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Come, my friends, 'tis not too late to seek a newer world...

Princess Luna feels stifled in the nation crafted by her sister in her absence. After much debate, and over the strenuous objections of Princess Celestia, she decides to leave Equestria and find her own land, to rule as she sees fit. She asks her friends, the bearers of the Elements of Harmony, to join her in her quest as she travels into a wide world full of indescribable wonders, unspeakable horrors, and magics long-forgotten to ponykind.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 134 )

You. You know what you should do?
You should write more. A lot more.
Do it. :pinkiesmile:

can i join you Luna? Pleaseeeeeeeeeeee

I... wow.

Just, wow. This has the potential to be very, VERY large and expansive. My god, it's literally like the start of a spin-off of the show or a 10 years later thing.

I can't wait to see more of this, It's going to be one hell of a ride I'm sure.

Celestia being slightly arrogant kind of suprised me, but then again, seeing that her sister is going to leave her again must really hurt deep down, so I can't blame her really.

The others may have seemed slightly too eager to go on this, but then again, considering how they all basically reached their dreams, then didn't really like where it took them, I can imagine all of them jumping on this. Maybe expanding on their reasons a bit more for basically leaving everything they've know behind for this adventure could help.

Bah I'm just rambling at this point. Looking forward to more!

Is :yay::heart::rainbowkiss: happening here, because based on Fluttershy's only factor if she could go or not was Dash, soooo...

Well, I've no doubt that the Wendigos will be back there somewhere but what else could be awaiting our brave explorers?

I'll be watching for more!

BTW - Loved Celestia in this; she isn't used to not getting her own way, is she? :raritywink:

The start felt a bit too conveniently expositional - could have stood to be more organic.

Apart from that, loving this so far. The condescending, overbearing take on Celestia is perfect for giving impetus to Luna's decision to leave, and I'm looking forward to more elucidation on Pinkie and Fluttershy's reasons for going along, seeing as they sorta got talked over by the rest.

This is going to be awesome:rainbowkiss:
Proceed.

Very nice, can't wait for more!
However, What in Celestia’s scorching solar mare heat did that lat part have to do with everything else? Will he be joining them?
...Wait a minute, 'Cliff Hanger'?
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Ooh, how exciting. Tracking.

Liking this story so far. :twilightsmile:

I am mexican and I fin this :moustache: brillante

~Oh Cliiiff Hanger, hanging on a cliff, that's why he's called Cliff Hanger!~

Yes, that was a Between the Lions reference. Bite me.

Why, oh why, must I find this when you've just started? I always try to wait until a story is done, then binge through it...
The road of perseverance will be long and tough, but I shall try! :rainbowdetermined2:

...Maybe just the first chapter... just this once... :twilightblush:

Ah, you gotta love when stories end with a Cliff Hanger. Watched and tracked. Though the expectations may be high, I'm confident you will not disappoint.

My god... This has so much potential! It could really go anywhere, do anything... They could encounter new people and new places (actually, they'd have to encounter new people wouldn't they? Because I don't think seven mares can start a kingdom, regardless of how great they may be) I thought everypony was quite well in character and the start did not feel rushed at all. Needless to say, I am very much looking forward to seeing where this goes next.

Also, I understand that it was a joke, but I think that since Luna and the mane 6 are crossing a mountain range, the mountaineering skills of this Cliff Hanger could be quite useful. I vote Cliff Hanger for party mountaineering expert 2012!

Anyway, keep up the great work and get that next update out soon! Don't leave Cliff hanging like that!

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Seven mares cannot start a new kingdom alone, but they might be able to do an expadition (though that to would be better with more along) to see that there are places to settle and find where those are. And report back the good new to build excitement and support of beginning the settlement movement.

You are evil now i have yet another story to track. :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:/5 yays

That was probably the most brilliant Cliff Hanger I've ever seen. The most creative too!

Yes! Cliff Hanger's journey continues!

Oh, and that other stuff was cool too I suppose.

I presume that those creatures were a Changeling army. The question is: Why did Luna blame Celestia. The answer to that may be far more important than the mechanics of how our heroes survive this.

Great story but why Cliff Hanger WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
Oh and MOAR please

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For not (in Luna's oppinion) properly educating Twilight. :twilightoops: :trollestia:

I can't wait to hear more about the bold and daring Cliff Hanger!

Well looks like I will join you Luna also DAT Picture i want a Statue of this.

110 likes and no dislikes? you have allready got my attention and i havent even read it yet

Oh my! This is a very very interesting story! Plz keep writing!

At first.. I only read chapter one very brifely.
1. A Mane 6 version of "Children of the Night"? (I know this is NOT)
2. Luna's action is too aggressive, even she has her right point. What she did may cause civil war or the separation of Equestria.
3. It's a bit strange that a ruler (Diarch) herself leads 6 Elites to form a scout team to reclaim a colony. But this is fine for a general/princess to do this.

However, after re-reading chapters 1-2.
Oh my! This fiction is incredible entertaining! MOAR Plz!
Chaper 2 answers for question 2 and 3.
Luna may be really really angry of the political action that Celestia did.
But she did the right way to tell their subjects that "She send Luna (Princess) to.. " instead of "Luna, one of the Diarch, wants to leave.."
(Poor Celestia and poor Luna)
And........ it does not really matter :pinkiegasp:

The story is very entertaining! I was so excited reading this story!
GJ!!!! and MOAR!!!!

Hmm, methinks its Celestia who's the fragile one.

Your doing a BILLIENT job keep it up your amazing! :twilightsmile: and...DERPY! :derpytongue2:

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I... but... wha... what?

I have never seen this before.

... the temptation to have Cliff get shaved by a sheep may be overwhelming, now.

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When I first saw this comment I was SURE I would scroll up to see a dislike from you after you'd been horribly disappointed.

Nice self esteem, me!

Is this Celestia's doing?
Or something else.

1213949 its a bitch when ur imagination does that isnt it?
but no instead you got more likes:twilightsmile:

Holy shit.

This... this is... I have absolutely no idea what the hell this is, except that it is incredibly awesome and becoming greater with each paragraph.

Ho boy, Pinkie must be extremely sensitive to the energy of the world if Luna using a mage tower caused her to black out. Also, could you eventually explain to us folk how life has been treating the rest of the background cast (aka- Big Mac, the CMC, whatever happened to Spike, that sort of thing.) Also:
img199.imageshack.us/img199/9193/freakazoidfudge.png Twilight's on the warpath! Better look out!

Turning his back on the judgmental stares – or so he assumed – of his unexpected audience, Cliff Hanger focused his magic and raced up the cliff like a shot.

END CHAPTER TWO

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Interesting story though.

I do like this story, but I felt there were a few issues. These are just critiques, nothing more.

One thing I noticed was that it felt like Applejack had some OOC issues, due mainly in the first chapter. In "The Cutie Mark Chronicles" and throughout other episodes, it was established that Sweet Apple Acres was everything to her. Why would she just up and leave? Each of the Mane 6 got their explanation, but A.J. got:

“I’m going too, you silly ponies!” came Appejack’s irritated voice from down the hall. “Somepony has to watch out for ya, since ya ain’t got a lick of sense between ya! Now hush your shoutin’, some of us are used to an early bedtime!”

That was it. This has the potential to be awesome exploration of her character, such as like a back drop story to another chapter perhaps, or an interlude chapter? But this needs to be flushed out more.

Personally, I'd also like to see the rifts between Luna and Celestia flushed out more as well. The beginning of Chap. 2 had a bit of an artificial feel to it, honestly. It was like a forced explanation for kicking the story into gear because there was no direction dialogue between the two. This could be a wonderful source of conflict that finally forced Luna's hand, if explored more. Was it really issues with Celestia or was it the fact she was always overshadowed by the Solar Princess? Good chance for some exploration there. Oddly, the primary explanation, while perfectly logical, could be interpreted as a "faux" reason, like some excuse that she needed to make the break with Celestia.

Beyond that, the story, as framed, looks pretty DAMN epic and I'm following it for a reason. Those are just my thoughts.

Oh sweet Luna and Celestia!
This is a very interesting and fascinating fiction!
I love this idea!
MOAR plz!

(poor Luna and Celestia, I feel a bit sad at the begining of chapter 2..)

To be honest my only problem is that Luna is conducting this whole expedition very weirdly. I mean yes it is a scouting mission but you'd think that they would bring along enough guards to keep them safe from this kind of thing not to mention the fact that six ponies plus a god (and you don't seem to be going with the really overpowered version of alicorn gods) cannot possibly create any kind of lasting civilization or even a create a good beachhead really. They need more civilians and farmers along with guards to set up the first settlement while they wait for the inevitable wave of ponies who are tired of Equestria to arrive to pick up the slack and create a real working kingdom. Other than that I really enjoy this story and I can see why you're doing it this way because it's easier to portray seven characters compared to a few dozen or even a hundred. Anyways that's the end of my soapbox get back to writing this interesting story. :twilightsmile: Wow that got really long :facehoof:

Dat last part. Just epic. Just too dam Epic

One of the best adventure stories I have read in a LONG time. Can't wait for more!

:ajsmug: wow epic adventure im looking forward too :3 this'll be great thumb up for me! :D

Well that was inarguably awesome. Great chapter, looking forward to chapter 3.:pinkiesmile:

This story is awesome.

just read this after its been sat in my read later folder for like forever, and vastly enjoyed it. looking forwards to more.

just a few things- just luna and the mane 6? i thought she would be taking an entire colony, because otherwise she is going to have to return home to find subjects that wish to join her, and that could be very awkward for them both.

also, the story is tagged as romance- who what when where why TELL ME NAO!

also, does pinkie actualy want to go with them, or did dash just drag her along by acident?

This is really, really good. I like the plot so far, and on top of that the word choice and details are superb. It's very clear and precise, getting to the point without much "fluff" taking up space. It's got a helluva lot of potential, and I'm definitely watching this one to see where it goes. I also commend you for staying true to the characters' canon personalities and mannerisms.

I will say that the big reunion in the beginning put me off a bit. The big circle of congratulations, while it happens to an extent realistically, felt a little overdone... Maybe artificial is the correct term, I just think it could have been presented better. Regardless, it's relatively minor; I meant it just as something to chew on.

Nevertheless, great work!

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One can only hope it's Twiluna. I love that ship more than anything.

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Oh yes, twiluna is a great ship. I am also fond of Raripie, if only because it seems to be really hard to pull off well.

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