doesn't have religion, so instead I tried to work out a historical basis for the hate that AJ spews out, it was difficult, but I did it in the end. All shall be revealed soon!
I know the feeling of annoying religious types, my sister is some kinda born again christian or something and I'm agnostic athiest, so me and her are ALWAYS getting into arguments over who's wrong and who's right, even though I expressly told her that I don't really care.
So far so good, still uncharted waters for me, but I like how it's based off real events <I don't like that the events actually HAPPENED, but when a story is based off of them it makes it seem more, I don't know, real I guess> just one question though, who's Macareina?
Big Mac eh? I thought it was Caramel. I guess because when I first read it it made me think of the song Macarena, which I always associated with maracas for whatever reason, a bulb on the end of a stick, kinda like how a Caramel Apple is a bulb on the end of a stick.... No one ever said my mind works normally, I don't even know how it works 
HURRAY rambling!
Still, awesome story when you disregard the fact that blitz is ugly.
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder
AJ is acting pretty OOC. Even if R63-ed AJ was pissed that a friend of his was gay, he wouldn't send ponies to beat the stuffing out of RB. But then again, they were drunk. Then again, AJ wasn't drunk before. Then again, AJ might be acting homophobic because he is gay. Then again...
There needed to be an antagonist, and I wasn't gonna make an OC, so I needed a canon character. Since most characters are lovely and kind, there was gonna be some OOCness somewhere, I chose AJ because he/she seems the most likely of the Mane Six (to me) to be homophobic.
And small point, AJ never once directly told them to beat Blitz up, in fact he stopped them, albeit grudgingly.
And for the record, no, AJ ain't gay in this one.
So I added this to the LGBT Group. Because its awesome.
This needs to update like yesterday.
Applejack... you... fucking... asshole...
I may not be gay, but behavior like that completely and utterly disgusts me. I'm sorry to hear that you had to experience this type of discrimination.
Also, good work with your fic. I've read only a few M/M fics and yours is the best one yet.
Applejack needs to get raped once a day, everyday, by a stallion in pony hell. Oh, the cruel, cruel irony. So delicious.
Another awesome chapter. Can't wait for the next one.
Poor Blitzy! I can't fault Dusk for his reaction - and there's a big difference between "I need to be alone" and "Get away from me" - but it hit Blitz pretty hard. That guy needs all the hugs. I'm a bit worried at how coldly vicious Applejack and his friends are being, and at the more widespread homophobia in Equestria, but I do understand the need for an antagonist. I'm sure everypony will come to their senses and write to Prince Solaris about this important lesson in friendship.
Oh, and ten bits says that Dusk had a crush on his foalsitter when he was younger.
Sorry that this type of stuff happened to you Gallifrey.
Blitz' awkward time with Dusk is definitely something I know very well (note, I am talking about the time before I accepted that I was a girl so while the situation isn't exactly the same, it is functionally close enough since I was still trying to be a guy). Try being on a camping trip with your best friend who you have a crush on (though I was trying to deny that I had one) and the topic of kissing comes up (funny, but my friend, he is such a Dusk Shine and me, I'm definitely a Rainbow or a Twilight). While he didn't feel the same way when I did eventually tell him, I luckily had no problems with any of my friends or anybody else.
Yeah, I can definitely understand Dusk's reaction of needing some time alone to think. Very easy to misinterpret and very different from "get away from me." I'm pretty sure that if anyone approached me, I would definitely need some time to think regardless of my feelings or lack thereof.
No, he needs to get kicked in the balls. For the story using AJ as the betrayer, it sure would have been even more OOC if AJ was the element of loyalty in cannon as opposed to honesty.
Well, there we are! This was easily the most engaging story I've written yet, it was just an outpouring of my heart onto paper/screen. If you can relate to any of the unpleasant aspects of this story, my sincerest feelings go out to you, it is a truly terrible thing to go through, it makes you feel dirty, worthless, pathetic and useless, and as such, that's exactly how Blitz felt.
If I may, I'm gonna leave this link here:
This is what I was listening to for the majority of this story; if you are familiar with my other stories, you might have gathered that I am a huge Owl City fan, and I litter my fics with a whole plethora of references to his word mastery, the title Chasing Rainbows is just one of those.
But yeah, this song really strikes out at me, the lyrics are very fitting for Blitz's plight.
It's a sad song, yet achingly beautiful; least in my opinion.
And finally, I want to thank you, dear reader, for your likes, favourites, watches and most of all, comments. Each and every one gives me a warm fuzzy glow and fuels my writing, so yeah, thank you so much for reading and hopefully enjoying!
On an unrelated note, I've just eaten an obscene amount of tomato soup. My tummy may well just explode. 
Until next time,
Gallifrey 
Ooooo, Owl City Inspiration
(Which reminds me, I still haven't gotten around to finding all of Adam Youngs Pre-Owl City music)
I really don't understand how people can shun a person when they find out their orientation
(Although, since I graduated from a single gender high school, I've noticed there's a lot more...drama in the co-ed ones)
I feel like Dusk's analogy really shows how silly the hate is.
(...and then Dusk commandeers the element of Honesty)
Hm... frankly, I mostly disappointed. With narrow-minded view on problem of homosexuality and only one variable of disliking it. Either you bi, gay or in denial? And if you dislike seeing two stallions kissing? Or think they should keep it in private and not flaunt it around?
Then, AJ. Most cliched view on homosexuality I've ever seen. "Lesbians are hot but gays should die" kind of SUPER extreme. Not a single middle-ground pony or someone who REALLY confused and can't understand it, without being bi or gay in denial. Good, honest hetero? Insanely confused asexual who just didn't get it, bi, gay or straight, except for reproduction? Deeply routed instinctual dislike for homosexuals, because of evolution? Where's all that different, multi-coloured world of many opinions and views, of mistakes and misunderstading, of confusion and prejustice mixed with loyalty to your friends?
And it started so well. I understand that you wrote it mostly from your expirience, but first, it's ponies, they're more tolerable and open-minded and second, it's story where problem is more interecting when viewed from different angles and nopony is FULLY right or FULLY wrong like here, where Blitz is pure white and good, and AJ is epitome of bigotry.
There's time. (Epilogue ho!) 
Have you listened to Sky Sailing? It's purdy music.
Oh, I imagine they would've done, but I like to keep this a SFW fic. 
For the record, I am openly bisexual and have suffered at the hands of homophobes on more than one occasion, so how you have the nerve to say I am narrow minded is beyond me, but hey ho.
Blitz's experiences are a very simplified version of what others have done to me, Dusk's is a very simplified version of my coming to terms with my own sexuality a few years ago (I used to be in denial, I was brought up Christian, and taught that it was sinful and wrong, most unhealthy I'm sure you agree)
I could go into the aspects of religion, or other such views, but Equestria doesn't have a religion as such...
AJ's views are again a very simplified and generalised view. Perhaps this is why you thought I was narrow minded.
The point is that the issues surrounding homosexuality and it's suppression, hardship and recent liberation are FAR too complex to fully cover in a short story such as mine, but that wasn't my aim, my aim was to write down my own experiences as a way of getting them off my chest, I wrote it for myself not you, and as such, I succeeded. I don't write to create epics, I write for the sake of it, for the joy of it, and the freedom of it.
I am going to write an epilogue anyway, and I hope that you might change your mind.
Peace.
I don't think you are narrow minded, i think I failed to write properly because English not my native language. You wrote narrow-minded characters. And I get that you're writing for yourself, but then, don't publish what you wrote for yourself then, if you put story on public site it'll be judged by it quality. "I write for myself" is bad exuse anyway, like I said, if you write for yourself, don't post it.
You can say I expected more, and got very simple and lazy work. Go to psychiatrist to work your problems, it'll help more then that. Again, not to sound harsh, but I come here for good fanfiction and not to see simplified, bad or therapeutic stuff.
Dusk's is a very simplified version of my coming to terms with my own sexuality a few years ago (I used to be in denial, I was brought up Christian, and taught that it was sinful and wrong, most unhealthy I'm sure you agree)Happened to me about week ago
Go to psychiatrist to work your problems, it'll help more then that. Again, not to sound harsh, but I come here for good fanfiction and not to see simplified, bad or therapeutic stuff.
That was terrible, you suck as a human.
I am ashamed to be in the same fandom as you.
If everyone had the attitude "I do things because I enjoy them, so no-one else is allowed to see it" humanity would be in a very sorry state indeed.
"Go to a psychiatrist." Wut. Just wut. It'd take a lot more than that to give me actual mental issues.
You call it lazy, I call it simple, without faffing about, but that's a simple difference of opinions there, that's my writing style. I've tried expanding and writing much more detailed before, but I can't pull it off effectively, so I play to my strengths; and if you don't like that, that's a pity, but can't be helped.
Here come petty personal infults? Oh boy.
my aim was to write down my own experiences as a way of getting them off my chest, I wrote it for myself not you
I was talking about that. Psychiatrist can help 'get it off' your chest much better.
If everyone had the attitude "I do things because I enjoy them, so no-one else is allowed to see it" humanity would be in a very sorry state indeed.
If every single bad writer put his first attempt of fanfic at Fimfiction it'll be in a very sorry state indeed. Oh, wait, it is, with all those OC alicorns and not-writing-for-you-so-shut-up authors. Again, not flaming, just was expecting more than simplified, black-white 'here's good guy, he's all good, here's bigot he's so bigoted' kind of stuff. Welp, was expecting too much from you, it seems. Don't go all defensive on me, peace.
There's a vast, yawning chasm of difference between sharing your experiences with others and having to seek professional help...
But whatever, I have things that need need to be done, books to be read, friends to see, Doctor Who to watch, Japanese to learn and ponies to write. 
>>1239897 OH, you are SO mature!
Tell me more about what you know about writing GOOD fanfiction.
I was talking about that. Psychiatrist can help 'get it off' your chest much better.You do not say? What if I do not have loads of money to spend it on some doctor that will tell me how everything is okay, but actually prefer to come to realization what is wrong with me, and actually present it to people that do not seek only to please me.
If every single bad writer put his first attempt of fanfic at Fimfiction it'll be in a very sorry state indeed. Oh, wait, it is, with all those OC alicorns and not-writing-for-you-so-shut-up authors. Again, not flaming, just was expecting more than simplified, black-white 'here's good guy, he's all good, here's bigot he's so bigoted' kind of stuff. Welp, was expecting too much from you, it seems. Don't go all defensive on me, peace.
Very good, you did not get what you had expected, now go away.
I do not insult every "Luna fucks with Oreo" fic. If you do not like, tell why and do not flame about how author sucks.
I can tell you about good fanfiction, seeing that I was here near the start and read almost every single good fic, but hey, you are here as well. I try to help authors become better by pointing at flaws in their stories , but if author proudly admits them and adds that he wrote bad in purpose, who am I to force him do better? Average fics needed for people like you, I think.
Now I think I'll go read something better, thanks. Btw, examples of good shipping:
Hetero: "The Blueblood Chronicles"
Homo: "Feathers and Lace" (m\m), "Braeburn Big Gay Mouth" (m\m parody on 'simplified' stories like this one), "I Do" (f\f), "Mood Wings" (f\f).
Enjoy.
Have a good day. Hope your next fic will be better!)
>>1239934 Where the hell did he admit that he wrote it bad on purpose?
Average fics needed for people like you, I think.I have no idea what you mean. Use grammar.
Now I think I'll go read something better, thanks.If you preferr to reread those few fics instead of reading new material, go ahead.
I don't know english grammar that well, sorry.
And those fics were new some times ago. Good fics are rarity these days, they don't just pop up every day. But I do look at every posted fanfic, so when I find good new material, I read it and fav, thanks. I love to read stories before they 're posted on EQD.
Lol When statistics was enabled, I had almost 12 million words I've read on my account. And it's only here, I sometimes just download 'epub' version to read it later. Still, it's funny when fic you read weeks ago pops on EQD and you're like 'wow, glad to see people will read it now'!
Many people use EQD to find best fanfics, because bad fics don't get on EQD. Saves time. I check EQD too, because sometimes authors post it in public when approved on EQD and you can't find story in 'new' stories without reading blog.
You have no idea, lol . But it mostly fast reading to see if fanfic deserves to be read thoroughly. Hence my slightly rude words and harsh attitude. Sorry if I offended you, didn't mean that. I have good intentions, but temper and my bad english make it sounds worse than it actually is 
I've heard a couple songs of Sky Sailing & Insect Airport, got both albums from Port Blue, & the album he did when he was with Swimming With Dolphins
Sky Sailing's a lot of nice acoustic music & Port Blue is all ambient instrumental
(Of what I've found out, I apparently still have to check out: Windsor Airlift, Aquarium, Blue Dallas, Dolphin Park, The Grizzly, Keehar, Novel, Seagull Orchestra, Basketball, The Perfect Theory, Chester Mcwiggins and the Kowboy Kidz & Nuclear Suplex. Don't have much trust in the sources, but since all this is pre-label, it's all I can go off of
)
Eh, the rules are more a heuristic than anything - they get flooded by so many submissions that they either need 50 proofreaders or hard and fast rules.
Though FimFic does the opposite - instead of culling out things, they lighten the moderation load by accepting anything that's related to FiM.
Problem is that this is really how it works - and in fact, AJ isn't all that bad as he does think of Blitz as "confused" rather than wrong(which is still an awful attitude, but at least it's not fire and brimstone).
Writing from one's experience isn't necessarily a bad thing - in fact it adds realism in cases like this(notice that some shipfics seem to demonstrate the author's lack of experience with certain situations).
>>1241209 And that is good actually.
I am more worried about the feature system on FF - Anything with enough likes gets featured
*coughlunaeatsoreocough*
The best course would be admin controlled feature, with mods allowing good popular stories to pass, AND special editor's pick that would be selected by mods from good but unknown stories submitted to them by a closed group of lurkers.
(Actually I am working on such a site but I have no idea if this will work)
It's not necessarily the system itself - ever heard of the Fluff Principle? Coined on Reddit, but pretty much applies to any site with popularity ratings and content(easily consumed content teachers the top).
The box spaces for old fics compensates for this(because you can't update a one shot of course).
Though if you want to play with the algorithm, I suggest looking into Bayesian weighting as well as weighting via word count / category.
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wow, this is good, faved and a thumbs up to you. AJ is a bit frustrating (I've known people like that), I can't wait to see where you take this; so far so good 
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I can't wait for the next.
That aside great story and superb use of the r63 ponies 
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