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I....I....I'm quite shocked by the whole sex change thing...... Nav never going to enjoy sex as a Mare is he?
I loving the ring of anti magic....Rarity freaked the fuck out when she found out that her biggest advantage over Nav is taken away....I wonder if Discords magic would be negated as well.
Oh yes props for the line “For your… discretion,” I commented. She tenderly reached a hoof out. Before she could blink there was a knife between the two coins, right in front of her hoof. “For your silence,”
Where did you get the inspiration for that? Because seriously...You...Win.
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Not this time, not like that. But... well, you can get used to anything. It's just that Nightmare Moon is fucking huge and female Navarone was a virgin. Sex for female virgins is painful, especially if you do as Luna did and go in relatively dry.
And it isn't that Rarity was sad about her advantage being gone, it was about the fact that he put something like that on her. She's a unicorn and that ring is the equivalent of removing her horn. The knowledge that he could do it to her at any time worries her, especially since she knows it gives him the ability to easily get revenge on her.
I don't remember where I got the inspiration from that line, but I know it's familiar. It's something along the lines of 'speak softly and carry a big stick.' Except in this case, it's use gold to bribe a maid and use a knife to threaten her in case the bribe doesn't hold.
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Well then.....I think....I'm sorry but this is really awkward....and it makes think I asking something rude but,,,,,,
I need a glorious new chap
You're leaking draconequus all over my human again... wait I'm quite sure they call it seepage.
Once more... Bravo, great chapter.
Dragon was cool and a Rarity with Navi interactions that doesn't end with either one of them angry at the other. It's also nice to know she really does care about him in her own manipulative way.
Now for the clop stuff, looks like Luna has no self control over herself and has no idea how to treat a virgin. That must have been horrible for Navi. He pretty much told her the root of his problem and I don't think she fully understood it. I wouldn't be surprised if Luna found a spell that made his human form more accommodating for future use so he won't have to change into a stallion every time.
Nav should just write "Foreplay 101 for ponies", "Pony sutra" or the "The art of Love". Which would lead to a big money inflow from the sales, everyone connecting Nav to him being some sort of fertility/sex god, followed by an economic collapse since all couples will be too busy re-discovering fun than go to work. Then probably a big baby boom. Makes perfect sense.
Reverse gender rape. Nav must have buried that experience really, really deep to not end up in a shower curled up and crying. The psychological damage by itself would make his personality different. Being a person of your word is not always a good quality. Especially when you end up getting abused and raped in the process. I am actually surprised that he did not consider suicide after that.
Wow... you know, I think that maybe this shit is getting into my head just a bit... that whole gender swap nightstallion moon thing didn't even phase me. Yeah, I think I'm officially fucked up in the head now. Thanksfor that dear author... oh, and creepy ghost ponies are cool too.
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You are very welcome. You'll know if you're truly a lost cause once you get to chapter forty-eight. That's when The Horror comes.
I do love the "Do you like bananas?" line. +376 internet points for you! lol
I just don't understand you people.. Just.. I don't..
I dont know what to say,
I would love to say that i didnt see that coming but that would be a lie,
Someone made a quote "i love it when nav and luna switched genders"
that coupled with "finds gender swapping stones" made it pretty damn obvious to whats going to happen
Interesting way you went about getting to it thought, i dont much like clop but thumbs up on the transitioning!
I raged for many chapters earlier on in this. I stopped after a while, there were still bullshit things and the characters were still way, way off what they should be at times, but I knew that complaining on something written this long ago on this story is a moot point. Honestly, I don't know if it's because you want him to willingly turn against the ponies if he is a separate personality of Discord, or other reasons. This is so... excessive at times, though.
Luna, when she was dominating... I don't think she remembered what happened when they had their first time. She was obviously in pain throughout. He told her to tell him to stop if she wanted him to and he was gentle the whole time. He comforted her afterwards. She did none of that. She was rough, inflicted pain and didn't really seem to get it or care when he tried to explain to her how fucked up he was and what what she did to him meant to him. I don't even know if she'd have gotten it even if the pain had made him cry (and that does happen, it can even be an involuntary response at times). She said that the ponies didn't consider forcing someone to have sex to be rape. I don't know if that was bullshit or not, but that's horrible if it is, and worse if it's not.
You know, I don't know if Luna and Celestia were reading his entries, or looking over his shoulder as he wrote them, nor if he writes all his entries while wearing his ring now. I don't know if there's going to be consequences for what she did this chapter. I don't know if there's going to be an escalation in the 'game' as he put it now that he knows about it. I don't know if Celestia or Luna actually do care or if they're just using him. But of all the entries so far, I think the last couple stand out the most for showing exactly how he feels and thinks, and if they do care, in any way, these are the ones that should have been seen. Luna especially. I don't know if any of these things come back to bite them, but I hope they do.
Personally, I would have had Nav say chapters ago that they've already made it impossible to ever love them, but that would make alot of a fair few chapters entirely moot.
This is the sort of story that gets to me, in all sorts of different ways. Earlier, it was the rape and betrayal by Pinkie and Rarity. Once that became a common theme, it was the fact that that actually was a common theme, and how off all of their personalities were, I still don't believe the corruption Discord spreads should have affected them so badly so quickly, if that is indeed the case and not just bad character portrayals. Even if it is, you could pass it off as the corruption, so it doesn't matter. Now, I don't know, I guess this story is just starting to depress me.
You know... The first time around when I read this chapter (the ghost pony portion) I wondered "What the actual fck?" and this time I'm still wondering what the fck did I just read... That letter to Twilight just makes things even more confusing too. Will any of this part ever be explained in the future?
Comedic censorship is best ship.
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I was going to do something with that, but then decided against it. I left it in there anyway as a reference to the small number of people that would get it. I also left it there because sometimes in real life, you do things that you don't understand. You see things that you wonder about, but are never explained. So why shouldn't stories be like that too?
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This is gonna bug me for the rest of my life :P
Im sorry to say I was dissapointed this chatper. That bullshit with him turning into a mare then the rape drama coming back, that shit doesn't float with me. There's no way ill stop reading but im am still pissed.
*sigh* im sorry the chapter was good but the whole him turning into a mare and getting fucked didn't sit well with me. I just don't want to read that again. When he was to scared to speak up, that scared me a bit.
i dont know if this is fucked up or not but i might actualy want to be in his place with the being turned into the other sex for a short time and fuck
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It's called being open-minded, you should try it sometime...
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here's a thought for you(dont know if its really anything but) it can turn somewhat invisible, what can sometimes cause invisiblity? heat,which can cause a... Shimmer
2942819 True, it would be interesting to try...
I just gave of the creepiest laugh you can ever imagine.
When he got to the factory, Sector 5 theme from FF7 started playing in my list:
Well that was a coincidence... A Good one actually, cuz that music fit the scene.
I have 2 theories on who that pony from the factory was.
1. Could have been, like many pople here seem to think, Sunset Shimmer.
2. What I actually more believe, since it would give the whole story a new twist, is that it might have been somepony from the future!
Eyupp! Timetravel gets involved! I luv timetravel!... Think about it. Some big mofo event will take place (the whole Discord intrigue) that someone from the future tries to prevent, because it had gone horribly wrong.
Now there are a few candidates I can think of, who could have done the journey back in time:
1. Future Twilight, though with her I don't have any context with the whole "is forgiven" thing.
2. Future Trixie, after realizing that Discord did betray her again or after noticing her errors and mistakes that lead to an aweful future, she goes back in time to prevent it all.
3. Future Blueblood, though he is one of my last choices, since he poses more of a bad guy through and through.
Or best choice actually:
4. FUTURE TAYA! Eyupp! After realizing when it's to late, dispite not hesitating to jump down the abyss, that she wanted to be Navarone's daughter, and choosing Discord was indeed NOT the right choice, she decides to make things straight. Besides, she seems to be the most "not so manipulated" of Discords bunch, since Discord told her, that she won't become the same as Trixie, hence she still has alot of her free will. Taya is also the candidate with the capebility to pull that "adcanced timetravel" spell off, since she is the most talented of all the unicorns so far, even amplified by Discord's magic.
Basically, this is what might have happened for all the mentioned possible travelers: They go back in time, meet with Celestia at somepoint in time, maybe a few weeks before/after the Prance part, doesn't matter tha much. They tell Celestia the whole thing or part of it to prevent disturbances in Time and Space. Celestia is shocked, reluctant to trust them, but considers nonetheless, so she sends them off to the Everfree Forest (or maybe they stay there by choice, to prevent detection) and waits for confirmation of the told "prophercies" to hold any value of truth.
After Blueblood disappears, an information that was already given to her by said future pony beforehead, her fears have been confirmed, and so Celestia writes the "All is forgiven letter" to the future Pony housing the factory. The letter may contain further instructions how to deal with the situation.
Indicators as to why this pony is indeed from the future:
1. The pony doesn't want to be seen by Nav, because they are obviously somepony he knows, else his reaction would simply be "who the fuck are you?". If they get seen by Nav, Discord would notice their identity and go full rampage mode, because some future pony is trying to mess with his plans.
2. Celestia doesn't want Nav to know who that pony is, obviously since hell would break lose afterwards and the whole Time‐space continuum ends up in a paradox or breaks.
3. When Celestia's mind was opened by Nav with the "Magic Key", she said that she was acting to ensure the safty of her ponies and to support her "further goals", which could have already been a hint for her future knowledge and a possible backup plan.
Aside from all that, why should Discord be the only one allowed to spin intrigues, without anyone knowing? I guess it's only fair if the Princess had some backup, even if the said backup is from the future.
Furthermore, Discord being cheated on with future knowledge by his companions and Celestia? Can you feel the Irony?
Men produced Discord, which means Discord can make mistakes. There is no perfect scheme here for him, as chaos is the opposite of perfection. Sorry Discord!
OH man! Ima getting a damn "doctor who and back to the future" gasm here!
EDIT:... There is another character I didn't think about at first, who could possibly be from the future and our mysterious factory pony. OOOOOOH DUDE! OOOOOOOOOOH LORD! THAT WOULD BE THE MOST FKING DAYUM SUPER ULTRA MEGA SUGAR OVERLORD DOCTOR WHO TWIST POSSIBLE! ... One tip character's name starts with N... and ends with e!... Muhahahah!
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Would you like to know the answer to who the pony in the factory was?
Yes, there's a definite answer. Until the author decides to excise this section completely, or decides to retcon it into someone else, I can answer your question with 100% confidence.
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nope I hate spoilers, It's the same as watching the end of a Doctor Who season, without watching the other episodes, so please refrain from telling.
Besides what I am doing here is making an excursion on my own, speculate and point out, since I don't know if the story has already reached a point this far that explains everything.
How would you feel, if you were to visit the first Star Wars movie for the first time ever and get told from someone behind you "Ach! Darth Vader is Luke's father anyway!"?...
Moreover, I write this stuff as suggestion for the author, or as a hint what he could do. It's up to him though if he takes it or not.
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Then you're going to be awfully disappointed when I finish the rewrite and this scene no longer exists.
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It's a character that, in it's current iteration, no longer exists within the story. It's part of 300+ pages of story that were deleted and written over. Story-wise, he would have abandoned the Galloping Gala to meet with Princess Celestia in order to finally confront the pony whose special talent was "turning invisible".
Story-wise, the divergence happens before they head off to Gryphus.
3412057 Darth Vader means Dark Father.
Brainfart moment?
3411760 How the flying fuck would Navarone actually time trave- 'Reads latest chapter' - That's a very valid point.
missed one
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Fixed.
didnt it say somewhere that navarone came across reginald's cave after the first three days in the forest?
if thats true, wouldn't the timeline state that he hasn't came across the cave with the ring, gender stones, and skeleton key yet?
or am i missing something?
I'm confused
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Oh god why!
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He introduced himself to the dragon as a treant and that was what the dragon was using up till this point. Not sure if this was intentional or just a slip
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Fixed.
Then, beginning of the next paragraph:
Did you remove the fact that the ring cancels his flight in the rewrite?
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Fixed. Though it's not like he couldn't just pull it off and put it back on without me saying so explicitly.
Shouldn't it just be forest?
M'kay. Navarone one turns into girl....pony, and Luna turns into Nightmare Moon.... Stallion.
Skip skip skip skip skip..... Next chapter!
This chapter passed my boundaries of wierd.
I was reading this during a class.
Celestia: 'Do you like bananas' I got so many looks from people around me.
Saw that and I was like static.grscty.com/uploads/monthly_03_2012/post-499983-13687324928575.jpg
Well in her defense some of us humans (not me) watch giant metal lumps on wheels drive around in circles.
I'm glad nav is mellowing out some. His angst and general dickness was getting annoying.