Please, if you find any errors, point them out to me. I didn't edit this as thoroughly as I would've liked to. I'd also love to hear your opinion on this so far. I know it's not that great, but I'd like to hear what I could improve on. Enjoy!

I think it's great so far! Keep it up!

It seems pretty good to me. Not sure I like the whole hisband thing, or the Dopted daughter. We'll have to see how that plays out in the story, bit for now, I kike and and am tracking.

>>10883901088390

Those two things you mentioned, Night Hooves and Sparkler being adopted, are definitely a pretty big part of the story. Can't say much about Night, except that I tried to make him as obnoxious and bad OC-ish as possible. Thanks for the fav, and I hope you're not disappointed with the future chapters!

Awesome! Doctor Whooves!

Opinion: Great story, can't wait to read more, and will follow this!

Critical Opinion mode on: This might just be me, but it seems to me that the very beginning moved to fast (and what is up with him crash landing?   )

>>10884111088411 I won't say he's a bad oc, because you always want characters to be fully developed if possible. And I think maybe if you could break his rant up just a little, saying somsthing about throwing his head or snorting in anger or something, but you've written it really well so far and deserve a lot of attention for this story.

>>10884381088438

Thank you, and fixed.

You better get writing boy....Otherwise Ima have to kidnap you and force you to write.

Mistake alert! The doctor said "Why am did I regenerate" Doesn't make sense. It's near the bottom.

>>10884931088493

*girl. Also, got it, boss! *salutes* Let's see, my goal for the next chapter is to write at least 2,000 words. So far I've written...10. Well, only 1,990 to go!

>>10885111088511 Well hurry it up. My former threat still stands.

>>10885021088502

Oh wow, that's embarrassing . Good eye. Fixed!

>>10885261088526

I'll keep that in mind when I try to sleep tonight.

>>10885331088533 NO! NO SLEEPING! JUST WRITING!

>>10885491088549

G-got it, boss! Must...write...and not...sleep...*snores*

>>10885581088558 Excellent...

>>10884931088493

I'll help!

he swallowed the key

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Well played.

Read it.

>>10981981098198

Took the words right out of my mouth!

Nice.

so awesome

It was a great chapter! I loved it. It's okay about the updates, school starts soon for me too, so I understand that. Just get them as fast as you can. I love this story so far, and this keeps getting better. I still haven't firgued out the general plot, which is weird.

Ow I guess swallowing a key should hurt... But ponies have big mouths... Heh...

Also whoa plot twist

Sparky sounds like a cute nickname XD

Hope you enjoyed the latest chapter! I'll try to get the next one out a little quicker. Just wondering, should I change the rating to Teen?

I'm going to say yes...it's getting a bit dark for an 'everyone' story.

I loved the twist on this one. Poor Dinky, half changeling...that's going to be interesting. The entire chapter was great, and well worth the wait. They seem to pass so quickly, but I love them all the same. And I love your characterizations of the characters. I hope we find out why Sparkler won't call Derpy and Dinky mother and sister (respectively).

Here, have a Scoot.

Once I read the part where "Doctor" and Derpy left Carrot Top and started reading the next part I stopped, closed my laptop and shouted out loud "CHANGELING!!!!!"

Unfortunately my dad was walking down the stairs when I saw that so he got startled then stared at me..

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That's a Dramatic Turn of Events.

MUST Track.

Oh Boy. Shit 'bout to get real.

Oh no...I hope she's at least put with Derpy.

"Braytish." I have no idea why that's so funny.

Carrot Top: MY CABBAGES!

Excuse my cursing but;

HOLY SHIT.

Sparkler NUUUUUUUUUUU!

Hehe... Braytish. I guess America will become A-mare-ica.

Yay new chapter! :D

Another great chapter! Huzzah! Loved it.

This story really should have more reviews.  It feels just like an episode of Doctor Who.  Though I must say, i can't read this in any of the real doctors' voices.  I have to read it in the pony "Doctor's Assistant" voice from that Youtube video.  Not that that's a problem.  This will be added to my reading list

I lol'd with the "We're stuck here".

AHHAHAHA. I like how Chrysalis tried and failed do what The Master managed....

The Master: Now, then, Doctor! Oooh, new voice. Hello, hellooo, helllloooo! Anyway... why don't we sit down and have a nice little chat where I can tell you all my plans and you can work out a way to stop me, I don't think!

Can I juat tell you something? This story is awesome. I loved this update and I'm totally ready for the next.

I love this story so much

And the plot thickens!

No errors that I spotted.

Awesomenessssss

Wha...but I..and then...wha?

Amazing story, truely. And these updates keep getting better and better. Honestly, I love this.

im going to make a guess and say the master is back

I was loving this. Up until now. The whole creature inside Dinky I could have lived with, it think, but the monolouge at the end and the fact that the only people stronger than it are Princess Celestia, Twi, and the Doctor compeltely throw me off. I can see him saying the Princesses, totally, and maybe even the Doctor, but Twi and no Luna is really weird, at least to me.

And honestly, it's not only that either. The whole thing has just gotten awkward to read for me. I think this was a great idea, but now it feels like a whole other story than the one we started on and...I dunno. I loved it all up until this chapter, and I do actually like this chapter, but it just seems...too much, if that makes any sense. Still, good writing. You've done really well.