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Very cute story! I like how you were able to develop each pony's character in such a short amount of time. You're a very descriptive writer, too. It was easy to ”see” the story take place in my head. There were a few grammatical errors and typos, though: swapping their and they're and other similar words, misuse of commas and quotation marks, and once or twice the present tense wording felt off. But despite that, I didn't want this story to end! Both ponies were very interesting to read about, and I'd love to learn and read more about Whisper Wind.

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Hes names Wind Whisper, but given how i only said that in the fic once i don't blame you for getting it wrong.

I like these characters alot, there my first oc's and they have personalities i really liked to toy with. I've decided i'd like to do a sequal, but i've got 2 other stories in the works that I plan or releasing first. I'm not one to do shameless plugs, but if your interested in seeing what i have in store for them give my page a watch, it'll be here eventually.

>>11120041112004 Your story (aside from a few minor details) is perfect as it is. I wish you the very best of luck with it!

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Thank you, i assume by minor details you mean spelling as I am mankinds worst speller, but if theres something else i'd love to hear your comments

>>11121481112148 Comments are truly the lifeblood of every story I'm too busy to properly review it (it's 2.20 AM here) but I will try in the morning. My advice? Join a group, find yourself a good editor and come at it again. You have the imaginative spark, you just need to portray it clearly Best of luck mate, and message me if you have questions!

It is nice and warm story.

Thanks for sharing it with us.

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your welcome.