How come this doesn't have most veiws? Amazing so far! Can't wait for more.

Looks interesting, and I like the characterization so far. Especially Twilight timing it all down to the last second. The affection between the siblings was also well done. I'll be keeping an eye on this! I want to see where y'all plan on taking it. You're off to a good start.

Hum not bad

Interesting; doesn't deserve those blind downvotes.

Interesting, I will give it a read. Also, don't mind the down votes. They don't really mean anything, but a bunch of people trying to start a riot or have you give up on trying. Just laugh and keep smiling.

From hell, to you, and back again,

Soto Konoha

Loving it! I hope to see more from this story!

Let's see where this goes.

Also, some things. First, get an editor, or at least be able to look over your work for minor errors. Second, try putting more space between the paragraphs.

I think you're doing a brilliant job thus far. Keep going

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Was there anything specific you noticed? I'm always striving for perfection. I actually do have an editor who prefers I not credit her. I saw I missed an indentation on one of Rarity's quotations, but that was all I noticed as far as editing errors. I also keep the paragraphs spaced as they are as that's standard formatting for publication. But I'm always open to suggestions, and I appreciate your feedback.

Awesome story so far. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Good characterization. Should be a fun read.

>>10888411088841 <- This one has good advice

That was something I noticed as well but forgot to mention. Adding a space between paragraphs would help a lot for the structure of the story, and it's presentation. A lot of people won't read blocks of text. I usually don't, but was willing to give it a shot since it sounded interesting at least.

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I've broken up the text now, so hopefully people will have an easier time reading. I just assumed that adding indentations was enough, as that's how novels and the like are formatted, but whatever is most appealing to readers is fine with me.

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That's understandable, and I agree that it makes sense since books do that. All I can figure to explain the whole spaces between paragraphs thing, is that computer monitors tend to be wider than a book, and reading on the internet requires scrolling down which isn't a problem for books. So it's easier to retain your spot and follow what's happening with the spaces.

I'm totally just guessing off the top of my head here, I hadn't given it much thought outside of Reading block of text << less  enjoyable than << Reading spaced text

It looks interesting so far ^^ Hope the next few chapters are a bit longer though, around 3K words

I also like the characterization in here, mostly Twilight, hehe... keep it up!

Hmm, intriguing. And Appledash, you say? Solid start so far, definitely gonna look out for more - keep up the good work

Amazing perfect story love it so so so so so so so so much its exceptionaltastic

Lots of emotion here, well written emotion too.

Very well written. Love it. I could see myself there. Not sure why the lack of hits.

Oh man, I've been wondering if this would update. Fantastic work you have here, worth the wait and no errors from what I could tell. Can't wait to see where this goes.

I don't understand why stories like these don't get featured. However, this was a beautiful read Thumbs up and faved.

Thanks for the support guys, I really appreciate it!

Took me too long to get around to reading this. Beautiful. I can't wait for more.

Finally read it

Finally happy

I read this yesterday on my ereader and there's been one thing that was bothering me...

I DIDN'T REVIEW IT!

Ahem. Let me begin.

I didn't find any grammar mistakes that stood out, so you've passed the first test. The characterization in this story is superb, with little to no OOC-ness. Check. Creative use of AppleDash, which was something I also liked. Check. (Drunk ponies don't happen often!) And the way RD asked AJ out was fantastic. Check! (Most of the AppleDash stories here are of which AJ asks RD out, not the other way around.) Here's a gem:

“Of course. We’re best friends, I know when something’s bugging you,” Dash replied, crossing her forelegs. “I know I was pushing your buttons all night,” she acknowledged, “and I’m sorry about that. Just my pigheaded way of flirting, I guess. But rejecting you like that was just mean, and I never, ever want to see you hurt, especially because of me.”

Applejack could think of nothing to say that did not sound hollow or corny in response, and instead found herself chuckling drunkenly.

“Y’know, I’m sort of bearing my soul here, Applejack, the least you could do is keep a straight face.”

I had fun reading it; here's a favorite and I'm hoping you write more AppleDash in the future!

I love how you've witten this.

Often time is is very poetic and emotional, but what's really refreshing is how gruff it is.  How you've handled drunken Applejack is very realistic and refreshingly... honest xD

And as a bonus, who cansay no to some good FlutterMac?

Anyways, as far as a one shot goes, excellent, excellent work here

“You’ve always understood me better than anypony; you call me on my bullshit and keep me grounded.”

Probably my favorite line of dialogue in this chapter. Please keep writing.

The only reason I registered was so I could keep up with this story, you've written it in an amazing fashion, keep it up :)

EDIT: Didn't realize that it was already complete :( still loved it though, this pairing is the best!

I am loving the characterization happening here! Keep going, please!

Ohh my Celestia! Never stop writing! This story is brilliant and so good! I was literally crying tears! You have an amazing talent!