... what!?

This is...quite...interesting. I can't wait to read the rest. :D

I don't like pokemon BUT YOU MADE ME LOVE IT!!!

MOAR! AND FIRST COMMENT!! YAY ME!!!

THE BEST!!!!

Hey Deltashock16. Can you combine these names? Fluttershy + Ash=

YOU JUST MADE MY DAY!!!

MOAR!!!! MOAR!!!! I CAN BARELY HOLD THE PINKIES MAN!!!!

>>7047970479 what's up? a little confusing?

i have a feeling that the....wait how did ash use aura sphere? and wouldnt his cutie mark be a pokeball?

>>7064070640 well Ash did because

1) Ash had retained a lot of things from his own dimension, such as his memories and Pokemon. And if I do remember correctly, Ash could harness the power of Aura, so it passed on into his new body. Therefore, it was triggered while he was attempting to protect someone he wanted to help, and...well you saw how that went down. I believe Ash would have used Aura Sphere in the same manner he would've as a Pokemon in his old dimension would, but  since he was a human there, he found it nigh impossible to use the ability. But when he came to Equestria, I assume some of his Aura powers were released and activated by whoever brought him there.

and 2) I had already put this story first on Fanfiction.net and I had a poll there. Aura Sphere won by quite a lot, in fact. I was surprised.

Hope that answered your question!

>>7063670636

No it's just... I'm not a fan of crossovers.

I'm sorry that I've taken your time. But I don't think I'll read this. But don't mind my idiotic comment and keep writing!

very good, I can barely wait for more

BRILLANT! JUST BRILLIANT!

This is rather ridiculously written. Quite a questionable story.

>>7112771127 how so?

You might uh, want to fix Ash being 6 Feet tall dude... I mean... that's 1.83 meters high... for a 13 year old?

oh god. equestria doomed, Trollestia has a friend

Paul's Electabuzz evolved before the Sinnoh League; if he ended up battling Ash at the Kanto league he would have had an Electivire. Also, you didn't say anything about Ash's journey through Unova; I know it hasn't ended yet and we don't know how it will end, but you should still acknowledge that it had happened by this point.

Oh dear, Trollestiarceus shipping. We're all gonna die!

Amazing, simple perfect, i have to say you have peeked my intrest, hope theres more.

-WW

>>121789121789

Sorry, I won't be acknowledging anything about Unova, I'm only sticking through Sinnoh.

But thanks for the Electivire point-out, I'll fix that!

>>7110871108

Well how so?

Ashy? I dont know but so far im enjoying the story!

Oh Ash your so...pony should pony pony? Idk wtf I just meant by that but pretty good im continuing on to 6! Btw that party cannon bit is awesome

Been waiting for a reason to use this:

Image: http://4chanarchive.org/images/vp/3663946/1292183489469.jpg

>>137007137007

Damn straight.

moar please

>>7113371133

Just... everything. The setting, plot. It's just kinda... weird. I'm just not sure what to nitpick.

>>211740211740

Well you are entitled to your own opinion, and I respect that.

>>211902211902

I think it's mostly the dang love interest you're trying to force out. And yes, it feels forced out. Ash is the most clueless person ever when it comes to women, and he notices a pony, a species he has magically become and has little idea about, over four girls?

You do see the problem with this, right?

amzing

amzing

write more maybe you can have ash met Zorca

write more maybe you can have ash met Zorca

Once again, sorry for the randomness. It may happen occasionally in this story, since I'm insane and all

Hope you enjoy!

Ahhhh!The Sexual Inuendos!

When I read the part where Fluttershy invited Ash upstairs I was like:

then at the end I was like:

OMG HAX!! Ponyta can't use  sing!

>>105747105747

Thirteen?

Read the intro again, please.

>>246669246669 Hmm, seems like it was changed since I posted my reply 7 weeks ago. Either that or I misread that. Does it really matter?

I'm loving this fanfiction right now

I wish the chapters would come a bit quicker, but I completely understand how hard it is to write so much just after you did it before.

None the less, keep up the good work!

>>246733246733

No I changed that, it did seen kind of unreasonable to have a six foot tall 13 year old

Although I have seen some pretty tall people around....

>>7058870588

flutterash

Damn, Fluttershy got friendzone.

Sad.

Image: http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/212/3/6/origin_story__fluttershy_pg__1_by_dreatos-d427j7f.png

Image: http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/214/0/2/origin_story__fluttershy_pg__2_by_dreatos-d42sigq.png

Image: http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2011/215/d/9/origin_story__fluttershy_pg__3_by_dreatos-d44b4h2.png

...........

FRIENDZONED!

>>333217333217

Wow. I don't have any words for it.

Wow. This is great. Why did I not find it when i serched Pokémon?

Very good. And I'm suprised that I got suprised by what Fluttershy did at the end.

Yep. Pikachu loves his ketchup.

Wow. Did he learn to canalise his aura so to form a Aura Sphere from 'Pokémon the movie 8: Lucario and the mystery of Mew'?

I know that Ash's aura was similar to that Lucario and Riulo.

The Aura Sphere mark. He is a gardian of the aura.

I can never forgot that hat.

The bigest type of alcohol I have drinked is only light cider. The kind that can be buyd in food shops. I don't know how strong they are but it is realy low alcohol level. And I drink that extreemly rarely. maybe 3 times a year.

Le friendzone. It's a harsh mistress.

Pinkie eating a pillow? AHAHAHAHHAHAAAHAHHA! Priceless. I can literaly see it before me.

I will never understand Pinkie Pie or her 4th wall breaking. She is the most random entity after the Internet itself.

Charmander on a diet of jalapeno peppers. I wuld more think of Tomato Berrys. Thos Pokémon berrys is realy spice. You literaly spit fire whit them. Trust me. I have seen there status un serebii.net and in the show. They are strong.

Yep as i thut. A video game. What else wuld it have been. And I understand he don't think about it much. He has traveled whit his friends and Pokémon sice he was 10.

>>340679340679

True that brony... True that

Yeah, that awkward moment when your friend tries to eat you

Happens to everyone

And everypony

What show is How I Met Your Mother? Is it a american cartoon?

So Fluttershy is a gamer? Nice. I hope they have a computer so she can play RuneScape. She wuld be perfect for the Summoning and Herblore skills.

Making dresses for applebucking? A perfect glass wall lie. Humoristic and clasic in style. Good work.

I'm still waiting for Arceus to use its 'Judgement' attack.

I don't understand what you have intended in most of this chapter.

>>345940345940

Well first, Arceus isn't going to attack Celestia that badly. They're like bros (in Arceus' mind at least).

Also, I intended for that chapter to be a lead in to the events I have planned next. But if you're talking about the chapter itself, well I intended to put some slightly inappropriate humor into a normally conserved pony, which is highly amusing (to me at least)

I doubt that helped, but I can hope it did!

>>338753338753

lol good pic! I was inspired by this one:

Image: http://img.ponibooru.org/_images/8f9cc213b6d93e7309a7a626b699f3d8/21891%20-%20artist%3Asmockhobbes%20command_and_conquer%20crossover%20dexterous_hooves%20drive_me_closer%20parody%20tank%20training_ground%20twilight_sparkle%20warhammer_40k.jpg

>>333217333217

Didn't think I'd say this on my own story, but have all my Internets.

That is an epic pic to describe a backstory I hadn't even described.

>>348288348288

Image: http://chzbronies.files.wordpress.com/2011/08/my-little-pony-friendship-is-magic-brony-like-a-boss.jpg

>>348325348325

I don't understand.

>>349062349062 I think Discord said it best when he said:

Image: http://th07.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2011/326/6/5/malevolent__by_aerosocks-d4gz2yl.jpg

                                'Also are you seeing this from a chapter comment section thingy or whole story comment section thingy kimdan6_creature_homie?'

                                                                I really don't know how the comment's reply system work on this site...

>>349110349110

Story comment. And when I get so many comments in a row it is chapter.

And he is right about that it is not fun when exactly everything makes scense. But it is not fun when nothing makes scense. It can be frustrating but also a bit to wierd. He makes it more a bit to the 'to wierd and irritating way'.

I will read this once i fell like it. I've done a LOT of reading today, this week actually. I just need a break from it. I'll probably jump on it tomorrow or later tonight.

Thanks to TheFanficStealer for editing this chapter! Go team!

I would totally link you to his profile if I knew how to make a hyperlink.

ALL MY YES!

it took you 2 months to update, but I can't wait for the next chapter, (possible war for ash's affections between misty and fluttershy?p[unless you're going with a universe in which misty doesn't love Ash])

The next chapter better be more epic than this one. Just saying because I am expecting big things come next chapter.

ALL OF THE YESSES. ALL OF THEM.

Also: How are Brock and Misty gonna deal with all of... -gestures to everything- this?

And how will they convince Ash that they are, you know, Brock and Misty?

AND WHERE DID TEAM ROCKET WENTEDEDED?

And why am I starting all my sentences with "and"? I mean, that's kinda improper grammar...

I'm a bit peeved with how you made Ash see Paul. Why? Because in the Lily of the Valley conference, they no longer hated each other; for one, after his defeat, Paul has begun to respect Ash as a great trainer.

Anyways, nice fic.

Format problem! Right after the 20% cooler, everything was in bold. Please fix it.

Shouldn't she have introduced herself as Twilight Sparkle?

How does Twilight not know what Casanova means? She practically said that in the first episode!

The line, so to speak, was "Focus, Casanova." to Spike, who was still infatuated with Rarity.

Is there a TwiMac pairing I see here? I don't really like the FaunabondShipping (my term for Ash x Fluttershy pair). Then again, for some reason, perhaps because of my OC, I don't have a preference for any Fluttershy pairing (perhaps outside of Les Yays).

Also, why are Celestia and Arceus OOC (and I barely say this at all in stories I'm liking)? Is it because they're in a dream world where they can be anything they want to be?

Uhh,,, Berry Punch's CM are a strawberry and a bunch of grapes.

So Ash doesn't miss May as much?

...Damn, I'm losing interest. I'm stopping here.

>>620072620072

I never said Twilight didn't know what Casanova meant. If you recall, and I haven't changed anything, it goes:

“I didn’t hear you say you didn’t like her…” said Twilight, a smile on her face. One Ash dearly wished would disappear. Then he remembered.

“Hey, Twilight!”

“Yeah Casanova?”

“Who?”

Ash is the one who doesn't know who Casanova is...

Yes, there is a TwiMac shipping, but I feel like you won't be around to read when I get to it.

They're OOC because when they're not in the environment they usually are (Hall of Legendaries/Royal Court) and have to be uptight and such. When they have the chance, they "let their hair down" in terms of behavior, specifically when in the Dream Region or communicating with one another.

>>620103620103

Well, speaking in the technical sense, I was correct in just saying berries, because both grapes and strawberries are berries. But for the sake of specificity, I changed it.

Also, WHY DO YOU CATCH EVERYTHING!?

>>620621620621

Oops, my bad on the Casanova.

Okay, that's understandable on the dream region.

>>620641620641

Catch everything? Whatever do you mean? …Maybe I'll get interested again.

Huh, I thought this fic was dead. Well, I guess I eagerly await a new chapter. B

ERMAHGERD ERN URPDATE!

Seriously though, I should be better at this updating stuff. At least it was only a month this time...

YOU GOT A CUTIE MARK!

Now all we need is one Chugga A. Conroy.

I imagine a "holy shit wtf" moment is approaching fast.'

...Ash's head will 'spolde.

NInetales!

  ^

'I' is capitalised, and should not be.

>>934910934910

Keen eye. Thanks for that!

>>934727934727

A holy shit wtf moment indeed.

Rereading the story so that I can know everything up to the new chapter...

“Wait, what am I doing here thinking about the tournament? There’s food!”

...

"Wait, why am I bothering to think about backstory? There's food!"

...

"Wait, why am I inspecting this plot device? There's food!"

Is that "million postcards" thing an exaggeration or an estimate?...

“Nor have I. This would make a great story! Dibs!

One, you forgot a quotation mark at the end of this line.

Two, are you Princess Celestia?

I just realized that two or three chapters later, love triangle.

Hm. Your second chapter became very sporadic, if I'm thinking of the right word. It went from pretty decent writing and coherency, to pretty random. Not trying to be mean, but I'm just stating something I noticed. Oh well, giving it more of a chance and reading on.