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EternalShadow54


Just a guy trying out his luck at writing.

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Twilight and the gang have settled down in their later adult lives, the lavender mare married and with a beautiful daughter named Starlight Glow. Things couldn't be better, and Glow was going to her very first day of school! Well... until things happen...

-ONE SHOT-

Special thanks to my friend F. Venka for helping me with Starlight's name, and convincing me to post this! Inspired by a song from Skillet. Guess it, and win a free cookie! (Except Venka... you already know...)

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So I decided to try my hoof at something JUST sad, and thus, this was born into exsistence.:rainbowlaugh: Let me know what you think!

Well, I think it's far too short. At least it's too short for me, in my eyes just a nameless pony died.
I don't know more than her name, don't know her father, how she grew up, character trait's, anything really. The story boils down to "Twilight had a child that died on the first school day". That in itself isn't bad, many great story's can be reduced to a single sentence but your story lacks all the description.

Btw, today is the first school day here and the first for my nephew :twilightsmile:

Right in the heart area, would be the heart if I had one :twilightsmile: Anyway you did well. Good job.

it was very good and sad and the name song i do beleve is lucy right?

This caught my attention... But I'll read it tomorrow... I hope you give me the goosebumps~ :pinkiehappy:

"Not anymore..."

That's just terrible... :rainbowlaugh:

Aww, no cookies for me...?

Well, I think I already told you this, but this story actually made me go 'why can't I hold all these feels'. There's something, something I can't really explain, in it...
But anyway, Ilike this~ And I'm guessing most folks read it will as well...
(Don't prove me wrong...)

And again, no cookies?

I liked this story and its going on my favorite list. As someone said its kinda short and we don't know much about her daughter. But seeing as im the emotional type i still found myself having a hard time keeping back a few tears. :raritycry:

Aww. The only thing is that we don't know this character, Starlight Glow, well enough to feel sympathy or dread for her horrid demise at school. All that we know is that she is Twilight's daughter. Though perhaps this is not about her but about Twilight, I cannot feel sympathy for Twilight because we, as readers, did not get enough time with her daughter well, or better yet, her moments being with her daughter; we got some, but they were short and only had dialogue. So it's hard to have any emotion, but I did feel bad for Twilight, losing her kid who was so young.

1078363>>1079556>>1079744 I know the story in itself is VERY short, but this is just something I kinda threw together in an hour or so.:pinkiecrazy: Which I didn't think it was too bad for such a short amount of time.:pinkiehappy: BUT I will keep your comments to heart if I decide to write something truly sad.

1079324 No Venka... no cookie for you...

1079000 :pinkiecrazy: I'm awful aren't I?

1078374 Correct! Great... now I gotta go bake you a cookie... or buy you one... or whatever...:ajbemused:

Thanks for the comments! Really, you don't know how much of a confidence booster that is for me... :pinkiesad2:

Ah, this was a nice story. While I somewhat agree with Langly and DarkAngelx, I liked this story a lot. It was fun to have a short little read, and it did bring tears to my eyes.

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That line was the sole reason I faved this story. Because it's so :facehoof: that it's funny.

1080195 :rainbowlaugh: I know what you mean.:scootangel:

1080127 :scootangel: Well see, I wanted to write something with impact, but with as little words as possible. Main reason it's JUST over 1,000 words.:pinkiecrazy:

While I normally despise OC's, this fic was good. :rainbowkiss:

I cried. Well, I would have cried, since I can't cry, but it was good. You read my stories, now I read yours. Thank you. Thank you for writing this.:raritycry:

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:twilightsmile: Glad you enjoyed it so. :rainbowlaugh: Giving your second story a look at now.:derpytongue2: Thanks for the comment.:pinkiehappy:

That final line is what did it, I’m to emotional to be a rebel

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