>>11104021110402 Doing it in another language is still against the rules.

YAY MORE SPARK STORM!!

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Hey, thanks for the comment and review! Be sure to read the stories before this if you haven't already :3

EDIT:

I certainly hope some people understand the concept of 'sequel'. Please don't read and review this story if you haven't read through my previous stories, guys. Read the description.

>>11109561110956 I'll have a look through, and offer my own opinion for you!

Edit: That was beautiful! It even made me 'D'awwwww', and that is a damn rare occurrence because I am a cynical bastard. This may not be everyone's cuppa tea, but it is certainly a good read. Grammatically clean, aside from a few cases of colon/semi-colon over usage.  Definitely no major grammatical problems here! You should be proud! Easily gets a thumb from me, and plenty of my feels. Well done!

>>11121241112124 Ahah...Thanks. I had my doubts. And I'd appreciate more feedback :D

Edit: Thank you! I hope it merits a read of my earlier stories, which are much less refined than this story! <3

>>11121501112150 I will have a look in a moment good sir, but I am trying to reassure every other author that was given this appalling advice that there isn't anything to worry about. If you need any help or advice, either mail me or join my group I'll try and help you as much as possible!

>>11121771112177

:D Sweet.

Talk about damage control. Why would anyone do that to so many aspiring writers?

Love it so far

Why mechafone, you have outdone yourself, my good sir. :D

The third arc started right off the second, and that gave a real sense of continuity instead of the usual "X Y later" stuff.

I'm looking forward to see this arc develop. :)

And if you need any help, any help at all, be it proof reading or inspiration (but not drawing) I'd be happy to offer my services to you. :)

Looking forward to another arc. :D

>>11149951114995 Why thank you, good sir ^__^ I'll keep your offer in mind.

Woo, new Spark Storm story! Instant like and fav. I finished reading Raison last night and am excited for this. It was very shocking! Totally didn't expect that ending to that arc. Talk about being blindsided! And now, on to this one! :D

>>11190021119002 Huzzah! Thanks for sticking with me through this.

New chapter tonight, comin' soon :3

>>11190151119015

Woot!

In the words of Good ol' Jim Ross...Business....is about to pick up!

>>11470161147016 Indeed! I'm not totally sure what I'm going to do with Ampelus. These next few chapters will either reveal her as a great ally, or a great enemy :3

>>11470981147098

Or a great tentacle rapist!

I think Sparky needs a rough-and-tumble Stallion friend who he is totally clueless about being gay until the guy kisses him. But I'm horrible like that. >_> What's one more thing to complicate Sparky's lovelife after all? :x

>>11534821153482

Bwahahah. No worries, complications abound in the future concerning Russet. He wasn't in the original plans, but making things up on the spot is my speciality, and Russet's gonna have an important role in the story, even if it is just to complicate matters :3

>>11536551153655

Bwahahaha.  :D

Oh jeez, she's in trouble!

Bahaha!! Rainbow's all too famous crash landing can make for great laughter material.

So, Spark and Chrome finally meet for the first time since so long ago, Chrome has a natural reaction to Sohl, and Lemon left the Fighters. I'm surprised you didn't give much of an introduction between Orea and Chrome... i feel that that could have produced several different results, all of them worth reading.

>>11710821171082

D: Yeah, I've been letting myself slip. There's so many characters to write in a single chapter, I might go back and rewrite a few chapters, make them bigger, change some things, and my new chapters might be coming out later with college and stuff coming around. However, they will be longer, with more content, and more substance. That's how it should be, anyway.

I always did wonder what happened to her. But, considering just how she is, i'm not sure if she's an ally, enemy, or what. One thing for sure though, there'll be a lot less ponies in the population count if she isn't dealt with soon. And, considering the fact that the action and suspense is always what hooks me for stories, i wouldn't really care whether she's ally or opponent. My action protection goggles are fine tuned, and ready for action! (P.S. Your accepting OC's? )

>>11712031171203 Ampelus, friend or foe? I'd have to say that she may end up being both :D

And yes a thousand times yes, I am -always- accepting OC's

I feel sad for Reflex. Of all the ponies who could've had the foul luck the was cast upon him, it was him. poor guy. And at last! ACTION!

>>11712181171218 Well then, first of all, i understand the entire school thing. after all, i'm only in 8th grade and find myself loaded with work. And as for the OC's... WHERE DO I SIGN UP!? I always have OC's that can fit in with the story! And after my experience with the deviant art pony maker and a run through with paint, theres no telling what the appearance'll be!

>>11716611171661

Ah so you've been to DA? That makes things easier if you have an account. Just send your OC and ideas to me there by note and we'll talk business :3

http://amarriedmegaphone.deviantart.com/

>>11719021171902 Well... I don't necasarily have an account... I just go to the pony creator there. But i can try figuring out how to make an account after school. :)

>>11741831174183 Oh, lol. Well if you don't want to bother with that, then send me your notes here. It's just I'm almost always on deviantart and I only check out stuff here a couple times a day. Whatever is best for you, here or deviantart ^_^

Chapter 8 is a nice one. Also... how do i get a pic from my computer to you? (No doubt a minute after my asking you i'll find out, but still, how?)

>>11763471176347 Photobucket is a nice way to do things, but if you don't have one of those already, you can simply e-mail it to me via attachment. You can contact me a m3chafone@hotmail.com.

>>11763681176368 Well, the OC has been sent! (Please inform me if you didn't get it, i don't want to end up finding out i sent an email to a comlete stranger FROM the stranger. (Oh god, i can't even BEGIN to imagine THAT! ) Suddenly i'm thinking i should've cropped it. )

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I got him! He sounds like a very interesting character, and his power could actually lend itself to him being a prominent character. I don't think I've seen a character in any stories that utilizes the abilities that he does.

>>11767061176706 And that right there is my biggest flaw, repeating the same word over and over again in the same paragraph ie. character character character ><

>>11767061176706 Really? That's interesting. Suddenly i'm wondering what his cutie mark would be.

>>11767171176717 I suddenly remembered Kitty from the X-Men. Thank you nerd life for amazing thoughts!

>>11767171176717 Perhaps a half a transparent pony to illustrate that he can phase through things? Just an idea ¯\(°_o)/¯  

>>11767941176794 Suddenly I realized i never specified whether or not his talent was connected to his magic, and it isn't! Sorry if there was confusion bout it!

>>11770841177084 I'm not so sure you gave him a name, either :D

>>11770951177095 That's one thing that i honestly SUUUUCK at. I can try thinking of a name over the next couple days though. (Just watch i'll end up thinking of one ten minutes later. )

It seems to me, like Anorax had a vision. Is this normal for halflings, or is it just a him thing? And if Discord's their... 'boss(?)', then how's he communicate with them? As for the rest, i have to agree with Lotus, cause i was looking forward to a fight. Oh well! It's still a great chapter!

>>11946421194642 Anorax is connected to the Changelings, something that he's very dimly aware of. It doesn't really affect him unless it's something big, like with what happened in this chapter. As for how Discord is even able to speak to his minions in the physical realm, well..that's a secret for now, but it will be revealed later ^_~

And thanks :D

" The next few hours were a blur. After casting an glamour spell to disguise themselves as a pegasus and a unicorn, the two escaped prisoners traveled to the city of the Golden Lord, "

should say "a"

>>11976571197657 D: Darn grammatical mistakes. *goes to fix*

I've got to wonder just what Chrysalis was thinking when she sent changlings with Fire Lotus. I can understand if she had them a distance away, but too close then, like Lotus said, they'll be realized. meh, i always have trouble understanding things like that.

>>12127181212718 Mostly just plotholes that I dig for myself XD

I feel amazing right now! Great chapter for several reasons my friend! for SEVERAL reasons! YAY!! I cannot tell you how excited i am right now! And i like how you had his first appearance in the middle of an argument between the siblings over his activities! if you want me to delete this comment then let me know. I'm just so EXCITED! THANK YOU!

>>12381731238173 lol no worries, no need to delete this comment! I'm glad I was able to make you feel this way :3 He'll have much more screen time as I figure out his role in all this ^_^

>>12381881238188 Now that the excitement high has mostly left, i can go more into detail about this chapter. a couple things that are honestly bugging me now that it's gone is the spelling in the final piece. "she shouted, thought she was standing not five feet from the big work pony."  I believe you meant 'though' and not 'thought'. Aside from that... honestly all i can remember is the final part! I apolagize, i was just so excited to see one of my OC's made by me get featured in a story. I'll reread the story and edit the comment, so i can give my thoughts on the rest of it.

Edit: Ok, 1st of all, I have no idea what the first couple of parts are like, so i'll just stay with the comment of them being rather... dramatical. 2nd, it's just not right what Bon Bon's been doing to Lyra. my closest thought of what it's like to be in Lyra's position is honestly reminding me of the darkness in my past, and Bon Bon's... I just don't understand that. Guess it's cause i've never really had a girlfriend. 3rd, Derpy and Dinky. What in the world has Derpy been teaching her?! is that normal? although i think it's adorable how one (?) they are, it's creepy that Dinky knows that Derpy wanted her to use that gesture! All honesty, like i said, it's a great chapter, but i personally don't know what half of the positions are like.

>>12384161238416 Hah, I noticed that on deviantart. I'll have to change that on fanfiction, too >.<

>>12384161238416

What's going on with Bon Bon is a bit of a stretch, but some people are actually like that, Don't worry, Bon Bon'll see the error of her ways before long.

As for Ditzy and Dinky, that was just for laughs, and doesn't necessarily represent how the relationship between mother and daughter always works :P

I must say, living in a cave was a very nice touch. And his resistance to her power, even stronger then I imagined! and as for his choice, i sense that things will get real either way.

>>12602111260211 Do you like what I've done? It's a little late go back, but I wanted things to get about as complicated as possible. Things are about to get very interesting, indeed, and I've got big plans for so many different characters, I'm gonna have to keep writing big chapters like this one just to get through them all @_@

>>12603041260304 Well then, i wish you luck. This is no doubt a challenge, but how can one get better if not through challenges?

i foresee a shitstorm involving Choco Swirl and Spark Storm

Sounds like a fight will be coming soon, and i'd love to see how these changlings fight. They're descriptions alone make them sound like a fairly dangerous group. It shall be interesting to see how this plays out.

The coming battle... is sure to be interesting...

Bravo! A great battle between two powerful beings all woven by a master engineer of words (a.k.a. you).

:D Thank you! The next battle, however, is going to be much, much bigger :3

And the plot just keeps getting better and better and better. :D

Keep up the good work, MechaFone!

:D :D Thanks! I'm-a workin' on it :3

It seems to me like Shadow isn't happy about letting Shimmering go. Course... I guess anyone would be pissed at being controlled to the extent of being used as a weapon, especially when it puts innocent lives on the line.

Edit: Hold up a minute! Emerald Skies stepped forth, a fascinated look in his eyes. "Begging pardon, but did you say 'alicorns' - as in plural? Are you saying that you've met more than just Princess Celestia and Shimmering Oasis?" Wasn't Emerald with them when they did the entire mission to what's it called?! Or am i thinking of someone else who was the translationist? I's confused.

>>17953401795340 You're not wrong, actually. Shimmering Oasis and her father make up all the other alicorns that Emerald knows of. I just didn't think of adding the Golden Lord >.<

I can't wait to see the outcome of the final battle. (Will Turbid and the others escape before they run out of air? Will Shadow Heart and/or Fire Lotus get revenge on Shimmering Oasis? Will Shimmering Oasis escape? Just how much trouble are Lyra and Chrome in? Find out next time in Legends of Ponyville:(Insert name here)!)

Merry Christmas my friend. Merry Christmas.

I think she may be forgetting the fact that if Spark Storm escaped, then inevitably there's others that escaped as well.

>>18566381856638 Merry Christmas!

The fact is, the only one she really cared about destroying was Spark Storm. Stay tuned for the next chapter, as we find out the next step for Shadow Heart and the others :D

can't wait for next story

"That's it, I'm adding a safety net." s for Rainbow's crash!

I feel sorry for Lemmon, Nopony should have to suffer this kind of pain.

>>11712031171203 He'll be using my OC eventually. He and I are getting together to expand Spark's universe.

Soul Of Songs, it's getting good! Not that it hasn't been good up to this point. Can't wait to read more!

Soul Of Songs, Ampelus is twisted! This is crazy.

>>21666412166641 Heh. You'll learn to like her X3

>>21666632166663 I never said I disliiked her, I just think she's crazy.

I think we all knew Sapphire couldn't stay mad for long, and Lemon can't resist being... well... Lemon.

I'm still ticked off about Oasis. Why did she have to be evil?!

>>21676492167649 :D :D This will in time be answered.

Soul Of Songs, that Fire Lotus is one vissious pony... I like it.

That 'I've got my eyes on you' from Dinky was just to adorable mech. I loved it.

I'm very upset that Oasis is a villain, but this chapter was verry good.

Soul Of Songs, Laser's ij trouble and I feel sorry for Russet.

Soul Of Songs, I feel sorry for Russet. And that lightning blue changeling, (to many weird names to remember) she seems more like one I will like.

NO!!! Not Petunia's mother!!!

>>24878742487874>>24878742487874 X3 Heheh, hang on to your hat, 'cause this is gonna be a wild one.

I am deeply upset with Oasis.

I am severely POd about Oasis... WHY DOES SHE HAVE TO BE THE BAD GIRL?!!!

>>25152292515229You are soooo close to discovering why :D

WHY, OH WHY DOES IT HAVE TO BE LIKE THIS?!!! Sohl's leaving them without a word and Spark's little girl is heartbroken... sniff...

Soul Of Songs,it's payback time!

DAYUM man!

OOUUUCH!!! Madalah will grow new wings, right? I may be a changeling freak, but something like this never crossed my mind. At least tell me she can still turn to an effective pegasus...

>>25982782598278 In my mind, no. Changeling wings remind me most of cicadas, and if those things are ripped off, they're not growing back. Growing artificial wings I haven't really given thought to, but for now, Madalah is grounded.