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Spike is a kind, loyal, selfless dragon. To many, he's not only Twilight's number one assistant, but rather an assistant to the entire town. Tragedy strikes when the adolescent succumbs to a fatal illness. It hits the townsfolk hard, especially Twilight Sparkle.
Sulking in her own despair, the faithful student asks herself the same, fruitless question: 'How does one cope with losing their only son?'
My reaction while reading this story:
Thanks for posting this story. I enjoyed reading it and noticing my family noticing me crying.
NOOOOOOOO!!!!!! Not Spike!
At some point while reading this I started laughing. It just got to the point where I thought "This is trying so hard to be as sad a possible, yet, this is about my little pony." I somehow found that funny. I'm going to hell for this.
Your writing was solid, and I don't have a soul, so I probably wouldn't have cared anyways. Good job.
vengence there will be vengence
changling base,kill everyone, kill chrisilys 
for you spike i will make sure they all die a very very slow and painful death i will not stop until i cleanse the land of there existence i will personally rip every single changling apart until they are all DEAD.
I think you did a great job with this fanfic, congrats! But it has a lot of errors and the usual common typos in there, just some minor mishaps is all... I give it 4 stars. I don't usually comment on stories, only first timers, and the most I have read are only 3 stars worth. But great job BTW!
Please, could you be kind enough and return the favor by reading, favouriting and liking my stories? Thank you so much...
And be sure to watch me and check out my userpage.
THANKS SOOOO MUCH
Hmmm... I see you focused more on current emotions instead of plot, although you made the situation clear.
And quite frankly, sometimes that really works for short-fics like these. Besides some spelling and grammatical errors here and there, this was done nicely. I could visualize well what was going on and what the characters looked like, especially over Spike's grave. Plus the scenario along with the characters' actions and reactions were believable and stayed true to who they were. All in all, while this is an unrelenting tear-jerker, it works and is well executed and an enjoyable read.
Personally, I didn't cry. I never do. Which doesn't surprise me considering some of the stuff I wrote as well as the fact that I didn't cry while reading MLD.
However, like I said, thats just me. And besides, a sad-fic really shouldn't be evaluated by the volume of its collected tears, but rather the quality and sincerity of the story and the emotions brought about by the writing. Which is why I think this is actually better than the sad stuff I wrote!
Keep Writing, Friend. 
Knew i shouldn't have read this tonight... Now i'ma be sad all night.
I cried.. i cried so much from this... i made the mistake of listening to this song while reading it.. and it made the tears just cascade down my face... My Little Dashie doesn't hold a candle to this when it comes to tears factor...
here is the song if you wish to listen to some fitting music for it
Great story..Faved and liked... Now excuse me while i go try to calm down...
Goodness, this was just so very touching...
That picture at the end made me cry harder than when I have to cut onions. Does that make sense?>>1100702 sir this fanfic has reminded me of many things today:
1. i do have heart
2. i do have emotions
3. i found how deep the hole in my heart is
4. i. am. human.
5. dont take those around you for grantit, for you'll regret it when they are gone
oh yeah and this songs fits this thing perfectily, since all things come to an end.
Good job, only complaint was the beginning was kind of forced. If you cut that out and just had the funeral and left the cause of death to the readers imagination this story would have been loads better. Beautiful funeral, the beginning shouldn't be there though.
Edit: As a side comment, I found the cause of death to be kinda on the spot. It seemed like you just wanted to come up with something and this is a time where details take away from the story.
So many manly tears have been shed this day
For all the people who shed manly tears.
Here is Luna doing the Moon Dance
"Many ponies stood out in the rain, allowing their manes to get drenched. Others had saddle umbrellas, black ones to be exact."
You got Rainbow Dash right over there, as well as most of Ponyville's weather team. Maybe you could, I don't know, CLEAR THE SKY? Or did they hold the ceremony in the rain on purpose? I know it's a bit traditional (or Clichéd) in fiction to have it rain or overcast during a funeral but come on! The weather team had a weather scheduel, so they could've at least looked ahead and chosen a bright, sunny day instead. It sounds to me like Spike wrote "Hold my funeral in the rain" into his will as a joke.
Otherwise, ya, it's a fine sob story.
It's fanfics like these were we see just how good this community can be at making us feel emotions of all sorts but espically sadness, perhaps because of how upbeat and cheerful the show usually is it becomes almost impossible for us to imagine the ponies or other beings ever being sad, until we read fics like these and we realize just how deeply these characters touch us and why we love the show so much! 
(Here's some music I think might contribute to the feel of this fic)
It's fanfics like these were we see just how good this community can be at making us feel emotions of all sorts but espically sadness, perhaps because of how upbeat and cheerful the show usually is it becomes almost impossible for us to imagine the ponies or other beings ever being sad, until we read fics like these and we realize just how deeply these characters touch us and why we love the show so much!
(Here's some music I think might contribute to the feel of this fic)
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