Hmmmm... curious about where this will go... I'll be watching you

i like

Uhm... You forgot the italics on!

Also, can't wait to see how it ends!

EDIT: Holy shit! EVEN COMMENTS ARE IN ITALICS! WHAT THE HAY IS GOING ON!?

Interest piqued.

>>11211051121105 You sir are having a computer issue, xD. Or maybe I am seeing no italics! Hm....

EDIT: Oh waitz, Im seeing half of the story Italic.... Well, that explains it, xD

You know what

CONTINUE.

>>11212001121200 Now it's fixed, by the way. I don't see any italics comments now.

Now my thoughts on the story itself, I for one, LOVED THE FUCK OUTTA IT. Now, please continue it before I sue you for Emotional Harm. xD

>>11214111121411Oh you all flatter me Please, no lawsuits Iz only a poor wittle writerz

>>11214401121440 Then write MOAR, lol. This is probably the best out of the 30 new ones I've read today. Now, the only issue I face is having to wait for more chapters... :/

>>11214471121447 Well, fear not, for I plan on getting the next one out by late tonight or early tommorow I got a little over excited at the positive feedback and had couldn't wait to see what you all think about the second chapter as well

Great story so far!  I cant wait for more:).  I have read one of the most perfect stories yesterday, and he posted 23 chapters in 2 days that took me a whole day to read0_0.  23 chapters in 2 days!  Over a thousand words each!  HOW IS THAT POSSIBLE!

great story brah keep it up. i will be watching you....

and i see italics for the last couple paragraphs... not sure if it's me, or you left them on or it was done on purpose for some reason i cannot comprehend. oh well

I like that Ray guy, he has all the right reactions.

My friend who is a hater would either love this because it takes place in Toronto, or insulted because it takes place in Toronto. This seems like a good story and you have my favorite.

>>11260291126029 hahaha I don't know why but I find that really funny

That last sentence needs some commas

Beyond that this story, is pretty good

Continue

This.... was..... so.... amazing....

Oh. My. God. Only two chapters and I'm convinced that this is the best human fic to be written yet. I loved this, I really hope moar comes soon...

Also note, I do not think you rushed it IMO. The pace is perfectly steady, although I'd like to see a little more words put into the chapters. But hell, I love it and it's your writing, do whatever you please.

>>11380801138080 More words is why I'm giving myself until sunday , and thanks for the support, I write for people like you

>>11380961138096

Sundaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy

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I can't wait that long.

>>11381181138118 Well at least it's better than those people who wait a month and only release like 2000 word chapters D: You'll have to wait But I will not disappoint (I hope)

>>11381471138147

I agree. I still have bookmarks of people who haven't updated in like 5 months. Makes me mad to because most of them were great stories. Now they are just idling on the site.

>>11382001138200

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>>11382251138225

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Pretty much sums up how I feel about it. Funny too, I used to hate reading until I started reading the FiMFics. It's like I gives me a good feeling, these stories on here are also the first thing to ever make me cry (multiple times) Like every day I'd much rather read on here than hop on Gears 3 or play some CSS

>>11382591138259 I never started liking reading until I was twelve and my mom bought me some books (she thought I was A.D.D but I was actually just a really energetic child) and then I fell in love with reading. I got into writing around the same time when my teacher would give us story starters and I would blow them out of proportion for shits and giggles. I thought I was being hilarious and defiant, but I was actually just impressing my teacher.

>>11382791138279

Sometime when I have time off I really want to write my own fic. However I am a bit afraid that it won't look very good. I have a wide range of vocabulary but when it comes to writing I seem to lose it all at once and the writing seems dull and boring. My two ideas I have been working on is a human fic and an octa scratch.

>>11383011138301 Well you never know unless you try! Those two would make an awesome fic together (and they have many times). But having a wide vocabulary isn't the same as having a wide imagination, which is where writing comes from. If you sling together big words with no story behind it, you'll look pretentious, but if you can use your words and your imagination, you can truly come out with something amazing! If you do end up writing this fic, I'll make sure to read it

>>11383251138325

Thanks! Gives me a lot of encouragement! It would also be nice to have a tester to read it for me and point out the mistakes I make.

>>11383481138348 If you'd let me I'd gladly do it :3 I've always wanted to teach

>>11383721138372

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Thank you!

very good. keep writing 5/5 moustaches

Loved it!

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Keep up this story, It just gets better!

Friday though......I need more, and quickly!

Exactly what I expected, she's getting attached, hopefully she doesn't get lost.

>>11665091166509 OMG THAT PROF PIC MAKES YOUR COMMENT AMAZING Keep on keepin on man!

good chapter.

>>11665281166528 Hehe I'm surprise this profile pic isn't more popular!

Ha, I was in the Eaton centre when somebody got shot.

>>11665851166585 Well, that's something to brag about... I guess xD

Great, why do I get the feeling that our Dashie is going to run into some of Toronto's odder denizens? Anyway's cant wait for more.

>>11665851166585 .........

What.... the?

elle était juste dire bonjour

You should use "voulait" instead of "était" for it to be correct.

Je ne soins

You tried to translate "I don't care" I guess. You should say "Je m'en moque."

les filles ne seulement

venir ici

Most people don't care I suppose , but as a french brony I might as well point that out.

Interesting concept

>>12208831220883 I appreciate the corrections. My french is terrible, which is silly because I'm Canadian .  (And no, I didn't use google translate, that thing is sooooo inaccurate). I have better spanish than french, but French makes more sense for this fic

I'm definitely loving it so far, some people may consider the romance a little rushed, but I personally find it to be a pleasant change from the incredibly long and drawn out ones I usually read (each to their own, I like both). So, keep up the good work I suppose, it's good to know when you'll publish chapters rather than doing it sporadically, gives me something to look forward to!

>>12247931224793 I was worried about that x_x But not to worry, it will all be settled soon. Besides, think of it as a petty crush for now

>>12248041224804 Honestly, I genuinely like it and would agree that as the 'relationship' stands, it hasn't gone far, but a lot of the time it takes a few chapters for the protagonist to even realise any feelings at all, let alone accept them. Write it how you like it, don't try to please everyone and it'll turn out fine    Also if you ever find yourself in need of an editor, feel free to get in touch with me, I do a little editing here and there and find myself with a good deal of free time but lacking anything to do with it. Nonetheless, good luck with your story!

>>11383011138301 Go for it! Although I do have one tip, get the first few chapters down first before you publish them: I aren't an awfully creative person and I made a mistake in writing each chapter then posting them, almost instantly stuff came up in my life and I had to grind things to a halt, and I started struggling for ideas, so it's just left there stewing on hiatus, hopefully now that my life has gone back to normal I can divert more attention to it. But as long as you have an idea in mind and a bit of determination, do it - I'll be sure to take a look if you ever start writing.

Kick some ass Ray, do it for Dash!

Your tardiness is unforgivable!  Don't make me sic Twilight on you.  If she has to show you why it's important to get things done in t timely manner you won't be happy about it.

That aside, nice chapter dood!  Saw some typos here and there, but nothing too egregious.  And now, on with the heroic rescue attempt that will most likely end up nearly getting him killed!

Finallyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy....

WRITE FASTER! I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!!!! I want a scene were Rainbow Dash goes badass mode and kicks the shit out of everyone!

Beat him up (beat him up), break his neck (break his neck!)

>>12245941224594

Glad to be able to help. I don't see my native language a lot in fanfictions , so if I can help with it I'm glad to do so.

Concerning the last chapter:

Que feriez Rose dire?

I'm not ever sure of what you were trying to say here. "Qu'en dirait Rose ?" I suppose.

Remerciez un dieu tu es rentrée! Je suis affamée!

It should be "Dieu merci (or "Merci mon Dieu) tu es rentrée ! Je suis affamé !"

Voit plus tard

"On se voit plus tard" or "A plus tard"

That all for now.

I bet Ray is going to be Rainbow's knight in shinng armor..

That , or Rainbow already kicked their ass because she is just that cool and awesome.

>>12938591293859 Again I'm ashamed that my french is as bad as it is I'm Canadian for god's sake! But I haven't had  french class in three years so I guess I deserve a pardon? From now on I'm running this shit by you first >_<...

And you'll all just have to wait and see what Rd will do about this...

Shit is going to hit the fan D:

Nice work, I look forward to the next chapter :D

Loved this chapter! Why don't you get more views though?

>>14124401412440 Could be a multitude of reasons. Maybe because I release chapters at stupid times. Maybe the picture or the description suck. Or maybe my work actually isn't that great. But I'm still trying!

Besides a few grammar errors, your writing is fine. Honestly though, I completely forgot it was here until u updated. Id trully love to see more. It's a brilliant  idea

Indeed your story is very good, I shall add this story to my group

Now for something completely different

>>14845711484571 Vigilante justice at its finest that made my night!

>>14884101488410 I love the videos that guy does voice overs in. He always the funniest storys.

For some reason when he three of the apologized this song popped in my head.

>>15416581541658 That movie... goddamn

Why the sad tag?

>>15418401541840 Future chapters.

>>15418531541853 Okie dokie lokie!

That had to have happened at Markham and Eglington...

Okay, not bad, I'll be patiently waiting for more.

Did not read yet...

But summary shows plenty of potential.  

It's 1:40am.  Hahaha.  Sleep first.  Then I'll read.  

>>16033951603395 Haha I lub that disappointed you dun like but oh werl

My jimmies have been thoroughly rustled

huh...

...

First chapter was your best chapter.

Um.  Good attempt?

>>16044001604400 Sorry to disappoint? Not that it matters but to anyone else who cares I'm currently editing the fist few chapters. Nothing majorly story altering, just tidying up a bit.

Lovely jungly. Brought a tear to my eye which I managed to prevent shedding.

Hahahahahahahahahaha Mach 13 that's bullshit.

If she went anywhere past Mach 2 her body would be gone. I would have ripped on this so hard if you didn't put that note at the end.

>>16080331608033 I chose mach 13 because of how absurd the concept would be. My inspiration for that bit was a "physics defying badass" post I saw on mlb I had to have my own bullshittery.

(this post)

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>>14128981412898

Hmm...

Probably the times you update.

I could always help out and link your story in the beginning of the next chapter if you want... I actually enjoy reading it, and I haven't even touched a story other than mine in the past two months or so... It's not like I haven't tried reading other stories, it's just that none of them really... pique my interest? Basically I'm trying to say that I really enjoy this. Never been good with words

>>17157651715765 Clearly you wouldn't be writing if that was so . And if you want to add a link, that's totally up to you, I won't say yes or no. If you do I want it to be because you really liked the story and wanted others to see it, not just doing me a favor (if that makes any sense). It'd be cool though. And that's pretty cool that my story stood out

>>17157821715782

So then I will. I really do like the story, but I just wanted your permission before I linked it.

AwwwYeah a stroy that takes place in Canada and in my home city no less.

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>>17280421728042 Hahaha I love that pic, it's always rainbow dash in front of an american flag... wtf I mean the show is made in Canada!

I like this story.

Me gusta.

Double like.

Manly tears have been shed

I'm starting to like this story. Please, continue.

The idea seems very interesting, my friend! Well done!

Wow great start so far im glad I discovered this when I did

.........Richard_Of_York_Gave_Battle_In_Vain?

>>12916871291687 Dude or dudette you are full of win.

I found it a little stupid when the ponies are always horrified when a human eat meat in the fanfics. I mean if they are disguste by carnivores why would they have cat,dogs,howl and all the other sort of predators as pets? and we clearly saw Fluttershy giving fish to her animals in one episode.

But anyway good story i can't wait to see what will happen next

>>17378511737851 Eh, Drama needs to be dramatic

It's a good story but the typos (though few and far between) are major and distract from the plot. 4/5 mustaches as of chapter 6

>>17377581737758 Thankyou.

Oh god, who let Jeremy Clarkson become a doctor?

>>17377111737711

Red_Orange_Yellow_Green_Blue_Indigo_Violet.  *Sage nod*