I'm not quite sure what to say.....

Its your typical HiE story, so it wont go over well.

>>11043031104303 Be patient this is only the first chapters, thanks for the comment.

Spelling eorrors EVERWHERE!

still i get what ya mean and i like this, "Thing"

>>11058941105894 Yes I know spellin erorzz iz anoying XD "soreh"

>>11058671105867 I'm planning to shape it into a heart rate monitor "It escalate and then it went down again and then it went up again O_O and then a long beep......... and then back to normal XD"

You do know, That the main 6, ARE MARES?!

>>11119581111958 Yes is I know, did you see Grammar error? where is it

>>11119741111974 most of the time you say Him or His, Im just saying, Read it before you post.

>>11124371112437 Oh okay, I'll see if I can fix that by tomorrow.

all you need is an editor and you're golden

its being rushed alot not much diologe but it may have potentioul if you write it correctly also i cant write for shit...

>>11200601120060 Thank you, Actually my friend is editing but he doesn't really have much time to work on it so looks like we're stuck with the experimental one "for now"

>>11281951128195 Thanks, yeah it is actually being rushed I think I'll just decontaminate the whole Fanfic from bad grammar so this might take a week or so.