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“Now if I let you see this place/Where stories all ring true/Will you let me past your face/To see what's really you.” –The Outlaws, “Green Grass And High Tides”
After a visit from two of the Apple siblings, Rarity seems to be taken by the silent stallion. But can she actually prove to Big Mac that she's not a delicate pony?
Just warning you, I'm bad at reviews, so.. yeah. 
I'll start with the bad..
I've noticed many typos- you probably want to go over it several times out loud before publishing.
Also, what the hay happened with her walkin' away from everypony? I saw in just the beginning of the next chapter that AJ acted all friendly to Rarity.. shouldn't she be angry that she ran off and took Big Mac with her? 
And remember- Big Mac is a colt of few words.
Now onto the good..
I really, really like this story. I'm definitely going to keep track of it. Or favorite it. Or whatever. 
Yay~
I don't know how to pull apart the good.. but I'll try.
..
*has tried over and over*
Okay, I can't. 
But I really do love this story!
Also, sorry for the long comment. I just type.. vertically.
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
I loved this story. 
There were parts I didn't, but AWWW I just love it so much.
You've got talent~! 
WRITE TONS.
Of course, my opinion probably doesn't mean much- I think almost every story is a good one, unless it's horrendously bad. 
Oh well~
*claps* 
you know, right there at the ending I got confused by Mac's words, and thought it would en in "And then they fucked". dunno why, just thought about it, happened to me before, read a good story that ended with that phrase. 
anyway, I was glad to see the story ended in a good way, it deserved and ending like that, it was a good story that I really liked
gotta love 
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Maybe 'to' instead of 'turn'?
I'm so excited, but I'll have to read it later. 
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