• Member Since 11th Nov, 2011
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ChromeRegios


Someone who's sensitive on things that's vulgar and violent. I WILL retaliate if anyone who's agressive towards me.

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In a world filled with unruly people, that pushes you around and treats you like trash specially when you're parents are both dead... life seemed to be turning out to be a cruel joke... but, despite the cruelty and tears we received and made... Sometimes... all we need, is a little kindness...

Christian was a hard working 20 year old boy, who's really down on his luck. He was broke, still at college and has a lot of problems... That all changed when he found a small Creature in a basket within his ruined house, thats all so yellow and pink hair to match... To his surprise, it was the last thing he expected to see in his entire life!

(Inspired by the story "My Little Dashie" and the reason im writing story through and through!)


(This was the idea of a guy named "Christian Mariano" He told me a story that made me write this, i just changed some of his dialect and a small reference to the story My Little Dashie:.. The credit goes to him not me, And for the record.. The picture is not mine as well)

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Hmm, if I'd try to put this through my awesome filter, my head would explode from all the raw awesomeness, this is an amazing start to what looks to be an amazing story, keep up the good work bro.

Why are people always depressed and ready to die for ponies? It seems plotted with a bad overused plot. And always males, not even a single human female in the overused plots.

You get a Yay just for using sweater Fluttershy as cover image.

Nice...but try watching out for spelling mistakes. I can see that you're going with a very similar approach as BobCakeran, but try putting a few twists in the story. One thing that caught my attention was when you referenced the drawing the main character did when he was a child. Try including more "Memories" like that in the story. It really helps give your character more...character. Good start, but improve it a :pinkiehappy: Teensy Weensy Itsy Bisty :pinkiehappy: bit more.

Nice...but try watching out for spelling mistakes. I can see that you're going with a very similar approach as BobCakeran, but try putting a few twists in the story. One thing that caught my attention was when you referenced the drawing the main character did when he was a child. Try including more "Memories" like that in the story. It really helps give your character more...character. Good start, but improve it a :pinkiehappy: Teensy Weensy Itsy Bisty :pinkiehappy: bit more.

Interesting, this has some potential. What you really need to do is refine your writing a bit. You've got a good bit of info here, but (and I may be only speaking for myself here) It gets a little tiresome to read towards the middle. I like what your trying to do, I just want to see where it takes you. good luck!

Hey dude heres a pic to consider for MAJOR inspiration
http://staticwave12.deviantart.com/art/Abandoned-272442278

Hey dude heres a pic to consider for MAJOR inspiration
http://staticwave12.deviantart.com/art/Abandoned-272442278

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74573 don't forget to check out the pic in the review it is ADORABLE!

this looks like My Little Dashie... 'cept with Fluttershy...

Black eyes with a pink colored ring? You know she has blue-green eyes, right? And EssMan's right. Total my little dashie with Shy-Shy

a my little dashie with fluttershy......... more manly tears will be shed by all if the ending is wat i suspect

and that picture is a low blow man

*begins praying for a less heartbreaking ending than my little dashy*

MY LITTLE DASHIE WITH ALL THE PONIES! :pinkiehappy:


75754 He describes her from the picture of The story.:twilightsmile:

PLEASE DEAR LORD GIVE THIS A HAPPIER ENDING THAN DASHIE! I openly wept at that man. I don't want another one like that...

75932 oh... dont expect too much... i plan a "Special" departure of their ways... :raritywink: youll see.. still i cant live up to what ROBcakeran had done with his original version...

This is very nice! please continue! (Also what is all this about My Little Dashie? Did I miss something?)

76831 read it.. see the Original story that inspired me to make stories... :duck:

Alright then, I'll read it when I have more time to do so.

oh now cmon you copied parts of this word for word from my little dashie

77566 like i said.. i used some of it as reference.. im not using all of it am i? :duck:

Wait? How can she fly if she,s a little, little filly. :rainbowhuh:

Oh, I'm going to love this story. And I love that picture! :pinkiehappy:

Oh my gosh, first I read My Little Dashie, then My Little One and now I'm going to read and love this story.

This is great, some spelling error but still awesome!

One word: Awwwwwwwwwwww. :pinkiesmile:

Actually i see what you did there, the only part you didn't use was the bit with the animal cruelty (I can now understand why he would live so secluded, fearing he might hurt someone one day cause of his impulses

Keep writing, you're making this a very interesting read.

77664 i made a twist that she could flutter and float a bit... its possible right? :raritywink:

"But I have this strange problem, that when an animal hurts me of any kind of way, I torture them until they bleed to death, or worst is death it self."

Is that the sound of a gun cocking I hear?

Or I should say more like:

Chekhov! Put that gun down! :rainbowlaugh:

78773 Seriously.. Christian is like that... based on my personal experience...:fluttershysad:

78820 Did... you understand my reference?

I can see many grammatical mistakes, but nothing too serious. And also, calms? Haha, might want to edit that a bit.
finally, 1st?

80806 sorry :twilightsmile: where did i make the mistakes.. please give me that sentence.. :twilightsheepish:

You used a bit of My Little Dash but in a good way as used your ideas for Fluttershy's own story as a completely different mare, i have high hopes for this story and you are an excellent writer with a few grammatical errors which can be easily brushed off.. excellent job :pinkiehappy:

i see you have the 1st 1, here's the second, its in the same paragraph.
She managed to talked them out of their fear and calms them down, then something amazing happened... He cutie mark appears before my eyes, I was glad for her to had finally got her cutie mark.

maybe you should add a but between the comma and then? idk, i am not a very good critic :twilightblush:

Everypony please be patient. I am the editor for this story and i'm working at it. However i wont be able to start editing this chapter until tomorrow.:scootangel:

Like everyone else said, it's not all that grammatically sound, but you've got I great development here. Keep it up! :ajsmug:

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