Looks pretty cool mate

Aww fuck yeah

Did Taupe just die?

Yep Taupe died.

>>12128231212823 I dont think he did, I think this is when he saved applejack in the train then it gets wrecked. Me thinks this started around there.

>>12129161212916

ahh.  I still think he died, since this is a SEQUEL.

lets see how it plays out, eh?

...You never finished I would give to you so how can we have a sequel?

Not that I'm complaining, I love your work man.

You had better not have done to Taupe what  I think you just did to Taupe.

>>12129891212989

Nah, this is the big announcement that hasn't happened yet in IWGtY, so it isn't really breaking anything timeline-wise.

"A romantic pen pal" eh? This sounds like it could get interesting. And Rarity is best pony, so I can't wait to dig in.

Although it would be nice to see how I would give you ends as well.

new story. coolio.

Goodie, another story! And now I'm the last Changeling? Sounds interesting, I wonder if Rarity will still be infatuated if she finds out...

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In I would give you, the Mane Six and the pegasus protagonist visit a heavilly injured (albeit still alive) Taupe in this hospital. This is in direct contradiction to previous testimony!

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>>12128231212823

>>12140061214006

>>12132141213214

Taupe does die, but he is revived in the hospital moments later, after being teleported to the hospital.  You don't have all the evidence.  Read the scene where Taupe passes out after the train crash, and you'll see that you are brought back in the hospital.

>>12129161212916  You got it.

>>12140661214066 ..... The faq

I like the story so far

Alright. Let's do this shit.

Wow Nice story cant wait to read the next chapter

>>12140661214066

"You don't have all the evidence"

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In all seriousness, though, great story so far. I really get the feeling I'm going to like this protagonist.

Hold on a minute. I love where this could go, but one thing…

In the first chapter I/we/He saw Her at the palace and had, quote, "… nearly every facet of the mare memorized, and she quickly became a focal point for you.". But now he doesn't remember how Rarity looks? Did misinterpret something?

>>12190471219047  It's been a few years for 'you'...  I need to do some editing here, I'll admit.  For now, ignore incongruousness like that.  I'll take care of it when I really get started with this story.

Ah, we finally get to meet ourselves.  Well, the stallion mentioned in the last fic ar least.

I can't have been the only one whose first reaction was, "You killed me! I can't believe you just killed me!"

I uhh... have 1 question. In chapter one, Quill and Rarity met at a royal meeting, or Quill at least saw her, which started the infatuation. It said, "She had a beautiful coat, and her mane was even more beautiful than her coat was.  You couldn’t recall the events of that meeting, but you knew that it was serious. By the end of the meeting you had nearly every facet of the mare memorized, and she quickly became a focal point for you."

So, why in chapter 2 does he not know what Rarity looks like?

Mistake: Celestia said "Hero's tend to be noticed".  Heroes would be the proper one to use in this context

>>12229301222930  Yes, I know.

It's been a few years for 'you'...  I need to do some editing here, I'll admit.  For now, ignore incongruousness like that.  I'll take care of it when I really get started with this story.

-Jet Howitzer, said in a previous comment

I need to check up on things like that.  It's probably because I wrote this while incredibly tired, and I just wanted to get it out while it was fresh, sort of, in my mind.

>>12230011223001  Yeah, I fixed that in my word document, but I think I did it after copying it over...  Oops.

>>12233881223388 Ah, I see, I somehow missed this already being addressed

Anyways, that aside, I'm really looking forwards to more of this story, and I would give to you too!

Well fuck. Now scootaloo is dead in 4 fics. Dammit all

>>12264141226414  Wat?  Scootaloo isn't dead.

In the storm story she died

>>12264571226457  No.  She died in the non-canon version of that chapter.  She isn't dead.  Since this story takes place after the events of Apples, and IWGtY, she can't be dead.  Since she appears in those stories.

My one quip that hasn't already been touched on in the comments is that in the first chapter Tumble says he has "people to see." I didn't know Tumble had the power to walk between universes; he must be quite the magician.

Other than that, this seems to be going well, just as I expected. I'll be tracking this fic as well.

>>12264881226488  Tumble's a pretty powerful guy.  One does not mess with Tumble.

>>12264941226494

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>>12265131226513  Actually,  Storm does just that.  Albeit he kind of runs into it, but that's just a matter of semantics.

Seems legit

>>12265241226524

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>>12265581226558  Yeah, sorry.

>>12140661214066

YES!

FUCK YES!

anyways, I really think you should make him feel conficted, in the sense that he is really just a tool of Celestia's, to be disposed of when he is no longer useful.

But thats my take on things anyways.

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Oh, don't worry, I can't stay mad at you.

>>12265711226571

So I'm guessing this, and I Would Give to You are going to link up at some point before you begin to finish I Would Give to You?  Maybe with joint chapters where you give the details from each of "our" perspectives?  

>>12264621226462i already told leaf that she isn't dead. He wont listen...

For some reason, i keep remembering MLD

I think he is going to be okay.

>>12140061214006 lol omg i love pheonix wright and i agree i've read all 3 stories and taupe is in the hospital but still very much alive

PHEONIX WRIGHT FTW!!!

Great so far, I'm really liking how you're managing to juggle,like,4 stories at once, AND to link them into one big epic ball of pony awesome!

read first paragraph and relises "im" a changling.

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You could only name one of them: the lavender unicorn who you knew to be called Twilight.  Other than that, you had no clue which one was Rarity.

How does he not know which one is Rarity?  Chapter 1 said he saw her in person at an important meeting about stolen artifacts (even taking the time to memorize the details about her), and he got her address from Celestia after inquiring about her.  Even if it had been years between then, surely he would've remembered what her coat color was since he was stricken instantly by her beauty.

>>12899641289964  Yes, I know.  I need to go back and change a few things about this story.  To be fair, I wrote both chapters a bit quicker than I usually write, and so I may have made a few mistakes.  With IWGtY nearly complete this story will soon be the focus of my attention, and once this is done I'll be shifting back to Rising Sun, in the hopes of finishing it.

Well. Taupe died. damn.

>>13005671300567 Why you no read previous comments.

Oh. and you still remember that howie? im not sure whether to be happy that you still remembered or insulted that you still remember

i am now revoking my commenting privileges after 2 complete fails on my part

So you're going back to Rising Sun after this eh?

No Pinkie/Fluttershy stories leading up to the final story that reveals this hidden asshat or anything? Or will you get back to those once Rising Sun is done?

>>13011311301131  Fret not, sir, I will do Pinkie and Fluttershy after Faux Pas, likely in that order, too.  The rewrite of Rising Sun is just something to keep my writing fresh.  Too much of one story and I tend to burn out in the creativity department.  Little secret:  I actually started writing for I Would Give to You about halfway through The Color of Apples, and I started Faux Pas even sooner in I Would Give to You.  If I write a single story for too long I lose my ability to craft what you see before you.

TL;DR

I'm not going to leave Fluttershy or Pinkie out.

i was reading this with this

Yes! I am caught up with your stories now! ...and now we play the waiting game....

BTW. How does one pronounce "Faux pas" is it pronounced "Foe paw" ?

>>13063291306329  That's generally how I say it.

>>13020141302014

You can fix loss of crafting ability by taking a log, splitting it into four planks, and assembling them into a crafting bench in your inventory screen.

>>13090611309061  Shit, really?  I thought for sure that I'd have to murder ten thousand creepers, and then sacrifice their souls to an enderman so that he might appease the ender dragon.  Although I do tend to look at things in a more complicated fashion than is warranted.

>>13090721309072

It's all good, once I went and made a Blaze grinding machine in the Nether to harvest enough XP to get myself a silk touch pickaxe, then I was confused when it didn't work on snow.

And I had a shovel in the next slot, too.

Oh for the love of Luna, please keep making more!!!!

Also, I believe that Taupe is in the hospital on life support.

yay! :D but this has left me feeling sad for quill :(

...was that a Shrek reference with the waffles? If so, then me gusta.

Posted on my birthday,thanks

yesh. chapter of epical epacalnesses.

the waffles shall be exquisite

>"While you’re physical beauty"

Yeah, might wanna fix that.

WAFFLES

>>13143491314349

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>>13142761314276

EGG-MILKING-ZACKTLY!

>>13142761314276

this was two links away....

A - FUCK YEAH, WAFFLES!

B - Quill's real name is Carapace. Calling it right here.

You're brilliant, oh yes you are, I believe I shall continue following this I simply cannot disengage myself from it.

Oh! before i forget. Here's a duck

The next morning...

>>13154651315465 No way, that's almost too obvious. Jet normally makes the protagonist have names characteristic of their personality, but still.

I'm going to hold out and hope his name is Carlos.

>>13145221314522

But she is physical beauty!

>>13160861316086  Shit, looks like you guessed it.  Now I'll have to change it to something less obvious....

I'm guessing that things are going to go sour between Rarity and Quill. Considering the title literally translates to False Step of the Heart.

>>13168681316868 Who knows, maybe Carlos is a regular changeling name--at least for those non-drones who have names.

“Oh, stop it you."

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Cara... MEL!

The most unexpected changeling name in history!

"And in the morning, I’m making waffles!”

Ancient references for the win!

Dear Celestia it is about Rarity. My least favorite... -sigh- Let's get this over with. I don't care for Rarity, but I love your stories, so I guess it's time to be subjected to Rarity's romance. But who knows. Maybe you'll have written Rarity out so well that I may actually start to like her.

And on another note. Why is this story three chapters in and still hasn't been featured? I smell blasphemy! (haven't read yet, but both of your stories have been featured, so I'm going to assume this one will as well. Still can't read 'cause it's time for school. Damn it.)

>>13308361330836  Truth be told, it has been featured.  Twice, I believe.  As for Rarity, I'll be honest, she's my least favorite of the main 6.  However, part of being an author is dealing with difficult characters, and that's Rarity, for me.  I think that what I've got planned will show her in a better light, and will let me do a bit of character development on her part, but maybe I'm just being optimistic.  Either way, I think that I'll do a passable job with Rarity.

>>13309731330973All right, well I'm gonna finish my homework then I'll get to reading it. And I don't think it has been featured. How do you know when your work has been featured? Does a moderator pm you or something?

Alright, good first chapter of story. And I totally feel for Quill. I know what it feels like to show up somewhere and be blamed 'cause of something someone's said about me.

>>13328851332885  Nah, you just have to watch for it.  

>>13345231334523Right. Well, I doubt I will ever have to worry about that. My writing might be on par with some featured works, but nobody ever leaves comments. And with my most recent story, it hasn't even gotten 100 views. And it's been out for about half a month. At the moment I feel like the only people I'm writing it for are my friends in real life who are helping me write it.

>>13345651334565 that sucks man I write my stories to get better with writhing in general (I have a writing disability <mostly handwriting tho>) I think I'm doing pretty good now but to be honest I need work that's why I keep trying and I get better (also I would update chapters frequently to a. Not upset regular readers b. get on the latest updates page more often)

>>13354871335487

Your not alone. If I'm not mistaken, it's called Disgraphia, or at least, that's what I have. Luckily though, I haven't been doing too bad lately.

>>13345651334565

Nor are you. Surprisingly though, I haven't been too bad. Just need longer chapters or more often chapters.

I should probably check out more stories rather than just the featured ones too, starting with one of my commentators and I can help out with yours as well.

>>13345231334523

Final thing, lol. Great work so far. Loving all your stories and can't wait to see what else you can do with this one. Keep it up.

>>13465911346591 I don't know all I know is that I'm on an IEP for writing and my hand writing is about as ledgible as a pharmacist

>>13465911346591Thanks. I'm trying to write down the next chapter of my newest story, but it's slow going.

>>13466241346624

Same. Not sure what IEP stands for though.

>>13468341346834

No problem. Procrastination at it's finest for me.

>>134708134708 it means individualized education plan!

My mom is an intervention specialist

yay! i love waffles!

Dude awesome fic Cant wait for next chapter... now featuring

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>>13703021370302  The next chapter is in progress now.  Don't know how long till it's up, though.

>>13703061370306Awesome to hear . Really well done so far man. I'm really interested to see how Quill's relationship will work out with Rarity. You know what they say about lies and hidden identities in relationships... the truth always comes out at the least opportune time.