I notice there are too few RainbowSpike fiction pieces in existence. Therefore, I've taken it upon myself to produce one. The reason I find Spike and Rainbow Dash to be absolutely perfect for each other is due to this clip:

Oh This Is GONNA BE GOOD. But i will read later. Not enough time tonight.

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This is really well written! I can't wait for the next few chapters

This can't possibly end well. Read the first chapter and you have my interest.

As far as constructive criticism: Everything seems fine, except for the occasional wall of text. Other than that, keep it up.

I like it. Started out pretty good, i'm sure you will make a great story.

This is one heck of an opening chapter, if I say so myself.  

This interests me greatley. I shall await the next chapter.

Rainbow spike shipping FTW!

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TRACKED AND LIKED!!

Yes! Yes! Ummm.... Maybe!

Oh this is going to be good.

Spike and Rainbow Dash are the bros of FIM, there is no question.

Screw whoever thumbed this down, this story is awesome!

>>11187351118735

*few

Little is used to describe items that can't be properly counted; "There was too little water," for example. Few is for quantifiable measurements, like the number of RainbowSpike stories.

Lyra qnd Bon Bon acting that way is new for me to read. Good story continue

Dude I will stalk this story's brains out I want more

Sometimes better than

And better than

Soarin'

I thought the exact same thing! Well...also him and AJ.....

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I am going to fav this SO HARD! YEAH!

Fail to see how Dashie was being a douce in the clip. She knew the statement and the concept of literally remaining stationary for one or two days was completely ridiculous and it was all in the name of fun. Spike was the one who took it too far.

Heheheh... Now let's see, where's the gif of the black guy with a folding chair? I can't think of a more appropriate caption than that... Here we go.

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[grammar nazi]Should that apostrophe in the title really be there mate?[/grammar nazi]

Wow, that was one of the better reads I've had in a while! Loved it, detailed and concise, but not lacking in any way!

But Lyra and Bon Bon were kinda bitchy, especially to Spike and Rainbow. What are they, like, highschool fillies or somethin'?

After Spike and Rainbow first speak to eachother... Rainbow Dash takes Doctor Whoove's tiemsheen and goes to the future and has sex with older Spike.

dis gonna be good

You have piqued my interest.

Go on.

from a dude that reads mostly sadfics, you've enticed me

Read, liked, faved. Can't wait for the next chapter!

I can really see the spidash, spike x rainbowdash, love thang going down (if their is a better name for it I would like to know) cause spike is such a bro and rainbow dash is like the Michelle Rodriguez of mlp. (I totally heard myself saying that last sentence in archers voice, if you haven't seen archer watch it on Netflix, it's really freaking funny)

"Wait, uh...me and Dash? Really?"

Apparently.

*Steel taps his chin as he looks among his reading group; Twilight, Spike, Rainbow and Rarity all share a turn in his vision. Spike shakes his head.*

"Why? I mean, I can understand me having feelings for another pony, but...well, I guess since it's like a game to her...a competition, actually."

Then you figure it could work as a story idea?

"As long as 'Never' is a choice in that betting pool."

I'd take that bet.

"You saying I couldn't do it?"

I'm saying the kid's too short to really 'fall' for you.

"Short?"

Ok, young. Too young.

"Doesn't matter! I can still make him love me!"

...What.

"I'm sorry, I don't think I heard you right...did you say you could make Spike 'love you'?"

"Yeah!"

"What about it?"

*Steel and Twilight look at each other, before collapsing in a laugh.*

"What's so funny?!"

Just the impossibility of the situation! C'mon, Rainbow, this isn't a stunt, you're playing games with emotions here! As if it could ever work! Hahahahahaha!

*Snort* "Yeah! Spike would never fall for you, Rainbow!'

"Oh yeah? Wanna bet on it?"

You're on!

"Eeeeasyyyy money!"

"200 bits each; if Spike doesn't fall for me, you two split the pot, but if I win, you pay up."

*Steel and Twilight bump fists, grinning to each other.*

Easy money.

"Too easy."

"Hook, line and sinker...!"

"This is gonna end really badly for me. I just know it."

"I'm not one to deny the feeling here, Spike..."

Huh. I like this ship.

>>11203801120380

This made me laugh so hard. Thank you, oh, so VERY much for this creative comment! This comment should be a featured piece! Well done!

>>11203951120395

We comment to please.

"We still have to read the story..."

Yeah, and once it's over, we can rub the split pot of our bet in Rainbow's face!

"Can't wait!"

Diving in!

As I always say:

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This is such a unique idea. I love it

the dialog between Spike and RD really set things up and raise my expectations. Please continue.

Ack! All I can think about is the chorus to Special Delivery by The Offspring!!!

And the voices told me to blow you away

You're gonna fall for me

You're gonna fall for me!

Shut up, Peppermint!

Ha ha, no and it's Peppermint Cream, Finest Baker In Cloudsdale!

Just because you found away to talk on here doesn't mean you can pester me all the time.

Fiiiiiiine, I'll go... but I'm not happy!

Great, now that she's gone, I can give feedback on the story!

First of all, humorous beginning: Nailed it! Twas quite funny and I'm sure there was a reference that I didn't get :)

Spike+Dash: Not common, so a bigger chance for originality. Which this definitely has, I've never seen anything like it before.

Hmmmm... I have nothing else to say except that this, is great!

Meh, I've seen better.

PEPPERMINT CREAM, GET YOUR ASS OUTTA HERE RIGHT NOW! Sorry about her guys, I'm leaving now and taking her with me. Bye!

Ah glorious conflict setup.

Interesting.

I'll watch and see where it goes.

Also, The Game

Lyra and Bon were assholes!

... I have a question: Why is "Pegasus" capitalized but "dragon" is not? If you're referring to the mythological flying horse, his name was Pegasus. If his species was pegasus, it would be lower case.

... I apologize. Carry on.

Due to her antics

VERDAMMT FEGELEIN!

*cough* anyway, great premise, and there is nowhere near as many RainbowSpike fics as there should be.

>>11206031120603

My phone/computer auto-capitalizes the word "Pegasus". It just did it right now,

In fact. So I just leave it. I understand the audience is intelligent enough to understand what I mean. Thanks for the comment!

I think that this quote wil be appropriate for the coming chapters: "ALL ABOARD!! HAHAHA!" -Ozzy Osbourne

"....My Little Dashie"

I see what you did there.

A 'Rainbow Spike' class ship is a rare vessel indead in the oceans filled with vessels of all sizes, such as the mighty 'Sparity" class battleship. The 'Rainbow Spike' class is unique in that it is a very fast and manuverable ship but has the strong armor plating to allow it to take a beating. 'Rainbow Spike' ships may lack a bit in firepower but its survivability has allowed them to take on bigger ships and win. One example is the daring tatics of Capt. Lancie who took out a powerfule Chinese 'Twixie' class ship with the first 'Rainbow Spike' ship in the fleet.

Sorry about that battleship thing... I've been watching alot of ST:TNG lately.

+=

This will mark the first Rainbow Spike for me where Spike isn't older and with wings.

I look foward to hilarity and for potentially serious (and hilarious) romance that will bloom as a result.

I expect sudden sloppy make outs by say.... chapter 5.

Any takers? I have $20 on make outs by chapter 5.

>>11206271120627

Thank you very much for this creative comment! This made me just smile wryly and chuckle. Well done, my brony pal!

>>11206261120626

Thanks for the story! Now I'll continue to enjoy the creative writing and ignore the fact that Rainbow Dash just voluntarily agreed to woo an infant.

>>11206271120627

I'll take you up on that offer I will bet $20 that there is in fact no kissing of any kind between Spike and Rainbow in chapter 5.

Also to the author, cool story bro. This is the first Rainbow/Spike story I have read, but shouldn't the bet have more stipulations than that like rules of engagement, what the winner gets, or even just a time limit. Seriously though I like the story and I can easily see Rainbow making a bet like that simply because somepony told her that it would never happen, also I really liked the the descriptions you employed in your writing style.

I must see where this leads.

This won't end well.

This the first fic that I've seen done in the narrative style that didn't fail - In fact it's really good!

There was one thing that bothered me though:

Far more soon than later, it was coming

This should be either "Far sooner than later" or "Far more soon than late" (though only the first works with the predicate you have)

>>11200961120096

''should that apostrofe in the title be there''

Yes. Why not? It's 'Spike his Rainbow Dash' > 'Spike's Rainbow Dash'

If you would leave the apostrofe out and turn it into 'Spikes', that'd insinuate that there are multiple spikes, and then a random name added afterwards. Doesn't make any sense, does it?

I like the idea but you're writing style isn't really rubbing me the right way. I'll give it a thumbs up but I don't think I'll be sticking around. Good luck!

>>11210511121051 Not necessarily mate. The appostraphy indicates that he is something. "Spike's Rainbow Dash" implies that he IS Dashie, where as "Spikes Rainbow Dash" means that Dashie's his.

But we're spamming up the comments section with this argument.

>>11210541121054 Yes. Yes she it.

>>11210931121093

Just what I had in my mind, thanks for posting that.

Edit: corrected, sorry. It's dawn here already... should gone to sleep by now.

>>11211401121140

Just to clear up the title for you two, by "Spike's Rainbow Dash", the apostrophe signifies Spike's possession over Rainbow Dash "such as Rainbow Dash of Spike", or, in this case, the version of Rainbow Dash that would appeal to him most, therefore "Spike's Rainbow Dash"

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This picture is absolutely perfect. Thank you so much for your comment. :)

>>11211441121144 You're missing a word there, buddy.

Also:

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Bon Bon and Lyra are fu#$%*  bi$#&@¤

Interesting...

>>11211401121140

The title denotes possession perfectly as-is, and no change is necessary.

You're writing style is better than some I've seen, but you're using walls of text that give us information we don't need. The intro, I'm not sure how I feel about breaking the fourth so blatantly like that.

As for the story, It's weird, just for me, though. I've always seen RD as lesbian/bi and never really bothered with stories that explore the other possibility. It just doesn't seem to fit right in my head. Even if RD did like colts, why would she limit herself? She's Rainbow Dash, awesomest pony in Equestria, and she could have whoever she wants! (At least, that's the way I think she would think... er, whatever, you know what I mean)

EDIT: You know what, this story is looking quite good regardless of my own disposition, I think I'll stay.

>>11211401121140

I've never before seen anyone write [name]'s with the meaning of ''[name] is'', because if someone, with a name, mind you, -is- something or someone, you write 'is' as a complete word.

if you'd write he is, that'd become he's, simply because if it'd show posession, it'd be 'his'. But names have different rules.

>>11214151121415

Limit herself? Spike's swag knows no boundaries. Spike's THE catch of Equestria. Haha.

Well this should turn out to be quite epic!

A Shakespeare-esque intro? Yes please

malla malla jong- XS

Went from 194 to 202 likes as I read this story is going to be good.

Okay, I'm interested. Prepare to have a metric ton of hard cash burst out of your computer screen any second now...

>>11215351121535

Hey, you know where my username comes from! I am so proud of you! In the years I've had this username, you're the only one to address its true origin. I was actually making a YouTube account when XS was on, and I heard "Malla Malla Jong", and I went "Why not?" Haha!

Aside from the 'lesbian' bit, they probably could make this into an episode.

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That was hilarious!

I liked the pacing, great first chapter, and honestly not a ship I've seen before!

Can't wait for more

I hope my simple human mind will be able to comprehend the awesomeness that will derive from this.  

Oh man I can't wait to see what's going to happen here this is too rich!

(Dashie IS straight by the way)

Interesting use of Dash's intense competitive streak for the concept, I must say!

I'd suggest you toss in a couple of line breaks in some of those monster paragraphs you've got near the beginning and the end of this chapter though -- those blocks of text can be hard to read on a monitor, and it's not like you need to worry about killing trees with excess pages in this format.

I love you.

lol not bad

This can go places.

MORE.

This is awesome!

>>11199351119935 "Few" is an acceptable alternative. "Too few" is grammatically correct.

This gonna be a good one

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I got a very bad feeling about this.

Rainbow Dash NOT being a lesbian?

Not Natural . . .

I am not usually a fan of Rainbow Dash fics but I will make it into a challenge for me!

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Was going todislike it, but then it says that Rainbow Dash isn't a lesbian, so you got my like

And Spike X Rainbow fic...........I'll ive it a shot

I find the comments funnier than the story. Favoriting for the hell of it.

>>11206271120627 You quoted Ozzy on an MLP story. You are now God.

Aside from Lyra and Bon Bon acting a bit douchy and like assholes, this story sounds really good. There aren't enough RainbowSpike stories out there.

What with all the "Spike dies" and "everypony apart from Spike dies" and/or "Spike is alone, miserable and old" storys/comics/whathaveyou of late, it's nice to see something that restores my faith in the community!

While I do like Spike/Rarity, I have also always thought that Spike and Dash would make a good pair; they do, as you say, have a lot in common. I see you clip and riase you Spike's reaction to first meeting RD in the first episode, where he siad "she's amazing!" in a tone of wonder. (Indeed, I wonder what would have happened if they hadn't met Rarity next!)

So, yes, I shall be watching this with great interest!

(And smothering the desire to give Lyra and Bonbon a good clip around the ears...!)

Okay, this is gonna be epic!

'Course some of the rumors about her preferences is her fault for hanging out with an obvious butch like Gilda. I've seen human versions of Gilda first-hoof in Dallas, hovering jealously around their ladies...

Good idea, and well written, especially at the beginning. Only problems are with grammar and how suddenly Rainbow Dash jumped to the idea of making Spike fall in love with her; it's almost like she was waiting to say it the entire time, instead of just having an idea come to her. Otherwise, awesome work.

Hah! Interesting idea, but your grammar...

here we go again

>>11194901119490

Ah thats where I left my swag, thank you for finding it!

>>11187351118735

Hmm... you're right. I just can't see this story going badly.

If they made this canon I could die happy.

Brilliant! This must be tracked!