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    DerpyJr's Stories (4)

    • Innie
      Everpony discover Pinkie is a unicorn

      1,995 words · 681 views · 48 likes · 0 dislikes
    • Friends.
      You try to make friends as you deal with all the drama high school brings.
      3,957 words · 573 views · 55 likes · 2 dislikes
    • Rainbow Streaks
      Rainbow Dash love story
      11,188 words · 524 views · 29 likes · 2 dislikes
    • Change of Heart
      Pony hater gets sent to the MLP world
      2,729 words · 458 views · 23 likes · 2 dislikes

    Lorio, a slightly shy pegasus pony,  has had a crush on Rainbow Dash for some time now and is close to confessing his feelings to her, but when and old flame enters the scene things get...complicated.

    First Published
    16th Aug 2012
    Last Modified
    14th May 2013

    Comments ( 52 )

    #1 · Chapter 2 · 43w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I proper facepalmed when he said that line (you know what im talking about)

    #2 · Chapter 2 · 43w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I raged when he said that line.

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 43w, 5d ago · · ·
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    pretty cute :twilightsmile:

    a little rushed, but i am a pretty terrible writer so i can't judge :twilightsheepish:

    but i will keep reading! :pinkiehappy:

    #4 · Chapter 2 · 43w, 5d ago · · ·
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    a little grammar errors.. like past and present text mixes... and you said "the pink pony" a lot

    But still very cute :twilightsmile:

    #5 · Chapter 2 · 43w, 5d ago · · ·
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    DAT LINE XD

    ill keep watching

    #6 · Chapter 2 · 43w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Swag is pointless and overrated.

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 43w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Excellent! Bring another installment soon please i wanna know hwat happens next!!! :rainbowkiss::rainbowwild:

    #8 · Chapter 2 · 43w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Awww, cringe alert! He's not doing great yet, is he? :facehoof:

    #9 · Chapter 2 · 43w, 5d ago · 1 · ·
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    swag = facepalm.  I like the story but leave out the swag. did u know that in the mid 1900's swag was an acronym for 'Secretly We Are Gay'? so i wouldn't use it if I were you. :facehoof:

    #10 · Chapter 2 · 43w, 4d ago · · ·
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    i like this story

    #12 · Chapter 3 · 43w, 4d ago · · ·
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    DUN DUN DUUUUN!

    #13 · Chapter 3 · 43w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I bet lorio was all like 'you are bucking kidding me'

    #14 · Chapter 3 · 43w, 4d ago · · ·
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    crap. lol poor Lorio. He better watch out before Mach takes is mare haha.

    #15 · Chapter 3 · 43w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Lorio was getting to Dash, then up comes Mach blocking him

    #16 · Chapter 4 · 43w, 23h ago · · ·
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    BUM BUM BUMMMMMMM..... Now RD is truly the best in Equestria. :rainbowwild:  More please!!!!

    #17 · Chapter 4 · 43w, 20h ago · · ·
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    MOAR :flutterrage:... please:fluttershyouch:

    #18 · Chapter 4 · 43w, 7h ago · · ·
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    This story...I love it!

    #19 · Chapter 4 · 43w, 5h ago · · ·
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    The stallion's tone resembled that of a soldier who had survived a lost war. There was no hope, no need to keep going.

    I like that analogy.  I hope you know where your going with this because all the signs point to Dash & Mach romance, unless that's your aiming for?:applejackconfused:

    #20 · Chapter 4 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Dun dun duuuuuun!

    Also, MOAR!

    #21 · Chapter 5 · 41w, 5d ago · · ·
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    My awkwardness meter broke.

    #22 · Chapter 5 · 41w, 5d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiegasp: OH SNAP!

    #23 · Chapter 5 · 41w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I bet lorio was like 'aww crap'

    #24 · Chapter 5 · 41w, 5d ago · · ·
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    :rainbowderp:Nuts:facehoof: Cue awkward moment:applejackunsure:

    #25 · Chapter 5 · 41w, 5d ago · · ·
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    DIS GONNA BE GOOD YO!

    "Regains composer"

    I say dear chap, this chapter was absolutely ravishing, I look forward to reading another soon.

    #26 · Chapter 5 · 41w, 5d ago · · ·
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    #27 · Chapter 5 · 41w, 5d ago · · ·
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    YOU BETTER POST THE NEXT CHAPTER SOON! I WANNA KNOW WHAT RD SAYS!!!!.:rainbowdetermined2::rainbowdetermined2:

    #29 · Chapter 5 · 35w, 3d ago · · ·
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    WHERES THE NEXT CHAPTER!? :twilightangry2:

    #30 · Chapter 6 · 34w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Dun, Dun, DUUUUH!

    Tune in next time to see if Rainbowdash:

    a) punches him in the face

    B) Kisses him back

    C)Laughs in his face.

    I hope its B :rainbowwild:

    #31 · Chapter 6 · 34w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1486277 really, i hope its A because that would just be funny but B would be the best opion for this story

    #32 · Chapter 6 · 34w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1486676 Yeah, i went on the basis of 'whats best for the story' but A would be the first choice :rainbowlaugh:

    #33 · Chapter 6 · 34w, 1d ago · · ·
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    It's about damn time!

    #34 · Chapter 6 · 34w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I was kind of confused that she needed to apoligize to him just because she isn't into romance, but good story and writing :D

    #35 · Chapter 6 · 34w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Oh wait wait... I know. She totally needs to confess that she is a lesbian. That would make my day :rainbowlaugh:

    #36 · Chapter 6 · 34w, 1d ago · · ·
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    TEH FEELS!

    :3 You updated! Best. Person. Ever!

    #37 · Chapter 6 · 34w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Yay I'm so happy!!!!!!!!!:yay:

    (I think your update gave me a nose bleed :facehoof:)

    #38 · Chapter 7 · 29w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Waiting for the next chapter of this was almost as anticipating season 3. Quicken yourself, junior. :scootangel:

    #39 · Chapter 7 · 29w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1673413

    Actually, I'm thinking about cancelling Rainbow Streaks to concentrate on my other stories, but thanks for keeping up with RS I appreciate it :twilightsmile:

    #40 · Chapter 7 · 29w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1675139

    Don't youu dare cancel this. I have been anticipating the end of the story for months!

    Its the main reason I'm watching you. :applecry:

    #41 · Chapter 7 · 29w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1675593

    Well I do hate it when a story I'm following just gets drop so I can't really do that to my own story, especially my first one. I'm just as curious as you are as to how this will end so I guess I'll do my best to keep it interesting for everyone. :twilightsheepish:

    #42 · Chapter 7 · 29w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1675694

    Good. I don't have to use this.

    *Holsters Peacemaker*

    #43 · Chapter 7 · 29w, 11h ago · · ·
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    DON'T CANCEL THIS STORY!!!!!  I wait for the next chapter in this story all the time. PLEASE DON"T CANCEL IT!!!!!! :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

    #44 · Chapter 7 · 28w, 5h ago · · ·
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    DUDE PLEASE DON'T CANCEL! I love OCxDashie works, and this is one of the better ones.

    #45 · Chapter 7 · 24w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Bravo! Well done! :pinkiehappy:

    But PLEASE Don't cancel this awesome story! :fluttercry:

    I hope to see more in the future! :rainbowdetermined2:

    -Darwin

    #46 · Chapter 8 · 5w, 1d ago · · ·
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    YAY ITS BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    #47 · Chapter 8 · 5w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I am glad you didn't cancel it. It is still a good story to read.

    #48 · Chapter 8 · 5w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Huh, 18 wingpower, well...

    #49 · Chapter 8 · 5w, 9h ago · · ·
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    Ohhhhh snap

    #50 · Chapter 9 · 5w, 8h ago · · ·
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    Rainbow wasn't the self-proclaimed fastest flyer in Ponyville; it was a simple fact.

    I think you either meant was or planned to add a for no reason before that semicolon.

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