Excellent.

Two things though.

Double space; my God was that tedious to read as a wall.

"Guns guns guns!" Cole said... (PARAGRAPH TEXT HERE)

"Rouge One..."

"I... Know what..."

Like that (underlines added to show where quotes from the story are, and not my critique)

And, thoughts should be italicized or single quoted.

But aside from that, I want moar.

:D

Good story and great discription on the battle scenes keep up the good work

Wow, it's only been a couple hours and people already want more!

Well, I must give what my public demands!

Betrayed. Forgotten. Abandoned.

In Vorkuta, we are all brothers.

...I just had to say that.

Ace Combat 4 Crossover. Awesome! Will definitely follow.

Ive seen that sorce pic somewhere oh yea it's from a game u can dowload on iPad called metal storm something lol random comment

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I can't wait to read more

I hope the wait will worth it

NEW CHAPTER OMAGAAAAAAADDDDDDD

Your story is so awesoome

I can't wait to read more !

A ribbon insignia on a tail of a fighter jet AC4 Mobieus one? Blaze from AC5? Update NOW!

To all you AC4 vets, feel free to make Mobius 1 "You"

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Holy shit! As a Blaze fanboy, excuse me while I ejaculate for second...(grunts) ...okay I'm done!

Those emoticons I used for my grunt...

And now I must read this! It better be well-written or I'm gonna be pissed!

Silver out!

UPDATE, AWESOME !

But one thing annoys me : This is the United HUMAN Federation, so why is everybody is American, and is using US weaponry ?

I mean, it would be great if you could include more European (and why not Asian, if you like challenge ) characters (French, German, British,...) or some European technology in all this

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Thanks for pointing that out, I hadn't thought about that.

The UHF is definitely not just American, they are a batch of every nationality, I just haven't gotten around to how to pointout the accents without breaking the 4th wall any more than I have

As to the tech, I am guilty for using only those of the US,and I'll be sure to include more European weapons from now on

Feel free to PM me if you need advice about French military (i'm French)

PS : As for the accent, maybe you could put some words in other languages or something like that (i'm reaally bad am writing )

Fox One- Semi-active radar missile

Fox Two- Heatseeker

Fox Three- Active radar missile

That is the only critique I have for you.

Decent story.

Silver out!

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Euro, Russian, Asian and American tech all mish-moshed together would work just fine.

Anyways, this story is great and the military accuracy is surprisingly good.

You're doing good work here.

Silver out!

Ok, so here's my deal.

This was one of the first stories I ever read here. I read it back when there was only one chapter (which was bucking brilliant by the way), but I didn't have an account, and couldn't favorite it. When I did make an account, I came looking for it, but couldn't find it. Now, here I am, five months later, and this pops up in a group I was browsing.

Naturally, My first reaction was to say "Thank you sweet baby Jesus" and give it an insta-fave and an upvote.

Then I see there are two more chapters than when I last saw it and I said, "MUST READ"

Then I read it, and was put into an awesome coma. You have got some great stuff here. I would offer to help you out with any military matters, being something of an Ace Combat player and military-minded person myself, but you seem to have it all under wraps, which is why I enjoy this story so much.

Keep up the kick-ass work.

Love this story, more please

MOAR PLLLLEEEAAAASSSSEEEE