Well, this is pretty good so far. Let's see where it goes....

the most! akward! thing! ever!(passes out on her coutch.)

I like it so far

Whelp, he's doomed.

That picture......

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Ever since she was a little filly, Pinkie Pie has wished for a human for her to care for, to be best friends with, and to have fun with.

I'm sorry, I read this and I immediately think of Pinkie just going "Ohhhh! Just what I always wanted! My own little human! I will name him George, and I will hug him and pet him and squeeze him..."

I'm gonna have to give this fic a read.

Please write more I really want to see how this turns out!

Interesting. Cant wait until next chapter.

I am going to see where this goes.  I don't think they realize how intelligent he is with what little they about humans.  Lyra gets in on this and instead of Double Trouble it becomes a Triple Menace (Throw in the CMC and Screwball and Ponyville will never be the same again).

"My best friend is feeling down because her sister has a bad disease... I know! I'll kidnap a sentient being from another dimension and give that poor sucker to Pinkie! That's obviously the best solution!"

*Le Me*:

Can't wait to see how this goes. Who knows what Pinkie will do with him...

>>11463771146377 Technically, it was both of her sisters, and they died. But I can see your point.

>>11478951147895 Thanks, I ended up skimming over it more and more as I read this.

Mmh... Yes, you got me interested. I want to see how this continues.

Thumbs up

>>11463771146377

Le me to le you:

>>11455461145546

Ah, the golden days of cartoons. Oh, the memories...

I love your description of the character voices!

I've wanted to do something like that myself; a human hearing all the characters before he sees them.

One thing I might add to Rarity though is that she has a British accent.

I presume the "normal" voice is Twilight's? If this is so, I must agree, it's hard to describe her voice as anything else.

I'm looking forward to what happens  next!

One little nitpick I have is that I feel the language seems a little unnecessary.

Hmmm... Talia=Pinkie...

this could get interesting.

"Yer' not seriously gonna..." Applejack trailed off, as if she didn't want to hear the obvious answer lingering in the room.

"Yes. I am." Twilight turned to everypony, who was all looking right back at her.

"I'm going to get Pinkie a human."

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>>11463771146377 Yeah, that logic kinda kills any interest I might have had in this story.

i will read more of this later, if there is any.

This was awesome.

I'd love to read more.

Th... er of ... friend... comp... you t... WRITE MOAR!

More, need more. Dis gonna be good.

But also: our idea!

Next chapter first line:

"Uhhhg..." groaned Isaac "Talia? There were horses... What's happened?"

Tell us what you think

Lyra is going to be so jealous!

>>11508361150836

I'll mix it up a little.

yesss moar please

>>11455461145546 I know where you got that Reference from and that just made my night.

To the Author: Keep up the work

>>11455461145546

Image: http://www.annotatedmst.com/episodes/teenagersouterspace/bugsbunny.jpg

"My very own bunny rabbit! I will hug him and squeeze him and I will name him George..."

good story but I wonder. is this human small enough to be like a pet or is he big like all the HiE stories.

>>11564761156476

You say "all the HiE stories" as if it's a bad thing. It only makes sense, really. My LITTLE PONY. The keyword was LITTLE PONY. They're little and they're ponies. I think that makes humans larger. It's not called "My Big Horse" for a reason.

>>11568301156830 geh now i feel like an idiot. it just sounded like he was small because he was in a box and all. still can't wait for more. do they even know he can talk.

and i didn't it was supposed to be a bad thing.

LOL! Pinkie gets a human as a present is a cool concept, you have my attention and am waiting for more chapters.

Also, there will be some slight references in this story. If you find any... Well, I'll do something about it

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I don't know what to say about this or Greg. LOL

to fast. it all went to fast. and I though they would't know that he could speak.

And here, ladies and gents, is where the ancestor of Isaac Clark learns to dismember his foes.

I find it funny that i just finished playing the binding of isaac

aw our idea is in there.

>>11617631161763

Needs some cleanup, otherwise it's a very good story.

Edit this to Pinkie's sisters dying from an outbreak of Quinese hoof-and-mouth disease.  It's funny cuz it makes fun of people dying from the flu!  And making fun of dying people is ALWAYS a good idea!  

So when does Lyra show up and demand some humans for herself?

"Hey, am I gonna play any music or what?" The white pony at the turntable called.

"No, that will be fine." Twilight responded, turning the pony into a grumbling mess who was packing up her stuff.

Yanno, you could have Vinyl play some Phoenix Wright cross-examination music. Totally fitting :)

looking forward to future chapters, minor errors that peck at my sanity, but you are good at making a story ^^b

I can't say that I like the "unknown disease" bit. it just feels like to much of a cop-out unless it has something to with the story later.,

>>11619041161904 5/5 moustaches for you.

So awesome.

-SubAtomicCC

I'm enjoying this, but you really need proofreaders. For one thing, they'll help point out when you're going too fast, which this is, and help you flesh things out. For another, you've committed several no-no's of writing. Here are some that really bugged me, and stuck out.

Isaac made a mental note to piss of Rainbow Dash anymore.

said the purple uni-

Isaac wishes to be a detective when he grows up.

That said, I'm still going to give you a thumbs up and a fav, because this story has oodles of potential, you just need to polish out the rough corners.

>>11620611162061

That is a total of 7 and 5 in my inventory now.

Guy gets kidnapped, wants to go back, then begrudgingly seems fine with everything at the end...

Image: http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m1v8lfJ8vE1r3k1m8o1_500.png

hmm, shenenigans w/ pinkie pie?

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>>11620711162071

I'm planning on getting editor(s)/proofreader(s).

interesting and things like what greg went through that "i coulda sworn someone sat there" moment makes me wonder sometimes, do i have friends i held dearly to me but cant remember them anymore? :/ meh anywho this has potential i shall keep tabs on it and what of his parents!? surely his mom couldnt forget something like birthing her son! o.0

Did you pick the name Isaac because of this?

http://www.behindthename.com/name/isaac

...So this guy DOESN'T know about them already?  Why the hell is he so fine with being kidnapped?  And why are the mane six out of character?  They didn't seem surprised that he could talk, so they knowingly took a sentient creature far, far from it's home, to give them as a gift?  OOC.

>>11621251162125 I'll be your editor!

loloolol I love the interlude where his friend didn't know that he was gone. XD It made me crack up

btw I'm loving this story so far. Keep writing please

>>11625881162588

Bam. You're my editor.

Vinyl's contribution was beyond necessary.

>>11626311162631 Sweeeet. I'll PM you my email.

>>11618091161809 Nothing. I think that with this "kidnapping" and entering diffrent universe every trace of Isaac from Earth was cleaned up. This is like he never was born.

>>11620921162092 I think we can wait a little. You now he is mostly in shock now even if he looks calm etc.... he is gonna blow in some time i think ;d

I feel bad for the poor sucker who gets kid-napped and taken to-

WAIT.

Hang out with Pinkie when she's is sad and cheer her up?

Hell yeah! How could this possibly go wrong?

Murphys' Law!

Anything that can go wrong, WILL go wrong!

Get kidnapped and put in a box?

1) Use every bit of strength to get out

2) Sit and analyse situation

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Damn it, man! You, of all people, had to trap me into another one of these fanfics? Not that I'm complaining... Congratulations! [/sarcasm] But at any rate, nice job. Good read.

This is rather unusual, and i like it!

If I was in Isaac shoes I will probably run for my life, kidnapped and used like a gift, yessire' i'm ok wit that

And.. The spell have litterally wiped Isaac's existance from his universe? this will be a problem.

The only real problem here is the dialogue. This isn't how someone should react to being kidnapped by magical ponies. Not at all.

Why U No Reference Deadspace like seriously Isaac is pure badassery reincarnate I am slightly disappointed in you young padawon... sorry if its spelt incorrectly Im not a big star wars fan

DEAD SPACE REFERENCE! Shut down everything! NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Seriously, I put once in my fic not to long ago and it was due to me beating dead space while writing it and this just makes me want to read your fic even more!

i wonder if that whole Greg scene is just Greg being Greg or if the comment speculation is right about the "wiped out spell"

also its a little fast and the characters seemed a little off but that could be due to the circumstances

finally even with Pinkie's depression i would think at least Fluttershy would be against ripping a human from his world or Applejack against pulling a human from his family (AJ always came across as a big family gal...go figure) and it wouldn't hurt having a chapter devoted to Twilight convincing the girls this is a good idea you could also explain the knowledge of humans in said chapter

Out with the bad in with the good

liked this story and the idea behind it so i'm thumb and star wait to see how it goes best of luck

>>11662041166204

Probably because I didn't PLAY or WATCH Dead Space...

>>11668011166801

That "out with the bad in with the good" reminds me of a joke.

What do you never say in a Retirement Home?

Out with the old, in with the new.

Yes, I did listen to everything you said and I completely respect your opinions and decisions.

Im reading this and I read "maybe my parents went into the future to this day and named me after the hurricane in Florida." and im like lol what I dont have school because of that hurrican

>>11678401167840

Nope, thats not a satisfactory answer

>>11685061168506

Or probably because I have no idea what Dead Space is...

>>11681281168128

Oh yay. You live in Florida too.

>>11693671169367

Yeah floridian brony's for the win /)

>>11701731170173

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I would expect more... trauma

But still, pretty funny synopsis.

>>11620921162092.      

>>11519051151905

Further ideas

"So, what happened to Talia? Is she you, or what?" asked Isaac

"Who? Oh! Talia! My human form. She, or I, or she, teehee, it's confusing, will be back after a bit, when I have to break the fourth wall again" giggled Pinkie

tell us your opinions

>>11963981196398

Uh... I'll try to add that in there, but it won't be straightforward. Maybe a small reference to Talia here and there.

>>11984361198436

Sorry not good with this kind of thing, I really hate my bad writing skilld

...This guy seems... ridiculously submissive.

I know I'd be incredibly pissed and extremely unwilling to cooperate if I were kidnapped, shoved in a box, and presented as a gift to someone.

But hey like >>11620921162092 said. Seems legit.

>>12371541237154

NO

I'M TIRED

JUST

LEAVE ME ALONE

I DON'T KNOW WHAT THE FUCK IS GOING ON

Any news on an update?

>>12766821276682

Still in the works...

>>12786701278670

Cool

Need More!

Ah so he lives in an alternate dimension where he's in love with his world's version of PInkie PIe.

Well this is a start of a very strange adventure.

I get the feeling that if he's working on this chapter still it might take a while to read.

Lololololol I love the Queen reference!

Also where can I find some of this candy? A temporary escape from this hellhole we call home sure would be nice.

>>13916861391686

^ THIS

>>13916861391686

I actually considered creating a group when I get a bit older and researching different materials and ingredients to make harmless, awesome, and gratifying Reality Check. I might do it.

>>13918201391820 Good luck doing that and making it so that it doesn't destroy your brain. XD

>>13918511391851

My top priority is to make it WITHOUT any drug/addictive materials. Kid friendly!

>>13918611391861 Uhm... I don't think that a candy that literally makes someone go into a sugar coma and hallucinate at that level will ever become legal. I'm pretty sure that a candy like that would make you hallucinate more than LSD or something. XD

Srsly... pot isn't bad for people yet it's illegal (for the most part).

Also I can't wait for the next chapter.

>>13919661391966

Okay, maybe it'll be slightly different from the story.

It lasts for about five minutes, as a regular hard candy may last, and right after that, it snaps you back into reality. No coma, and no drugs. EVERYBODY IS HAPPY.

>>13920281392028 I want a coma afterwards. It would be fun to take one, freak the hell out, then wake up somewhere a few days later. Ooh! Even better! Make one that transports you to Equestria!! :D!

I wanna hug Pinkie and Fluttershy