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Still love the story.
Constant logical decisions and a 'meh' attitude has me reading the hell out of this story, I think that it doesn't matter what happens, i will never stop reading it.
You made yourself a good story 'whatmustido' and I thank you for making it.
Dude, this chapter is ridiculously long.
Also Navi has the best/worst luck in Equestria. Egypt just brings out the best of his qualities.
Now I must wait for the new chapter! Huzzah!
I wouldn't be surprised if he were somehow the chosen one.
this chapter is three times as long and your usual long chapter its insane but not in a bad way.
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That's not even my longest chapter. Maybe I need to break them up some more.
And it might just be me, but I'm not entirely certain murdering someone and then torturing someone should be considered his 'best' qualities. Or maybe you meant his 'do whatever is necessary' kind of outlook.
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Nav stays pretty logical throughout most of the story. I did my best to have his emotions rather stunted, so he wouldn't be blinded by them. This does not always end well, especially among the very emotional ponies. There will soon be a point when you just want to reach into the screen and smack him upside the face for being a heartless bastard.
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Would it not be considered logical for him retain his emotions in the foreign land in order to protect his mind? Him being involved with the ponies and befriending them could be seen as making the best out of the worst situation. He had no real choice in dealing with the world and him accepting being under the rule of the ponies is survival instinct. Give him an alternative or testing him with something better is a good way to test his loyalties and his character.
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He still has emotions, of course. That said, he doesn't emote very often. Most of what he feels is kept inside and he doesn't often allow it to influence him. I've written over seven hundred and twenty five thousand words, about four or more years in Equestria, and to date the only thing he's done in anger is yell. I think he's hit a pony in anger one time.
Trust me when I say that Celestia has ensured his loyalty, at least for now. You'll understand more in a few chapters. But so far, he's been presented with two alternatives: Staying in Egypt, where he would be a hero, and staying with the naga, where he could likely be made a member of the clan. Staying with and 'befriending' the ponies was a survival mechanism, as you said. That he's willing to put up with so much is a good testament to his character. I mean, he's been put through a lot.
Heh, gotta say I really like this story, atleast from what i've read so far.
Heh, also caught that James Bond reference in there
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Glad you're liking it. There's plenty more to come, don't you worry.
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Orly? Who woulda thought?
... How many times do we see Kat/The Naga after this?
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this dam story is a masterpiece.
2282717 Way to go tiger! ata way to put it! couldnt have said it better myself.
I found an error. Ctrl + F and search "Don’t even bother asking me for permission."
That paragraph has starting quotes but no ending quotes.
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That's on purpose. When writing dialogue or text like this and one you have the same person talking throughout, you aren't supposed to end your quotation marks. You do, however, have to start them up again on the next paragraph. It's an uncommonly seen grammar rule.
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I didn't know that...now I look dumb...
Anyway, I LOVE the fic so far, And I HATE reading usually....this is a weird way for me to start reading fics....reading the biggest one I've ever heard of....
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What kind of bet was it that you would risk reading something this monstrous? What would the other guy have had to do? Also, nah, Nav doesn't become a pony that often. He absolutely hates that body, as would probably just about anyone that was forced into it. He'd probably kill himself if he had to become an alicorn for any length of time. With all the attention that a new alicorn would get, he would never have a moment's rest and would be forced to act like he belongs and is civilized. I know I would fucking hate it, at least.
>I could care less about it
So he does care?
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Ah yes one of my pet hates.
Incorrect turns of phrase.
Also high on my hate list:
Lightening.
I'm pretty sure brightening up the room isn't as effective as throwing, say, lightning at your opponent.
But that's just me.
Loving the story by the way. To the next chapter!
Have I told you yet how much I love this story? Cause I do. Very very much.
Started it a few days ago, and if it wasn't for trivial things like work and sleep, I'd be done by now.
Emerald script, green text, just noticed.
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I don't get it.
2800101she isn't really immortal.... He just says that so nobody targets her.... He has said he can kill her and they have needed to talk about protecting her... She isn't immortal... I like that about this story!
Nav is snapping his fingers alot lately, I can imagen that in some later chapter, something will actually happen when he does that, even though on accident probably
For example, he becomes very thirsty and takes a bottle out of his backpack. He realizes it's empty and thinks: "Crap... forgot to refill it with water" and snaps his fingers at that thought. Then suddenly a bucket appears over his head, falls down and he ends up being soaked with water. The scene ends with him thinking: "...WHAT DA FUCK DID JUST HAPPEN?!".
It would be even funnier if he had bystanders in that situation, like Twily, Dashie or Spike, all with an expression of shock and confusion in their faces.
It should happen randomly though, you know like he has no control over it. So when he tries to snap summon something on purpose, it won't work.
2800101 4Chan.
3272878 I would kill for this, it's just epic, imagine this "Fuck, i'm out of bolts" I snapped my fingers cursing my luck and seemingly out of nowhere my crossbow was loaded again. I decided it was best for my sanity to blame it on Pinkie and ignore that it ever happened.
2567454 This is SO happening, everything Nav hates always happens to him.
3450709 I can just see it playing out like in Bruce Almighty when he realized he just stepped on the puddle of water instead of in it.
YES!
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I thought it was a courage the cowardly dog reference.
Hell? Isn't Hell something from well, earth? Like... It comes from religion?
Why not
I feel like I know of another land where cat-people are the natives in that world's Egypt. Does anyone remember where I'm remembering this from?
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I'd say the elder scrolls universe but their geography is completely different.... Damned Khajiit.
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You've turned Nav into a character that I hate, but you waited untill I was too invested in the story to quit to do it.....Brovo sir, well done.
Well I'm just two chapters away from liking, adding this story to my favorite, and following you as an author. But if it isn't to much of an idiotic question what is the romance tag for, will there ever be a pairing? You don't have to answer i'm just really confused atm. Still this story is Awesome
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There is one, but it doesn't last very long. The tag is more for undertones that come much later.
In the original the chosen was supposed to.be female, correct? I can't remember... Been a good year.
3450714 I sure as hell hope so.
Oh god. She sent Both of them there to be killed? I love this Princess.
While the Egyption parts seem to be the furthest away from cannon the story seems to really come alive throughout his adventures there. Glad I persevered through as Nav and the story do seem to get better as time passes. Props!
3876278 hate? I just don't like mercs but I live sarcasm and the liberal application of fire and explosives.
Knives in the Day
Either or, with a bit mixed in
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That's a southernism. A lot of people have called it wrong.
Ummm if their money is based off of salt then I think I could destroy their economy with evaporation. Oceans man, oceans. Get a jar of saltwater leave it in the sun, boom insta-cash.
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Just wanted to make sure you got this.
I suppose you had someone see me coming and came up using a shortcut to take the place of a sentry, so you could judge my mettle before I arrived in any dangerous position, where I might could hurt your people.”
Might or could should be deleted, I believe.
Do ponies snort the salt
5694976 Nah, they just lick it.
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She does a few unwise things that strains their relationship.