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Twilight,Lyra and the humans
Two girls venture Equestria
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The mistake of Twilight » Twilight,Lyra and the humans

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"Lyra?" a voice called out

The mare opened her eyes,it was morning already

"Lyra, hey, it's me. Wanna try the portal again?" asked twilight

As if a rocket, Lyra bolted out of her bed and jumped with glee.

"Ohmygawsh!" She screamed

Twilight and Lyra trotted out of Bon bon's house after breakfast

"Hey!Hey! Twilight! Ya think this is gonna work!? Huh!? Hey!" the jolly mare asked

"Ohohoh, calm down Lyra. Let's just hope it will!" Twilight said, reassuringly

When they arrive at Twilight's Library, Lyra smelled something....funny

Twilight opened the door and there is was...a pot with green slime oozing out

".......Ew...." Lyra spitted out" What is this thing!?" she demanded an answer

"Don't worry! I will and shall MAKE A PORTAL!" Twilight shouted out like a battle cry

Within minutes, the two mares stood in front of the green slime

"Lyra, I can't do this alone. Help me with your magic"

Their horns glowed, blue-green and purple, side by side.

"READY?" twilight shouted

"I AM OH-SO READY!"

Immediately, their horns let out a bright light. Within seconds, there was a blast. Then they both blacked out.

This time it was real, humans..

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StayOuttaMyShed

#1 · 39w, 14h ago ·

Humans come to Equestria because Twilight botched a spell......oh yeah, because that concept has NEVER been used before :ajbemused:

tnuyum

#2 · 39w, 12h ago ·

I'm sorry, but this is weak.

Little_Draco

#3 · 39w, 10h ago ·

HUMANS!!! What a waste!

Snapple Jack

#4 · 39w, 6h ago ·

Over used story idea is totally not over used at all.

fwe

#5 · 39w, 5h ago ·

>>11111071111107 No offence, but, do you compliment people in order to advertise your page? :P

SageLovesLuna

#6 · 39w, 5h ago ·

>>11124751112475 I'm sorry, but out of everything you guys think, advertising is surely not one of them.... i mean that. :ajsleepy: :fluttercry:

fwe

#7 · 39w, 5h ago ·

>>11125301112530 That's cool :3

fwe

#8 · 39w, 5h ago ·

The characters aren't to be fully believable.

fwe

#9 · 39w, 5h ago ·

This isn't really THAT bad :D

SageLovesLuna

#10 · 39w, 5h ago ·

>>11125411112541 Okay thanks. ugh im sooo sorry. what i did was srsly wrong. and it wasnt for advertisement e-e thanks for being cool about it. DEFINETELY not happening again!

Snapple Jack

#11 · 39w, 5h ago ·

>>11125301112530 Really? I mean, you post the same comment on every single bad story I've read. And I mean, it's the same. Nothing changes.

think you did a great job with this fanfic, congrats! But it has a lot of errors and the usual common typos in there, just some minor mishaps is all... I give it 2.5 stars. I don't usually comment on stories, only first timers, and the most I have read are only 3 stars worth. But great job BTW!

Please, could you be kind enough and return the favor by reading, favouriting and liking my stories? Thank you so much...

And be sure to watch me and check out my userpage.

I think you know what you're doing. Stop making excuses. Because you're only drawing people away from your story when you do this. Nobody likes it. So stop. Also, 'cuz YOLO? Really? I thought bronies were smarter than this. Do something about this or I'm officially labeling you as 'cuntsled'

SageLovesLuna

#12 · 39w, 4h ago ·

>>11127021112702 Idk 'cuz yolo is something i just put lol sorry if u hate it.. I'm not a bad person, and i made a mistake. but this story wasnt that bad! :twilightblush: