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I'm going to get a lot of abuse for this chapter.
Its good bro, and it needed to happen eventually.
i liked this chapter alot
Kind of what I expect from a thousands year old ruler, wise and crafty. Though they wanted him to love a princess that was an animal where he grew up. They just can't seem to wrap their minds around that and how weird it is for him. The fact that he is willing to try only a few years into his new life is crazy progress. They also didn't think that he might not want to love because of a broken love life, though that is mostly his fault because he doesn't talk about his past. The princesses want him to love like a pony, but still be their weapon. Have their cake and eat it.
Navi has finally opening up his heart and I'm afraid its just going to get broken which is really sad. Like he said a human in a pony world. If there was an element for him it would be patience/long-suffering because even knowing everything Luna has told him he is still willing to give her another chance.
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I do believe so. But because most of what I want to say could make a marine blush, I'll only say that there's a lot that could be wished of that ending. But im fine with him giving her a chance.
I'm not going to abuse you....
I'm going to break you...I'm going to break you soooo bad
but alas...I'm tired....I post comment in the morning..
Question: Why the short chap?
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This chapter is short because it has a lot of material in it. I said what I needed to say and that was that. The next chapter is only ten thousand words and the one after that is only eleven thousand. I would have released two when I released this one, but you kept asking me to give you content ahead of time so I just released one today.
I hope you're happy.
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Everyone should have a shot at love, I suppose. How well it's handled, though...
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They both know that it's hard for Nav, but they don't realize just how hard it is. They're ponies, made for loving and friendship and all that stuff. Navarone is a human, completely different mentally. Most ponies don't seem to realize just how different he is.
The princesses wanted him to love so that he would be their weapon. It's not love and be their weapon. Essentially, they wanted him to love Luna so that he would feel obligated to protect her and do what they told him to.
And yes, Navarone is patient and kind of an idiot.
The bets are on, people: Will Navarone and Luna last, or will one of the two of them fuck up big time?
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Well humans are diverse if anything. The ponies could have gotten someone worse than Navi or someone who shared a similar mindset as the ponies. Which is why I still want a chapter were he is turned into a child just to see what he was like when he was still innocent.
Luna and Navi...it would be great if it worked out because they both need help and a loving partner could do it, but for the sake of drama it probably won't work.
And the plot thickens... someone pass me my soup spoon.
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I just thought of a theme song you can use.
Reel Big Fish - I Know You Too Well To Like You Anymore. When I listen to this song I now think of Luna and Nav.
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No, this is Navarone's theme: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F88G4itQyds
And if I had to pick a theme for their relationship... http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UskSU5BoyZs
Having the truth exposed like that would make any relationship hard. Trust is almost non existent for any of the ponies, and yet he is willing to give her some when logic says no to. He knows that they want him as a weapon and yet he has no choice with it. But he could use Luna's feelings to his advantage in deceiving them like they did. He has no escape and Celestia wont let him go even if he guilt trips her some times. My guess would be that if he has a consequence free opportunity to eliminate them for good, he would struggle with the choice and probably end up not doing it. Even though the majority of people would take it. An emotional struggle with suffering character, the tragedy of Navarone.
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I know Nav's choice wasn't popular or even smart, but he knows that he's trapped. He knows that Luna does love him. He's just trying to make the best of a shitty situation. I mean, hell, if he does end up good with Luna and their relationship blossoms well, there's a chance Celestia would stop using him as a weapon so she doesn't risk him dying and upsetting Luna.
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But would some one as old as Celestia truly care for feelings when having to lose a useful tool? For her life goes one as others die. And Nav could simply go against them every time just to spite them and not give any satisfaction. In his current state life seems like less appealing. And alternative to his escape could be the forest where he takes his daughter and has the ring. Complications are going to arise, however the opportunity of freedom seems worth the risks. Some people are stubborn and would simply refuse following orders on principle, even choose death before having their minds raped.
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The forest would not be safe for Taya and it wouldn't be the kind of life he'd want for her. The reason Navarone was forced to keep Taya was an attempt to force him to stay in Equestria out of a feeling of responsibility for her. The fact that Taya wanted to learn magic just cemented that choice in Celestia's mind. Long story short, Celestia dun goofed in that respect.
And yes, Celestia does actually care about her sister. Luna has been her only real friend for six thousand years in the story. Celestia would not want to actually hurt Luna more than is necessary. The kingdom ran fine before Navarone showed up and it would run fine if he stopped helping. He's just a tool. A useful tool, but the entire machine wouldn't break without him. If it came down to Luna's feelings and continuing to use Navarone, Celestia would pick Luna's feelings.
Navarone will never take kindly to having his mind looked into. Ever. He almost killed Chrysalis when she did it and he beat the shit out of Shining Armor when he tried. He has promised in the past that he would kill Celestia if she ever tried to do anything to his mind without his permission. He would follow up on that promise, or die trying.
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Taya has show Nav that she is strong enough to take care of herself there. He could leave her with Twilight to raise and take care of her. Yes he would not feel good doing it, but in all truth there is not much of a life he could giver her the way he is. He could easily reason himself into thinking that him leaving her is for her own good. Her growing up to hate him would be better than living in a dangerous forest as he could convince himself into believing. Celestia says she sees him as a friend and yet she realizes that he does not really want anything do with her. His fear is understandable, however he tested the waters with her enough to know that he could tell to figuratively and literally to go and fuck off. She would be pissed but he has enough strength to warn her that if she were to imprison him he would kill her and escape. My suggestions are out of his character, yet they are options that his personality could come up. As far as the mind rape, that is death to a personality and therefore the person. Opportunities of escape are there and yet the consequences are to great to ignore.
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You're going to love chapter fifty-eight.
The reason Nav is currently unwilling to leave Taya is because she's already been abandoned by her parents. He knows what it would do to her to be abandoned by him as well. That said, everyone has a breaking point.
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I asume that more than one braking point will be reached. Cant wait to see what will happen next.
And Thank You for the review of my work.
1321429My thought immediately after I read this comment:" yes, you are."
I personally really wanted Nav to glare at her for a moment, say goodbye, turn around and leave with the ring on. But I guess for the interest of a continued story, this works better.
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I understand that. I think a lot of people would have done that. Navarone is not a lot of people, though. Hell, I'm pretty sure that if someone told me that I would get the fuck out of the country by any means necessary and never come back.
1323373 I'd burn every bridge and pull a full vagabond, laughing bitterly at every attempt to bring me back until they stopped trying. Possibly I'd even use the gender-change stones and destroy the counterpart to really seal the deal, but then again, that'd make a pretty boring story. This far into things, that kind of shift would also be catastrophically jarring if not done exactly right.
(But the sudden gender change would be a refreshing mini-arc if nothing else. Perhaps the male stone is stolen or lost or something similar, and the female stone is forced on him?)
Speaking of which, I have to ask- how the buggering fuck Christ have you managed to update this much this often? I know pre writing it would be possible, but you must have been writing since the beginning of this year to keep this up.
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I've been writing since the beginning of season two. When I redid the chapters, it put me up to sixty-one. I think it's over 730,000 words. It is still a work in progress, though.
There is a small arc wherein Pinkie gets control of the gender stones. Female Nav meets a stallion that doesn't know he's really a guy. There's going to be another arc wherein Nav gets hit with the stone as a pony and is forced to stay that way for a while.
The thing about using the gender stones permanently is that there would always be one human there, no matter what he does. So even if he was a female, everyone would know about the human. And honestly, that isn't a problem for Luna. She prefers female Navarone.
1323451 Thats...
Far too many words.
I've been writing a few stories since half way through season one, but since I'm such a lazy bastard I've only been refining dem plots.
And I guess you're right about the only human thing, but the main problem Nav has had with the ladies has been him unable to turn off his swag. I'm thinking if he was no longer an exotic and moreover unique male, that problem might be lessened.
Also not entirely sure how I feel about more ponification, but you've done it well so far.
What I like about all of this is how you created a realistic, faithful to the show Celestia and Luna, and still managed to make them just as bad as Discord. I mean, it's pretty clear that even though they are not as flamboyant and theatrical as he is, they are completely and pathologically obsessed with power and control, both in ruling their kingdom, and in social relationships. This outburst of sincerity was calculated, I believe. It's pretty clear Celestia and Luna fail to see that what they did was sick to say the least.
Keep up the good work!
He should have left and gone to the griffins for a while.
Shit. So, I give it two chapters...
1814356 nah at best half a chapter of him almost killing someone important and getting raped twice
I don't know about everyone else, but I'm glad Luna and Nav had this talk... now, next chapter.
that ending, no just no
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Admittedly not my finest moment as a writer. But definitely not my worst.
Sometimes all it takes…
Is the truth.
Sigh. I really wanted this to work out for the two, even though I know this story is about putting Nav through an emotional meat grinder. It won't, especially considering everything revealed, but I wish it had.
Personally though, that key should have been used for more than that question. At least the question he asked Celestia, whether this whole confession was planned by her, both of them or whether she just finally decided it needed to come out and it was spur of the moment, if she still thinks of him as something to be used despite her love and if she truly loved him, with possible rephrasings of the last one. There are multiple 'loves' out there, and Celestia has already said she 'loves' her subjects.
Achievement Unlocked: Has feelings for Luna: Category; Love. Wonder if Cadence has read this and is somehow happy about this, or really sad?
Reading this... and knowing what happens next... It made me cry like a little girly man... or maybe that's just my tearduct getting blocked up again... This also marks the first point in the story where I would have been ok with an ending. Why you ask? Because it ends with a completely new beginning for Nav. A life with Luna and everything that comes with it, free of lies and mistrust. Sure, the adventure is over but what would you rather have? A story that ends with no questions left to be answered or a story that you can continue on in your mind in any way you see fit? Sucks that Nav is forced to live through a "no rest for the wicked" lifestyle though...
Now then. I'm ecstatic as hell that this is just past the halfway point for current chapters. Everything that happens past this point is just so... I don't even know how to explain it right. It goes places you'd never think it could go and yet when you step back for a bit and look at everything it just makes so much sense... I wanna get back to reading though some of my favorite parts are coming up in maybe 10 or so chapters!
Woo! Halfway there!
As of writing this anyway. And I've REALLY gotta stop reading the comments...
What's been happening with chrysalis all this time?
DAMMIT NO NAV!!!!!!!!! What the hell?! Should've made him go on his own way. God I hate when this happens!!!!!!
After reading this I felt hope for Nav. But with as dark as mind is that hope quickly turned to pity... You're a twisted soul Dizzy... I respect that.
Woooooooooot! Go Luna and Nav!!!!
Personally, I would kill Luna, torture Celestia and then kill her too.
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Yes Nav, keep thinking you love her. You will soon see her true side. God I love it when you already know wats gonna happen.
MWHAHAHA!!!!!!
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Dude you're totally wrong. Th author has managed to be a smartass so far so your assumption is gonna be totally wrong because you picked the predictable guess.
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Damn that video is unavailable.
Is it too late to ask for a replacement link for Navarone's theme?
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I think it was this one: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XtvvzxET1GI
I truly hope very very bad things happen to Discord, but then again, with all the little tidbits you put here and there, he seems a bit.... resigned. I can't help but wonder if he's grooming Nav to kill/succeed him.
3064273 Nav is him, dumbass. He's just a partition of Discord's mind, developed from back when there were few races other than man.
2nd time around and I still hate his decision.