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Kitsune Heart


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Winner of the Everfree NW Iron Author Challenge, using the elements of "a loss of greatness," lunch, and the Ponyville clocktower.

What happens after we reach our dreams? Rainbow Dash spent years as the star of the Wonderbolts. She'd flown hard, far, fast, tight, and each wing-beat didn’t send her closer to the sun, but further down to earth.

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That was brilliant, my friend. You have a real talent for writing! :pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss:

A sad ending but I think it was very in character - Rainbow Dash would never choose to grow old if she didn't have anything to hold her to this world. It wasn't just pride, it was a conscious decision that she would make her own fate before time took away the chance. If she had a blood family, children and grandchildren who needed her still, she might have chosen differently. As it was, there was nothing to hold her back.

I think seeing Pinkie's fading powers and mind was the thing that finally set her on this course. She chose to die as she had lived, fast and loud, with the biggest and brightest boom of them all, rather than just fade away.

Something tells me that Applejack and Fluttershy knew at once what she had done and I feel that Fluttershy could not and would not condemn her for her choice. :fluttershysad:

This was a sad and yet paradoxically triumphant story of a life well lived reaching its end.

:raritydespair: This was not the thing to read on a Monday morning. Fine writing, though - and I mean fine as in 'dang, that's some fine writing.' /laughs/

The feels are confused. Good story though.

Beautifully written. It's got a quiet, resigned sadness to it - a dignified sadness. And I can definitely see Dash wanting to go out with a bang, as it were.

I also like how, implicitly, both AJ and Fluttershy were expecting this - their reaction was not of shock, terror or panic, but was more like they knew this might happen and were almost waiting for it.

So sad, yet so amazing! Keep writing! :twilightsmile:
~VT

Why do the good die, gernerally? Sad ending but brillant writing. :ajsleepy:

Wow, what a downer. It was done beautifully though.

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It wasn't just pride, it was a conscious decision that she would make her own fate before time took away the chance.

Definitely. This has sort of been a theme on my mind for a while. My grandfather suffered from Alzheimer's, and it's a genetic disease, so my chances aren't that's good of escaping. I consider my mind to be my greatest asset, and I'm not sure I'll take losing it with any grace. Luckily, science moves on, so I may be fine when the time comes. :pinkiehappy:

Pinkie's loss of facilities was definitely an Alzheimer's reference. Early onset, so she doesn't see what's going on, and her family hasn't quite told her, yet.

Oh, this works so much better when I can read the actual prose. :twilightsheepish: Excellent work--there's not much I can add that others above haven't already. Except that during the reading my eyes got steadily mistier. :applecry:

I honestly don't get how stuff like this doesn't get more likes and views. As with most saddish fics I read, I decided to play some fitting music in the background (Dead Island trailer music this time) and I really shouldn't have. Many tears were shed. I loved this - it seemed very in character for Rainbow, and deals with a theme that everyone has to face eventually. Someone said it has a "quiet, resigned sadness" to it, and I completely agree. Awesome work - this wasn't presumptuous or in your face with its tragic elements, and was all the more potent because of it. Have a badass Rainbow for your efforts :rainbowdetermined2:

Wow! This is really, really great! And I'm further impressed that you were able to put it together in such a short amount of time at EverfreeNW. Congratulations: It's easy to see why you won the competition.

When I first started reading, I almost stopped. I am glad I didn't. This was a beautiful ending to such an awesome life, and is very fitting to Rainbow. Thank you for the story.

Very good work. I like how Dash kept her brashness, and unwillingness to be forgotten easily. It's a wild way of going out.

Congratulations on being cool.


~Plyxe

To be able to choose to go in that way... I can understand.
If I had to choose my end, I would want to go while on my motorcycle.

Go for that one final ride

Sounds like a good way to go

Sounds... good

It's downright despicable that this dosnt have more views and likes... :flutterrage:

The major gripe I have with the story is that it comes across as deliberately trying to make you cry rather than letting you cry. Still, I have to admit, the pay-off at the end is very fitting for Dash. It dosen't go over-the-top, and leaves the reader with a nice quite moment to refect on things. Not bad.

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