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Trixie doesn't have anything for her name, all she had was her arrogance but even that was taken away. She wanders Ponyville in a state of depression, when she meets Scootaloo, who helps her realize that she can truly be the Great and Powerful Trixie.
This is an excellent idea, marred by a few errors.
The spacing between paragraphs makes it seem like it's a giant wall of text. There are a few wording issues, and it all feels a little rushed. Trixie seems to be quite quickly becoming a good person. This isn't something I'm against, but it feels like there wasn't any bridge between old and new.
Just my two cents.
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You might use it as a basis for a bigger and longer story of those two travelling across Equestria someday...
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