Lorio, a slightly shy pegasus pony, has had a crush on Rainbow Dash for some time now and is close to confessing his feelings to her, but when and old flame enters the scene things get...complicated.
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I proper facepalmed when he said that line (you know what im talking about)
pretty cute ![]()
a little rushed, but i am a pretty terrible writer so i can't judge
but i will keep reading! ![]()
a little grammar errors.. like past and present text mixes... and you said "the pink pony" a lot
But still very cute
Excellent! Bring another installment soon please i wanna know hwat happens next!!! ![]()
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swag = facepalm. I like the story but leave out the swag. did u know that in the mid 1900's swag was an acronym for 'Secretly We Are Gay'? so i wouldn't use it if I were you. ![]()
crap. lol poor Lorio. He better watch out before Mach takes is mare haha.
Lorio was getting to Dash, then up comes Mach blocking him
BUM BUM BUMMMMMMM..... Now RD is truly the best in Equestria.
More please!!!!
The stallion's tone resembled that of a soldier who had survived a lost war. There was no hope, no need to keep going.
I like that analogy. I hope you know where your going with this because all the signs point to Dash & Mach romance, unless that's your aiming for?![]()
DIS GONNA BE GOOD YO!
"Regains composer"
I say dear chap, this chapter was absolutely ravishing, I look forward to reading another soon.
The Awkwardness is over 9000!
YOU BETTER POST THE NEXT CHAPTER SOON! I WANNA KNOW WHAT RD SAYS!!!!.![]()
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Dun, Dun, DUUUUH!
Tune in next time to see if Rainbowdash:
a) punches him in the face
B) Kisses him back
C)Laughs in his face.
I hope its B ![]()
I was kind of confused that she needed to apoligize to him just because she isn't into romance, but good story and writing :D
Oh wait wait... I know. She totally needs to confess that she is a lesbian. That would make my day ![]()
Yay I'm so happy!!!!!!!!!![]()
(I think your update gave me a nose bleed
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Waiting for the next chapter of this was almost as anticipating season 3. Quicken yourself, junior. ![]()
DON'T CANCEL THIS STORY!!!!! I wait for the next chapter in this story all the time. PLEASE DON"T CANCEL IT!!!!!! ![]()
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DUDE PLEASE DON'T CANCEL! I love OCxDashie works, and this is one of the better ones.
Bravo! Well done! ![]()
But PLEASE Don't cancel this awesome story! ![]()
I hope to see more in the future! ![]()
-Darwin
I am glad you didn't cancel it. It is still a good story to read.
Rainbow wasn't the self-proclaimed fastest flyer in Ponyville; it was a simple fact.
I think you either meant was or planned to add a for no reason before that semicolon.







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