Before reading: Sounds like a bad clopfic title...

After reading: Awww....

- Your Changeling ambassador, Viper

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"Did you know pears are actually oyster mucus?"

I believe you meant pearls.

Overall I enjoyed the story, a nice slice of life.

Damn, not a clopfic. But i'll go on and read.

this is actually the first time I liked Silver Spoon, this was just, brilliant! Please please continue this it'll even make Big Macintosh and Silver Spoon happy Eeyup!

Because video link! For no reason!

Cute, but also kind of a bummer. Anyway, great job!

I actually liked this! Couple of grammar and spell errors, but still readable. Would there be any more? I hope this isn't a one shot!

Its quite sweet really. Good use of the scenery too!

*hopes for more chapters*

Alright, let me point out a fault that glared at me througout my reading; is the Fillydelphia Aquariam or the Canterlot Aquariam?  You should go back and fix that mention of Fillydelphia.  To be honest, besides some grammer mistakes and other commonly made issues, this was beautiful.

Trust me when I say that it's hard to write a piece about a character doing something out-of-character while remaining in character the whole time.  It worked wonderfully here.  I can see the effort you put into maintaining Silver Spoon's personality whilst also throwing in the bits that are new to the reader.  In that, you have done a wonderful job.

I wish the ponies of this site would write more things like this.  It is honestly more pleacing to the mind to read something this innocent and truthful story than some messy and disturbing clop-fic.  So, I praise you for that.

In my opinion, you shouldn't continue this.  It has gone as far as it can go.  The only direction left is for her to come to terms with the unrequited love or in some way become friendly with CMC.  There is the route of actually having Big Mac love her back, but that would be both OOC and disturbing.  I, however, think you should continue this idea in another story.  Rather than rap everything up in one go, you can prolong the torture of her nervousness to tell Big Mac of her feelings.  That would also allow you the proper time to truly sell us your version of Silver Spoon.

Do let me know if you take my request and go with it.  Furthermore, I'd be willing to offer my assistance should you be looking for an editor or pre-reader for said story, or any story to be honest.

For your successes with this fic, I offer you the grandest prize I can; a fine dragon with a mustache

Yo, this ain't finished. There's still a little more story to tell I think.

Especially since it's a very sweet story. C'mon, we know you wanna'.

Silver Spoon: Big Macintosh, your cutie mark is soooo big...

Big Mac: Eeyup- I mean, nope, I mean, uh, it's an apple.

lksdnfiwehfiuh your spams are bad and you should feel bad

LOL, This could easily become a series called:  Foals are A**holes. Let's face it, kids at their worse are vindictive, spiteful and nasty to each other.

lol bitch got what she diserved

>>11083981108398

If you want clopfics with foals, look up Your Antagonist (in fact, he's two posts down from your own). He's a perverted and disturbing monster that disgusts me on every level. And I'm not saying this because he's not actually a really good friend of mind and we just love to mess with each other. Nosiree... where are people getting these new pony-emoticons and why isn't their a Liarjack one for this occasion?

>>11084701108470

YOU DISGUST ME!

>>11085251108525

This is a one-shot. I came up with this random pairing while chatting it up with a certain antagonistic individual and wanted to explore it further. The only thing more to add would be Silver Spoon's coping.

>>11086521108652

Thanks for the the heads up. Corrected! As I mentioned earlier, this is a one-shot and not meant to be a long story so it's not really going anywhere (I told myself if there's enough demand I'll write an epilogue that gave it more of a sense of closure, but it will not have Silver Spoon becoming friendly with the CMC or her feelings being reciprocated). Perhaps it would be interesting to do an ongoing story with unrequited love as the major theme, but my hands are full with writing my two concurrent ongoing series Life on the Frontier and Tales of Harmony. I just need to write a one-shot every now and then to get a little more perspective into writing as a whole, so thanks for the feedback! Hopefully it will make my other stuff better.

If you care to pre-read for a story about Carrot Top moving to Appleloosa, falling head over hooves for Braeburn, and competing for him with Little Strongheart while learning life lessons and what it means to grasp happiness then lookup my series Life on the Frontier.

If you care to pre-read for a story where I take the first two episodes of MLP, a ton of fanon and canon, inject it with all my favorite JRPG tropes and cliches, put in gratuitous attack name calling, and try to draw my own cruddy art while staying true to the theme that friendship is magic, then lookup my series Tales of Harmony.

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The CMC only treat Silver Spoon as well as she treats them.

And now to go play more Persona 4 Arena so I can delay my writing projects even further!

Nice story but I'm missing some kind of moral.

You know, like Cheerilee noticing that Silver Spoon is bullied by the CMC and giving them a lecture. Even if she is a bully herself, it is quite mean to tease somebody with his or her feelings, especially with unrequited love.

A passable story, but one that sadly gives the impression of ending with everything still 'up in the air', which I personally don't particularly care for. Still, mostly well written bar a few typos and such.

I thought it was funny!

nice story

Kind of surprised Big Mac didn't discourage his sister from being a bitch. But children are awful, after all. Perhaps he tried and failed.

Adorable little story.

Applebloom will probably get hers down the line, though; that's how revenge is, it twists and turns and eats its own tail!

Well...that was kind of sad. I feel bad for Silver Spoon. And it could work...A few years down the line. When she's older. I mean, you don't have to be around the same age. My moms five years older than my dad.

That was pretty good so far. That whole first crush thing is always adorable

Uh...This really isn't much of a fic. it's a cute start and such, but AB feels really badly characterized. She is a caring pony and she's not so cruel as to genuinely want to hurt Silver just for spite.

The fic also just kinda ends with nothing being resolved. DT still doesn't know what's happening, Silver hasn't made any headway with dealing with her feelings for Mac. It feels like it's only half complete. sorry but I'm giving this a thumbs down. Still gonna check out your other works and I hope you understand.